Does the Pinkie Pie on the left look like an unfeeling automaton? A magical construct with no capacity for thought or action beyond a simple phrase, like 'FUN'? Well, only the latter's incorrect.
She thought it was all over when her resolve broke and she was flashed back to the mirror pool. Emerging from it for the second time in a lifetime, the first Pinkie Pie clone only knows one thing; she's alive and well, unlike every single one of her reflections. Is she just a lucky reflection? A copy?
In the middle of the Everfree, confused, forlorn, and lost; where will she go, what in Equestria will she do?
And why are these six ponies, including the pony she herself is a reflection of, trying so hard to find her? They were saying something about "splitting the Element of Laughter" . . .
Can't let them catch me. No matter what it takes.
Imperaxum's entry to The Most Dangerous Game contest. Will be submitted when complete, and must be completed before June 27th.
Ooooh!
This is looking great! Can't wait for the update!
4556745 Shoot. Thanks.
4556749 Thanks, and it'll probably be updated tommorow.
Ooh, a stream of consciousness fic. How. FUN.
I love this I know I can't wait till the next chapter.
Yay, a new writer joining the "What if? - Too Many Pinkie Pies" team. Welcome to the club!
Gotta read this after work.
Good, you are writing about the first clone in deep POV like Jorofraire in Her Own Pony, but I already see some major differences. Faved. I wanna see where you're gonna go with her.
4561307 Heh, updated twenty seconds before you commented.
4561313 I wish my other followed stories like Sweetie Chronicles or On a Whisper of Wind would update like that. "So when is the next update?" "It was published 20 seconds ago."
You ended with (mostly) retelling the canon from Reflection's POV (is it her name now?) and started telling the new stuff. So far so good, keep it up!
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I think you might be missing a word after the second "the". Maybe "cave"?
There should be more Pinkie Clone stories.
There is like 2 notable out there including this one.
out of.
Well, if she's the first, and she managed to stick around when all the others were dispersed, then that makes her the superior model! Silly filly.
I really like this. I love the conflict over her identity.
Well, this is a... different situation isn't it?
Wow. Kinda brings new meaning to the term;
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that's gonna suck when they relies that she isn't a changeling.
Oh no. That doesnt seem good.
Hurray for updates! Keep up the great work!
So from what I can gather this story is basically "Her Own Pony" but instead of it being a Pinkie the group missed, this one simply couldn't be destroyed. I can dig it! Though if this Pinkie turns into a grayscaled Pinkamena named "Strand," I think the story will be too similar.
Ok caught up now. Definitely different than "Her Own Pony." Reflection doesn't have as long of an existential crisis and it's allowed the griffins to be explored more, which is a nice touch. I'm really liking this and definitely hope the inevitable moment where the Elements meet Reflection again matches the hype of these previous chapters. Looking forward to next chapter!
I see this happing: the elements wont work when there is two pinkies so reflection must be destroyed because the main 6 think she is just a FUN FUN FUN pony, but when they do find her she cries telling them that she doesn't wont to die, and twilight cant kill her knowing what will happen. Or something else happens completely... ((( "Come on SHOT ME ALLREADY!!!" She yelled "I-I can't" whispered twilight "You did it before! If my life will save hundreds then JUST SHOOT ME!" she yelled back, still crying ))) That is what I see. Truth be told I just wanted to tell some one... okay I'm done :)
Reflections a magical clone of Pinkie and she apparently likes meat now if the meal was any indication, I would imagine that scoring brownie points with the griffons due to ponies being herbivores which means they would most likely be disgusted in even the thought of another creature eating meat with the way reflection reacted to the meal at first... and I can't wait to see the mane six's reactions to know there is a pony that has absolutly no issues with eating another creatures flesh. Prepare for the outlandish accusations from the other ponies and the defensive reaction from the griffons being blown way out of proportions due to alot of ponies being naive to a almost unbeileveable level. Fluttershy might not mind due to dealing with meat eating creatures such as bears and such or Pinkie due to owning a alligator but the others might not take the news well since ponies are a overly skittish bunch to a degree that borders on overboard...
This does not bode well
Aww. (at 'nearing endgame') I do hope there is the possibility of sequels - so many possibilities.
Mane seven.
Mane six backups.
The 'Asylum' being real, and the Griffons being serious about it.
Bringing rock farming to Griffonia and why it's important.
Who has access to the Pinkie hammerspace - and what can be done with it?
O.O well shit is going down, down, DOWN hill for our hero... like wow!
I LOVE IT!
Well now, it seems as if magic is the only thing holding her together. After all, without any blood flow it would be impossible to move.
Alternate theory #1 - She heals so fast that the wound healed around the splinter, leaving her with a pierced leg
Alternate theory #2 - (Please do not let this be it) In true Owl Creek Bridge style she awakes to becoming nothing in the mirror pool
Alternate theory #3 - Absolutely anything else. Personally, I'm banking on this one.
