An alternate story about Nightmare Rarity, the battle on the moon and in Ponyville, and its aftermath. We see this story through the eyes of four different ponies of how this dark tale unfolds for them all.
I had this idea ever since I read the main comic about Nightmare Rarity and how Spike did everything he could for her. I have always been a Sparity lover and it just frustrates me to see a great opportunity go by or not go into detail. Although I did not originally intend for it to be sad but as I began writing and forming the story it just sorta lead to it. I hope you like it!
Enjoy!!!
[EDIT]: Woot! Over 1,000 views! Thank all of you who viewed and enjoyed this story!
Chapters (1)
Try to divide your text in more paragraphs, it is easier to read it that way.
Some mistakes in grammar and punctuation.
The emmotional appeal could've been a little stronger using the right structure:
The only regret I have is that I never got to say that I loved you too. But now its too late and I am
sosorry, but with you being the best little dragonyou are(there is), you probably already knew that I loved youso much(As well). I am going to miss you so much... you are my hero. Goodnight, Spike.As you can see, there are many ways you could improve your dialogue.
Other than that, good story. Liked
Thank you very much for the help! I have been waiting a LONG time for someone to actually comment and tell me good/bad things about my stories so I can improve future ones. So thank you again for commenting and in the end I am glad that you thought it was a good story and you liked it.
wow truly sad any chance of an up and coming sequel ???? maybe one where spike's spirit rises to help them to another adventure
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Unfortunately not, this was a one shot story. But I am happy that you enjoyed it enough to want a sequel!
5139577 thats a shame but its ok