Spike and Rarity have had it with each other. They constantly lie to each other, argue about money daily, and basically, hate each others guts. The only thing they can agree on is divorce. Then, when Spike and Rarity are on a train to Canterlot for the divorce papers, their train goes off track and crashes. Neither are hurt, but after a few days in the hospital, Rarity returns with amnesia, and all Spike can do is remind her of her life all over. Can Spike rekindle their fire? Or are they doomed for divorce?
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Grammar, punctuation and overall writing needs work. Dialogue does seem mildly effective but persistent errors scattered throughout ruin it. Nonetheless, I like the premise.
if spike/rarity or any main character doesn't die, then the tragedy tag is unneeded. Also, site rules say your not to have both tragedy and sad tags, you have to choose either or.
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I can't remember if it was WanderD or Knighty who had a post about it, but they talked about it being a redundancy as a Tragic story will always be sad, so adding both is unnecessary.
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This means but one thing you two, we must....kill Rarity.
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Funny thing is that I was unable to understand the concept of waifus until a few days ago. I suggest we put her in the waifu relocation program, just so they THINK she's....passed on. That way the tags can stay and so can your waifu.
4074958 I don't think it would be wise to touch my waifu.
...Sorry, I couldn't resist.
4074970 I can guarantee there's no sort of femininity on my end, only Spike's.
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What is even happening
It has potential... But it seems a little fast paced. Maybe slow it down and and greater detail to scenes?
This is gonna be good.....basically Spike is going to have to make Rarity fall in love with him all over again....and despite all the argumenting, we can see that there is something still there between them.
You know Spike, this is your chance. The question is, are you ABSOLUTELY SURE that you and Rarity want to divorce? (At the same time, yes Spike, and I'm ashamed for you if you are truly naive about Rarity's going-ons prior to the accident. Coming back at 2 in the morn and her pathetic excuses basically is telling you that she is fucking her ex among other things). As a matter of fact----and this would be completely out of the box---but I think that since Rarity's got amnesia and all she remembers is Fancy Pants, Spike should actually get Fancy to help. Yeah, I know, 'if Rarity doesn't even know who you are, you could just get her get set up with her ex-coltfriend/husband, and you'll be scot free'. I don't think so. There was a reason why Rarity and Fancy Pants broke up in the first place. And I just feel that you should do everything in your power to get her memory back---you are her husband, after all. And ultimately, sometimes being right for your wife, it could mean letting her go.
Basically, let nature take its course, don't force it, because unless it's permnament, I think Rarity will start to love you again. And also, this should be a heads-up to yourself and take a look in the mirror. Why is it that Rarity and you are getting divorced anyway? Rarity may actually have a point, as well as you do with her.
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I do.
The Only problem I had here was that Spike was 'jobless' and that his job was at Sugercube Corner. He's works for Twilight, and even then he's big, powerful dragon who could fight off most of Equestia. He could easily become a bodyguard or an anything guard really. He could also protect Rarity and pulls wagons of gems. Money and Gems are two things that Spike and Rarity should not have to worry about. Making them one of the core problems they have is cliched and, to be honest, rather lazy. I hope this turns out good as I really like the core idea.
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After Spike moved in with Rarity, he quit his job with Twilight. Maybe not immediately, but until he found another job. After he was fired from Sugarcube Corner, he tried to get a job back with Twilight, but since she was away so much, there was never a mess and Owlicious could feed himself.
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Whoops. Anyway, He joined Rarity in her job and cut even with her profit, getting all the gems and such. Buisness would become slow and money is harder to earn. Shoulda put this in.
For all the grammar errors, I really enjoy this story. It's a great concept and it's handled well.
At first I was confused, but this is actually a very smart and creative way to solve the dilemma of Rarity disliking Spike. But,
1) Will Fancy Pants take advantage of Rarity thinking they are together?
2) If\when Spike and Rarity get together, won't he have to tell her that they married and were about to divorce?
3)Even if it was seven years back, how would she not recognize Spike?
This story is awesome though.
Could you add a new chapter please? I've been waiting patiently without complaining, pestering, nagging of whining. All I am requesting is that you continue the story please. Just something to satisfy the readers (me included) until the next chapter comes out. Please?
Yeah buddy! Good job getting back in it!
THIS CHAPTER WAS SO AWESOME!!!!!!
After being away from my own story for a month this gives me the motivation to write a new chapter. Once again,(I think I've stated this) this is one of the most interesting story concepts I've read about. There are so many Sparity storys its nice to see something different.
I love this story so far!
Update please?????
Haw!
You're still alive, you son of a gun...
But thank you for the update!
WELCOME BACK FROM THE DEAD FILES
NOOOOOOOO!!!!! CLIFF-HANGERS!!!!! WHY DO YOU TROLL US SO!!!!!~
*Cough* Sorry about that... Welcome back to the land of the living (mostly, based on what I got from your parentheses). Hope to see more come up from this story (This is the only one of your stories that I have read so far but taking a quick glace at your other pieces intrigues me). You'll here more from me later. For now 9/10 on account of a misspelled word and the mane 6 (Minus one Rarity as of the circumstances) interrupting Spike ("To anyone who actually cares": Yes the second one was personal bias! I find getting interrupted very rude and go's against my personal morals! Deal with it!). Have a good... Day? ...Week? I don't know. Let's go with life! Have a good life!
Could you post another chapter before you get shot, sucked into Da Matrix, and take the wrong pill again?
WHY DO YOU LEAVE THE BIGGEST CLIFFHANGERS
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How ironic it is that you bring this up...
Honestly, Spike's being kind of a dick to Fancy. The guy seems genuinely fine with how things turned out and far from a snake trying to steal someone else's wife. Spike's jealous and fears are really gonna end up screwing him hard.
6019349 Back for two days and I already got rekted in the comments
HA I GET OUT IN THREE DAYS but I have to get a job too so crap
Also good chapter
Poor, Spikey...
This ever going to get finished?
Oh poor Spike and Rarity.