Crystals. Crystals are nice. Crystals don't kill you, no matter how hard they might try. Not even a dragon could kill me. Ponies. Those are a different story. They hold on to the past. Crystals ponies. That can't do anything. They can't fight, hold on to the past or else they go to the mines hungry. Shadows and Darkness are nice too. If you need to hide they are your best ally. But most ponies think of them and fear it. I like seeing others in fear. Fear can't be ignored. It ligers until you can prove it's not true. My name is Sombra and. I. will. return.
Ok so this would not stop bugging me so I had to get it out. This is my first First-Person narrative story. As well updates will more then likely will be random until I can get a set up going so yea. As well it my start of slow and other character tags will be added as I go on so I hope you enjoy see ya.
As well If you left a like or a favorite tell me why :) so I can make the story better!
You might want to change the synopsis. It makes the story sound like a comedy.
4164185 yeah I'm not the best at those sort of thing. is this one better?
4164356 Uh... You didn't change the synopsis.
4164557 do you mean the Long Description?
4164574 Yes.
4164798 *face palm* I can be so stupid times I'll work on it thank :)
If I may say so, please work on your grammar. I like where the story is going, but there are many faults. I'll edit chapters before you post them if you want me to.
4186407 Truth be told the only reason I didn't try to get an editor before was because I don't know how that would work. But if you want to okay just explain how it would work out. (I'm not really the sharpest tool in the shed ya know?)
I second for an editor. There are lots of faults to be worked on. Your story would be a lot better if you had an editor to help you out.
No offense intended.
I have a proofreader that I link to every unsubmitted chapter of my stories. He goes over it, shows me the weird misspelled things so I may correct them. I then look over the chapter again to make sure he did not miss anything, then I submit it.
That's usually how it works for me.
4187268 None take I know I'm $h!t at grammar. And I thank you both for offering. but there is only one way to decide how get to become my editor.
A fight to the death!!!
Or you can just decide on an agreement... I'm not good at this kind of stuff.
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I think that a fight to the death is a very reasonable and logical way to decide who is to become your editor.
I would love to edit, but Rainbow Danger Dash offered first so they deserve it more than I do.
4187482 Yes I conquer, it looks like only time shall tell.
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I look forward to future chapters.
Sombra's return... am I the only one who thought this was a clopfic? ah.. shit looks like I got wet for nothing...