You can pick you friends but you can't pick family. This is all to true for Spike, Twilight can be a thorn in his side somtimes. "Get up it's amost noon." or "You didn't do it right, do it again." Or "Try this new potion out, don't worry this time you wont spontaneously combust this time." or she just wont give doesn't listen to him. It can get him so angry sometimes, but at the end of the day, they're still family. But what will happen when Spike and Twilight find out that a mentally broken dragon is Spike's blood related sister?
It's labeled sex because Spike's sister isn't very used to pony life.
Chapters (2)
What the hell is "subern"?
4609112 it was corrected, friend.
you are completely right.
So many misspelled words it hurt.
It's not A-Sap. It's ASAP. As in, As Soon As Possible.
But anyway, still a good idea and the pacing's better than mine! You kind of lost me at the Twilight taking notes part but still, good job!
4609573 yeah... I ran this through word but I guess it didn't help much, but that part with Twilight just makes me feel wrong.
Get a proof reader. I must have missed the Anthro tag because I was about to say that Spike and the ponies are usually naked.
a few grammar errors but I like the story ill watch for now and thumbs up
LOLOL HOLE HER
4610411 if you can find the time, it'd probably be more worth your while to just read through it closely. :)
4614992 *Face palm* I didn't see that before, it's fix now... Pfi... hole her, I have to say it's pretty funny.
4623239 lol just the context anwere it is in the story
This seems interesting
Don't turn it into a clop fic I beg you
4648802 I would never! so don't worry, but I'm almost done with the next chapter, I am out of state so that's why it's taking so long. Vacation/Family reunion and all that. :)
4648844 ok
You need to get someone to help edit this for you.
Other than that nice. Seems like a story worth reading.
4659655 Thank you. :)
It feels like an eternity. Just waiting. take your time though. just know you have an impatient fan.
4685634 I refuse to have anything less than 1000 words, it just that I'm at 946 and I can't figure out how to do it. that and I want to make sure I have less errs in this chapter than the last.
Fun idea, sloppy execution. I'm not sure I'll be sticking around for this one.
4687612 it's ok my crappy writing isn't for everyone. :P
an idea could be like she wants to take spike back to where he was born with his family or something and him meeting her dragon friends and well ya just an idea
Acres not Acers. Acer is a laptop, Acre is a form of measurement.
Hi my name is, what? My name is, who? My name is, chicka chicka slim shady.
Don't know if you did that purposefully or not but it was still funny.
This chapter the characters completely changed their personalities, and was sort of rushed. Try to work on your planning because this seems sort of random.
Will probably still read though.
Acres not Acers. Acer is a laptop, Acre is a form of measurement.
Hi my name is, what? My name is, who? My name is, chicka chicka slim shady.
Don't know if you did that purposefully or not but it was still funny.
This chapter the characters completely changed their personalities, and was sort of rushed. Try to work on your planning because this seems sort of random.
Will probably still read though.
4688065 It was my idea to do that, slim shady. :) and I did kind of rush it out... thanks for the feed back. :)
4687973 at first I was planning on make Barbara raciest to ponies, but only when Spike's not around, but then I decided not to. But that is a nice idea. thank you for the feed back :)
It' okay but there's alot of mistakes... like everywhere.
Wat?
like I like this story a lot please continue
I lov your stuff man
4738928 that means so much to me to hear you say that. :)
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LOLOLOLOL!!!
Chapter 10 hi mom and dad. Spyro and Cynder.
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What the heck is Sweetalpple Acers!?
HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA HA!
Sooooooooo funny!
But at the same time,
Seriously!
This is so different from what you can mostly find on this page that its totally awesome :D really like it but yeah maybe you could find someone who would read it before youll post it here and help you with spelling and maybe give you some ideas to extend few articles :) ya know ... for better description and so
the last part of the description i confusing
So....one year....is this dead?
4738959 i just found this story and I'm liking the description,
but since it hasn't been updated for over a year I'm reluctant to start reading it only to start liking it and never be able to finish it.
Please be clear with me. Is this story dead? Yes or no.
6231374 Grrrr... See!Iit's people like you that make it hard for me to be lazy! I really want to rewrite the story because I don't like the way it turned out. So I'll be honest, I don't know if the story is dead or not. If it makes you happy I'll stop being a lazy ass and start working on the rewrite.
6231423 thanks and love you too
This... I like this! BRING ME ANOTHER! *smashes iPad against floor*
6391098 Well just great, looks like I'll have to mail you the next chapter. It's not like you can read it with a broken ipad.
I like this story so far.
6391249 Glad to know you liked it!
YAY!!
Monah, Bormah, Zu'u los ful krosis... lig frolaaz zey. Fah Zu'u lost funt dii slen zeymah
Zu'u mindok
Zu'u mindok hin sahlon, nuz nii couldn't kos.
Nuz nii kent.
Prii fifty eruvos, ahrk Zu'u lost finally rund hi zeymah
los Zeymah Zu'u los Hi los briinah
why so much Dovahzul
6394135 It is the dragon language isn't? So wouldn't it make sense for her to speek it as her natural language?
6394697 yes, i just want to know what she said, please tell me
6397320 Use this, https://www.thuum.org/translate.php
6398947 thanks