On her way home, Rainbow Dash overhears Twilight start a conversation with Spike that she shouldn't have heard. After listening in, she is confused as to what she should do.
I'm just your average brony... Who happens to be transgender (MTF) and lesbian... So yeah. I do write, and I love editing! If you need an editor, just drop me a message!
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D'awww
Super cute little fic!
When reading, it felt a bit too fast paced. Maybe try space out your conversations and have more parts explaining what the ponies are thinking at the time. Other than that, it was pretty enjoyable.
*sees story has 2 likes and 3 dislikes*
Balance must be maintained!
*upvotes*
I enjoyed it. There's a nice idea in there, and what you've got makes for a great start, but it does need a little refining and expansion is all.
So sweet
I loved it :)
very nice idea! it could use some touching up, and i'd suggest fleshing it out some, but it really is a good story! just seemed kinda fast.
Lovely and cute story, but a kinda rushed.
Very well done, but a bit too fast... and not enough emotions. It has to be more touching... more heart warming. Maybe you'd like to give it a second thought when you write your next fanfic. Anyway, thank you for writing this one. It was a pleasure to read it.
Cute premise, but the execution is extremely rushed. It's in such a hurry to get to the kiss that there's no time for any meaningful development of, well, anything. The writing is kinda sloppy, the characterization is paper-thin, and there's practically no emotion.
Why the bloody hell does everyone have this idiotic notion of "don`t want to mess up our friendship"?
You know what, have a thumbs down. Just for using this cliche. It`s old enough to make me sneeze from all the dust. And I hate sneezing.
4212140 Love is a thing that has been around since... well, humans got the amygdala in their brain, and here we are several million (billion?) years later, still writing romance stories.
Seriously, though. A legitimate reason is a legitimate reason, regardless of how common.
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That does not make it any less boring or cringeworthy to write about. Especially so, considering this particular reason is usually a deception of a worst kind.
a bit fast paced, other than that i thought it was very cute. thumbs up from me, oh, you may want to use a slight slight bit more description, describe sensations more, analogies also help with that. it really helps pull the reader in.
Ended too quickly but otherwise very good story
Fast paced but so many d'aaaaaaawwwww's for the sappy parts. Why? I have no idea.
Yes, 'Hi Rarity, you're a sentence now!' XD I love mistakes like these.