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People are like books. You can't judge them by the outside and it's not cool to burn a big pile of them.

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Based upon a SpikeBelle comic which can be found here!


One night, Sweetie Belle finds Spike all alone in the rain and tries to comfort him due to his feelings for Rarity would never come to a reality.

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Comments ( 28 )

You've really gave live to that comic with the fic, very good!
Like and fav.
:moustache:

I always wondered if anyone would do a story version of this comic.

Is there a sequel?

And my friend IMShadow007 made a comic dub of that comic... Here...

He couldn't believe it, out of all of his friends, Sweetie Belle cam to to see him, but in one of the worst ways, but he was so glad that she came. He needed the love, he needed the comfort.

cam? to to?

That was great.

SO CUTE!!! I:heart:IT!!! :scootangel:

Through the darkest of clouds a single spark of hope can shine brighter then the sun and be a guide through the darkest of forests...... After reading this fic I thought of that sentence..... Thank you for making this fic

Comment posted by The Orange Nebula deleted May 4th, 2014

Darn. I want to enjoy it, but this goes against my main ship. But hey, just slap Button instead of Spike on there, and u got one heckofa cute fic. :pinkiesmile:

Gotta go fast! Gotta go fast!!! FAST!!!

This story was going faster than Sonic on crack ^^
Great stort though, I just feel like you could've included more of a build up, and crud. Have a like and favorite anyway :3

I wanna rate you 10/10 but its missing lack of originalness, since its someone elses fanfic. Anyway, nice story 9.49/10

cute very cute
originality: 7/10
grammar: 8/10
spelling:7/10
characteristics:9/10
score: 31/40
prize:
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4301220 the music really sets the tone... and those voices

*gak*... feels...overload...*cough* why am i such a sucker for romance?

the *choke* feels.... THERE TOO MUCH *Thunk*

Discord: oh, great... now i have to revive him... wheres the EMP? this is going to be a long day...

4660018 I know, I'm just a real sucker for romance.

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I can't help but agree. This fic went by super fast. They were blushing at each other before I could even blink!

Still, this fic has its heart in the right place, and 'tis certainly cute! So despite its speed, I'd say it was worth the read. Good job. :twilightsmile:

4864387 :l Well, that's your opinion, not mine. Good day.

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Sorry for upsetting you, I just don't like him being paired with Sweetie Belle.

4865456 it's you choice, not mine. Goody day, and due to events, this is the last time I'll be able to respond for about... 4 weeks.

not bad , not perfect but not bad. you definitely have some have some potential :moustache:

Honestly, this story dosen't really have anything special going for it. Now that dosen't mean I think it's bad ; it's a short scene, based on a comic, that's there for the gooey feels; and it is kinda sweet! But, the problem is their's nothing seperating it from all the other SpikeBelle stoires out there.

Not to mention, it has a few problems in general. It's very quick for a start; WAY too quick in fact. Now again, I know it's based on a comic - and that in itself was very brief and too point - but I think that might have been the problem. The comic should have been your STARTING point; not the whole point. I think if you maybe had a chapter - or heck even a paragraph or two - dedicated to the moments before or after this scene, it would have given it a bit more character and really improved it! Then comes the problem that it's a little poorly structured. Too many times you have a sentence, a gap, a sentence etc. This is quite distracting I think and can make it difficult to get engaged; it just dosen't flow well. I appreciate that alot of times, it's because theirs back and forth dialogue; but I think if you took a minute and looked at different ways to convey this, it would have been IMMENSLY improved.

I'm not sure how long ago you wrote this - and I'm sure you've improved in that time - I just thought I'd express what I got from this story. I acknowledge you were tied to the comic, and I'm suire you wanted to make a great story whilst staying respectful to the source, but I think if you crafted it into something unique to you, it would have been better received. Still, I do appreciate the effort so have an upvote anyway. Hope your writings going well. :twilightsmile:

Finally someone puts a spikebelle fic on sweetie library, come on there are so many adorable spikebelle fics in the spikebelle grope, you would think more would be featured on this group to. Might I suggest first date http://www.fimfiction.net/story/158807/first-date and the amethyst and the emerald http://www.fimfiction.net/story/240073/the-amethyst-and-the-emerald those are really cute ones. :moustache::heart::unsuresweetie:

this needs a sequel

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Thatโ€™s what WE said. ๐Ÿ˜‰๐Ÿ˜‰๐Ÿ˜‰

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