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Ultra-the-HedgeToaster


One day I will return.       / The ending has loopholes. Use them. Make an even brighter future. :raritywink:

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Without knowledge of events taking place in Ponyville, a cheerful Pinkie-clone wanders out of town by simple chance – and stumbles straight into a traveling circus.

A few months later, she returns to Ponyville...

Can the grim conclusion of "Too Many Pinkie Pies" be led towards a happy ending?


"The lone pink pony happily bounced down the path, trying to catch the tiny blue butterfly with her hooves, not a care in the world. She'd left Ponyville behind a while ago – but obviously, the path would lead her right back to it. Either that, or it led to the water-mirror cave.

Not that she knew of any other places it could possibly lead to..."

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Comments ( 39 )

I'm confused... wasn't there already another story with this title? Is this a reupload or just a similar title? I can't remember.

EDIT: Well, I must have been mistaken. I haven't seen this particular story before, so it must just be a similar title to something else I've seen. It's off to a nice start, though. I'll keep an eye on this.

Aaaaand now I have to wait for it again. Sigh. Good story so far, though. :)

Yay, I have been looking forward to this story coming out. Now I must read.:raritystarry:

Aww, I have a feeling that I'm going to like tight rope. :pinkiesad2: Keep up the great work so far, liked and faved. :pinkiehappy:

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I dunno, maybe you've read one of the half-dozen journals I posted over the course of the last two years of me blabbing about how I was "also working on another story off on the side"? :twilightsheepish:

I sorta got tired being unable to actually send people somewhere when telling them that, so I decided to publish the "first" chapter for now and then go from there. :trollestia:



Other than that, if there really is another story by a similar-sounding title, I'd really hope this won't cause confusion. :derpyderp2:

I've literally had planned to use this title for over 2 years - the word itself, "Pinkieviduality", even goes back almost 3 years, though it was originally gonna have a different use - and branded just about everything that might relate to the story accordingly. :applejackconfused:

Good point this is the first time anyone actually tried to DISCIPLINE the clones.


While Pinkie Pie's wake up call is a little sudden, it's all the same interesting that tight rope does how you should teach a child.

5583958 The tricky part was that Tight Rope needed to first realize how she should treat Pinkie. :raritywink:

Same goes for the rest of the circus staff, which is what makes the earliest chapters also the hardest to write - I needed to find (and keep) that perfect balance between "lighthearted fun" and "realistic character behavior".

In the next mini-chapter, we'll get to see another character's perfective... :derpytongue2:

oh clone Pinkie :pinkiesmile: your just too sweet and innocent like a exploring filly :pinkiehappy:

5603897 Thanks! That was exactly what I was going for. :pinkiesmile:

One mustn't forget that she's only a few hours old at this point! :pinkiegasp:

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In response to your comment on deviantArt:

Just make sure to make your OCs likable and relatable, but not overpowered or spotlight stealers. Since so much of the story is gonna focus on them teaching the clone to be a person, the readers have to feel comfortable with them.

Funny you should say that! I simply wanted to make sure the OC-cast didn't feel like generic cardboard cutouts. :twilightsheepish:

I figured that the easiest way to do so would be to give the reader an insight into their way of thinking, and have their way of thinking be "unique" to them. (Well, "relatively" unique, anyway.) :twilightsmile:

I could've probably told the entire story with just Tight Rope and Mirror-Pinkie, but that wouldn't have made logical sense in a circus-setting, plus, it may have ended up being one-sided. :trixieshiftleft:

Mirror-Pinkie is still the main protagonist of the narrative, even if some time will be spent fleshing out other characters, as will be with the next chapter. (Plus, sometimes it makes sense to get an "outside" perspective.) :raritywink:

It truly would be ironic, if in my efforts to make the circus cast seem more lively than cardboard-characters, I somehow ended up in the same boat as the cliché "OMG, LOOK AT MY SHINY NEW AMAZING OC CHARACTER! LOOK HOW AWESOME HE IS! OMGOMG!11eleven!!". :rainbowlaugh:

Hence me saying "funny you should say that". :derpytongue2:

Anyway, thanks for your continued interest in the story and frequent comments on deviantArt! :pinkiehappy:

5700203 Thanks! :pinkiesmile:

It's far from finished, obviously. :raritywink:

"Then she chomped down and ate all the pancakes in one bite.
Then she stuffed all the pancakes into her mouth at once and chomped down."
There appears to be some repetition here.