I like the route that seems to be taken here. That said, I feel like given how much is happening and how much of a tone shift occurs, it feels a tad rushed.
The whole thing about unicorn/pegasus magic making her feel sick had yet to be firmly established, and initially I thought it was in her head but then she was physically affected by it. A full explanation can be saved for later, but her fear of magic needed more buildup. Whether that means a longer chapter or one before, it definitely felt like the story rushed to the end point of the chapter.
It's still a solid story, but since you're entering it in a contest, I figure I'd give you something constructive to help you along.
I agree with Ocean Waves, and i pray to Luna That Reflection can be saved, i dont want to see her Disappear or Return to the Mirror Pool. that would be so Cruel.
4582549 Thanks, thanks, thanks, mate. Yeah, it was a plot element I kind of made up on the spot yesterday, and I shows. I'm going to go back through previous chapters and edit in some references to her fear of magic. Plus, I'll definitely edit everything about that last chapter; expand on dialogue, make the language far less awkward than it shamefully is right now, the works.
Thanks for the feedback.
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Yay! In any case, keep up the good work!
O_O *prays to Luna for Reflection's safety* and i eagerly await an update lol
SUICIDE
I love this story and that ending this was the only thing I could think of
She's going to turn into a gryphon, isn't she?
---should be "know"
4643060 Fixed, thank you.
So, is there going to be an epilogue, or is this it?
Why is the story set to complete if Reflection committed suicide and there is no "Tragedy" tag? The story simply can't end like this, the next chapter is not an "epilogue", but a necessary chapter.
4651518 Well, that she committed suicide seems like the obvious explanation, but it isn't explicitly stated she dies. The Elements are powerful artifacts no one understands; anything goes with them. They work for harmony, right?
Beyond that, I've been thinking long and hard on how to make the ending. If it makes you feel any better, the last update, "Closure", is going online later today.
Thanks for your continued interest, however.
4651548 Yes, I know that she didn't commit suicide, because there is no "Tragedy" tag, but the fact that you've set it to 'Complete' implied that the major story line is done, and we might only see some minor threads to end in the last chapter. The survival of the protagonist is not a minor thread.
(/pointlessnitpicking)
Anyways, eagerly waiting for the final chapter.
Awesome story, I enjoyed every moment of it!
.......AHHHH I GOT MENTIONED TIME TO HIDE.
Uh, I mean, that's totally great. Is this legal, concerning the contest?
Also, no Red.
I loved this story; worthy of my fav and my upvote. Oh and I personally like rushed stories, as it keeps my excitement level up if lots of things happen in little amount of words, so don't worry about your 'rushed' chapters, I loved them too.
Oh and congratulations for finishing your first multi-chapter fiction. I know from personal experience that that's not a small accomplishment and requires lots of effort and discipline. So good job!
I see what you did there.
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I have pity that she's going to find out Pinks is super famous. Poor pony, I hope she gets a Cutie Mark change or something later on. Good fic so far though.
I hope Pinks doesn't die.
This was quite the interesting fic. It held my interest, was unique, and had a lot going for it, and I'm glad that Reflection is going to live. Good work.
Yay! I was hoping for a closure chapter. So glad Reflection lived!
4653000 Thanks, mate! I enjoyed writing it.
4653977 Thanks for reading, and, yes. You can go a little over the 15k word limit for the contest, and I'd already informed Obselescence that I'd be adding the epilogue after the deadline.
4658040 Fixed, thank you. And if I might ask, what exactly did my story "have going for it"? It's always nice to know my strengths.
4665069 I'm glad as well. This story also turned out to be something of a character introduction to Vaernya, for people who follow my story output. She'll be featured prominently soon . . .
And again, to all of you, thanks for you time. I hope you consider it well spent!
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Your strengths are well written characterizations, realistic emotional responses, amazing group dynamics, a wonderful Pinkie derivative that I really want to see more of someday, good pacing, and all in all was a terrific read.
By the way, are we ever going to be seeing more of Reflection as a supporting / main character? I'd like to see more of her. Great character, and it was nice seeing the world through her eyes. Also great take on Laughter.
Good, but not great. It felt rushed to me, like the pacing was off.
5162508 Absolutely. It was written for a contest, and the deadline in both date and word count was toed rather alarmingly. Wholehearted concurrence, I'm kind of proud - but only in that I finished it, the product itself is lacking in many places. No dislikes though, so no one hated it that much. An excellent learning experience for me.
Still, thanks for the patronage, I hope future stories of mine you may happen to come across will be better paced and written.
Great story! I reviewed the story and you will be able to find the review here.
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Please make a sequel in can be a romance thing between jar and reflection or something like that please i want need and must have more by the way 8 out of 8 mate for this story