This story is a sequel to Wings of Silver, Hearts of Gold
Scootaloo can't get over how guilty she feels... she can fly, yes, but Sweetie Belle can't see. With her conscience pushing her, she and Applebloom decide they will find a way to make Sweetie whole. But not everything is free...
Scootaloo knows what she seeks... but is her zeal for this quest a bit too much? Will she be able to finish? Or will she stumble blindly into the dangers that await her?
Applebloom knows what to do, but can she help Scootaloo find the right path, or will she only be brought to harm by Scootaloo's rash actions?
In their times of need, a true friend will risk it all.
There is no greater form of love than when one is willing to lay down one's life for a friend.
Special thanks to Music within us, Arkn0id, Night Wisp, Pinkacalypse and Little Wood for helping me proof read!
I noticed there was no period between ground and she. If you put one there, they'll be able to know it's a new sentence.
I think maybe you should put 'Normally' instead of 'Normal.'
Unless there's more than one hall, halls doesn't need the s. Just messing with you. I know that was a typo. It's okay, we all have them.
Maybe that should be 'It gave the sad figure on the bed a more majestic look.'
I gotta go now, but I'll tell you some more bits I notice, okay? Great story, so far.
to retrieve a certain herb to help Scootaloo fly.
it didn't matter too much
The sooner the better!"
and now she's b.."
I'd do the exact same for her!"
"But do ya think she'd be too happy
She couldn't live with herself if she didn't.
This is about all the things I found,just to help too
4202950 thanks! Every little bit helps!
4206040 your welcome,even though I'm not a certified proof-reader,just thought I'd try to help you a little
There needs to be a period after ground.
Sowing needs to be sewing.
Belles should have a ' between the e and s.
Acre should be Acres.
he should be she's.
Correction: apple Bloom went to bed and Scootaloo continued planning.
That's all I found!
She had her saddle bag full of supplies, like food, blankets, ( ) even a knife, just in case.
May be wrong but wouldn't their be an and there?
Apple Bloom chased after her.
It might just be my opinion but I think this would sound better if it was chasing
like this, She dashed forward, out of the forest. Apple Bloom chasing after her.
She ran after her friend, praying to Celestia she wouldn't get hurt. Or Scootaloo.
I think this should be, She ran after her friend, praying to Celestia that neither Scootaloo or her would get hurt.
or
She ran after her friend, praying to Celestia that Scootaloo and her would be safe.
you can keep it the same if you like that more but i think it would sound better if it was more along these lines
The darkness of the fores twas once more closing in on them.
misplaced space
And btw Scoots is the worst friend ever
4355757 Thank you.
And no, not the worst friend, she has the most heart, but she doesn't think anything through! She needs to think, not act.
It was sent flying to the side with a yelp of pain. The impact sent her rolling across the ground. She felt a little dizzy, but bounced right back up. She couldn't afford to lose here. It was all or nothing.
Might change this to sending
The waited lasted only a second.
This should be wait
roar and a swipe from it's paw.
bring a kick to it's groin.
lost some of it's control,
dodge it's mad advance and landed a blow on it's back.
It snapped off about halfway into it's eye socket.
trying to get the stick out of it's eye.
It opened it's mouth and prepared to eat.
it's mouth but scrambled out as it coughed and choked on it's own blood and the stick.
She felt one of it's paws smack her off it's face,
All of these should be its
She was in a small room.
We already know she is in a room so this could probably be shortened to (the room was small)
this one isn't 100% so you could leave it as is if you so choose
Plot thoughts: Well other then Scoots being an idiot
why Scoots why!? in chapter 2, it was alright and was worth my time (Mind of the Dark is still your best imo 
)
If you need any help on the next one let me know
4356062 Thank you! And like I said, she wasn't being an idiot, she was too eager to repay her 'debt' to Sweetie.
It should be "did" but other than that I didn't notice anything wrong with the grammar,
really great story too
I forgot this too
It should be "checking to make sure they were still alive"
4356758 Well I guess it could be seen as really bad tunnel visioning rather then being an idiot. However while her heart was in the right place leaving your friend who's injured in the middle of one of the most dangerous places in Equestria still makes you a bad friend
. Sad thing is that it isn't that OOC for Scoots she's a worse version of RD 
Acting without thinking with even less thinking.
4357529 True, but think of it like this. She was just so eager to be able to help Sweetie, she wasn't paying attention to Apple Bloom, or anything. Only how Sweetie would be able to see. Yeah, she's kind of... um... what's the word?
4357448 Thanks!
4358205 That is what Tunnel Vision means.
4358322 Ah, got it.
She felt one of it's paws
Missed this correction
4360989 Oh snap.
4360999 Np and on another note did I not help proof read lol
It's ok I see when I'm not wanted
jk it's alright
4361015 Oops, my bad, I fixed it
4361030 Then you spelled my name wrong
4361039 Darn it... fixed
4361045 Lol, Glad I could help thou feels good to contribute to something on this site. Let me know about the next one and I should be available to help with that as well
4361056 Okay! Will do!
Scootaloo you just fuuuuuuuuuucked uuuuuuuuuuup.
Sequel when exactly?
4386880 Funny... everypony gets mad at Scootaloo, or says she's neglectful or whatever... when i was writing this story, I wasn't thinking of her that way. In my mind, she's not forgetful or a terrible friend. She's too eager to help Sweetie, and thinks Apple Bloom is more capable than she really is.
But sequel... um... not for a long time...
Theorist time!
Zecora said a dark magic had been blocked (or whatever) 
Sweetie Belle died in the first story. And Applebloom died in this one and they were both brought back to life in the same hospital. So whatever "dark magic" Zecora was talking about regulates from the hospital. It gave Sweetie Belle her disability, Applebloom may have a disability in the next story. In the last one Scootaloo's disability was diagnosed in the hospital, maybe the doctors planned all of this? Because, whatever!
4429985 Whoa, look out! We got a conspiracy theorist over here!
4430355 Sorry, I just reread both the stories and then that theory popped in my head.
4430360 Ah.
4430369 Yeah, sorry
4431417 Don't be sorry. I'm just happy to see someone thinking about what might happen.
Sequel pwees
4524431 Oh come on AGAIN?!
Fine.
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4524479 I was already planning one, but I don't know when it will be out.
4268892 That last sentence was correct. Your 'correction' was wrong. Wow, you're a terrible editor.
5046800 Sorry! That was last time, so please excuse my error!
I'll correct it!
5046800 Shh. Please, no anger, name calling, strife, etc on my stories. There's really no need. Little Wood's my friend.
Scootaloo, you. are. a BUCKING MORON!
I hate ambiguous endings. Great story though.
6365629 thanks ^^
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This would be a great story, but this isn't the end of this storyline, right? After all these tragedies some more relieved ending could be better...
Just at least Apple Bloom waking up maybe...
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Okay I see you won't answer at all. No final third story of the trilogy then? If you ever read this, you made me very dissapointed....
Hopefully you finish what you started
6471368 Sorry, I somehow missed your last comment on my video
I do, in fact, have plans on making a third and final story to conclude this series, however I cannot say if that will be soon or not. I kind of fell out of writing fanfics and I'm having a lot of trouble getting back into writing. I also won't be revealing anything I have planned for the third story, though I can say it'll probably be shocking.
Sorry about that
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I hope you meant it by shocking in a positive way. :)
Thanks for replying finally anyway :D
and i canrt wait for the next story
sorry, but the orb thing doesn't really hold up as well as the herb.
the dark magic, beasts, and other things are too irrelevant and they don't really fit in.
just my opinion, sorry