5734710 Gah, one of those sentences was supposed to be cut. :twilightoops:

Thanks for catching that. :twilightblush:

... I have bad memories of my baby cousin who took all my toys for himself because they were "his," and screamed like a banshee when I tried to play with them.

I like the concept, and it would certainly be an awesome development story... but there hasn't been many updates...

I'll track it and wait.

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Thanks for the favourite! :pinkiesmile:

Apologies for the lack of further updates so far; I assure you that this story will continue, even if may take a while. :twilightsheepish:

I have a reputation for being an extremely slow, yet insanely dedicated perfectionist of a writer. :pinkiecrazy:

This is something I've wanted to publish for a very long time, and I consider this story to be one of my "long-term" projects. The fact that the cover-art is my own should speak for itself also. :ajsmug:



...On the other hoof, it is true irony that, after 9 months of banging my head into a writers block on my other story, "Daring Do and the Secret of the Fourth Wall" --- which was what lead me to focus more on getting the opening to "Pinkieviduality" out there --- right after releasing it, I finally managed to break through said writer's block. :derpyderp1:

So now I'm mainly focussing on "Daring Do and the Secret of the Fourth Wall" for the moment.

Go figure. :facehoof:

In TL;DR:

Just sit tight, and the next chapter will appear in your inbox ... eventually. :twilightsheepish:

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Hmm... alright toaster man, I'll wait patiently until then, since the only Pinkie Clone type story was 'The Pinkie Massacre', you can understand my need to see another chapter published, not to mention how Pinkie-Clone could develop as a character after spending enough time with these ponies... and Griffin... and Zebra...

You get the idea, since the shocker story I read, I've been needing some awesome stories like this one in the 'Too many Pinkie Pies' section.

I say, was it that long? Well, the story's returned well, I think. :)

...Aaaand again I am busy when being a test audience member comes up; sorry. Perhaps I'll remember it at some time later when I have time. Good luck, either way.

An actual update from Ultra in 2016.
Now I've seen everything.

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Cute story. Glad I don't know anyone like the "real" Pinkie Pie. Never would get anything done, because...Hugs.

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Hehe, yeah. :twilightsheepish:

The fastest way to render an entire society unable to act -- send adorable ponies. :derpytongue2:

It's good to be helping.
Keep going! ;)

I like Zenya. The idea of a zebra who just can't be arsed to rhyme all the time is a fun one.

It took a few seconds for Zenya's brain to get unstuck. Its first action was to place Zenya's hoof in its usual place on her face.

I love this fanfic sooooo much!
Say, when's the next chapter coming?..

why do good stories often fail to end?

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Because this is my writing process: :twilightsheepish:

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...But yeah, I'll get back to Pinkieviduality eventually. There's tons of stuff already written for this story... the trouble is that most of what's already written takes place later, and I still need to write the earlier chapters. :twilightblush:

People have already cried "dead" on other stories of mine before, and I proved them wrong. :derpytongue2:

Reporting this right away: "miniscule" should be "minuscule". Not "-nis-"! Rather "-nus-"!

Whoa, Never2muchpinkie mentioned in the author's notes :pinkiegasp:! I've seen his (her?) "Pound and Pumpkin tales"! The feels go all the way up to 11!..

Ah, in any case... This one here, "Pinkieviduality" (ha-ha, very funny), so far pictures a very cute Pinkie...'s clone! :rainbowkiss:!

I do insist on completing this tale! I have yet chapters to read -- but they are few! The story must go on! Come rain, come shine, come snow, come sleet -- the story must go on!

But... But!..

I'll just track further updates...

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