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Princess Celestia and Princess Luna challenge each other to a staring contest.

* If you enjoyed the story, would you kindly leave a like and if you really enjoyed it, a favourite would be much appreciated.

Update!
Extended version added as new chapter. Features deleted scenes, new dialogue, newly added scenes and more words that were not in the original.

Featured on 7/9/2014
Thanks to all the people who read this story and liked it enough for this to get featured!

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Comments ( 64 )

I loved this story defiantly a favorite!

Comment posted by magicman123 deleted Mar 5th, 2014

4037746

Thank you for reading! I'm glad you enjoyed it! :twilightsmile:

I LOVED this story! There are a couple of mistakes in there, in one instance you used 'your' instead of 'you're', some lack of commas, and in some instances, there are no periods at the ends of sentences. Great job!!!!!!!! :raritystarry:

4037891

Eeeh... :twilightsheepish:

Yeah sorry, this was written on an iPad so please forgive me for some of the mistakes made. Also, thanks for reading the story! I'm glad that you enjoyed it!

4037895 Oh, please, the mistakes are fine! I couldn't have written anything like that in two hours! It's taken me four days to write on chapter in my story! :fluttershyouch:

4037902

Thanks a lot for the heads up on the errors. I think that I have managed to fix all the problems mentioned by you, along with some grammar and spelling mistakes (Except the commas, I will deal with those later).

Loved the play between the two, bravo!:raritywink:

This was the most amazing thing /i have ever read in my whole existence EVER! AMAZING!
:heart::heart::heart::heart::heart::heart::heart::heart::heart::heart::heart::heart::heart::heart::heart::pinkiehappy:

4039268

Thanks a lot! I'm glad you enjoyed it!

4039986

My bad. :twilightsheepish:

I didn't know that fic existed.

I cannot believe that this got on the popular stories list :rainbowderp:

To be honest, punctuation was horrendous. You're supposed to put punctuation within the quotation marks, and even then you often had two ending punctuation marks in the same sentence. And to be nitpicky, this:

"Well was it really as bad as the time you 'accidentally' fractured both of my legs? Leaving me in a wheel chair for a month!".

doesn't make sense, since Luna is a quadruped.

But this was a very enjoyable story. It's earned a like and a fav from me. :pinkiehappy:

4041179

Yeah sorry :fluttershysad:

I don't know why I keep doing that. I know I'm wrong but I keep doing it for whatever reason. I hope I fixed the punctuation problem and I also I fixed that sentence... :P

Thanks for the help and for reading this thing I wrote. I'm glad you enjoyed it!

4037754

This deserves to be on equestria daily, great job on writing this!!!! Also no problem this was one of the best stories ive read for ages. :)

4041641

Thanks for the compliment! :pinkiehappy:

4040168 Done already or not, you wrote and interesting story and that's what matters.

4042515 You're welcome. I'm supportive of pretty much any idea, even ones that have been done before, as long as you can make it interesting.

4039986
THAT'S where I recognized this from...

4041271 Like I said, it's good. Don't let my comment bring you down! :pinkiehappy:

as far as this old school janitor is concerned there are far too few cute funny awesome stories like this. done before mayhaps done like this in your style? only just now.
liked faved and epic.

4044696

Thanks a lot! I'm glad that you enjoyed this story enough to think that it's awesome!

4044269

Your comment didn't really bring me down. It's more like you helped me improve the way I write! :twilightsmile:

And victory goes to time again!

:rainbowlaugh:

Well... It was interesting, although I'm not sure I like it.. So take a Rainbow instead. :rainbowlaugh:

4047843

As long as you gave it a chance :twilightsmile:

Ah nice and simple the way I like it .:twilightsmile:

Yikes! Talk about competitive siblings, sounds like a painful game. Good story!:trollestia:

4041179
Wow.
I didn't read one word of that comment.
Except "horrendous"
You are the only other person I've ever seen use that word, besides me.
You are awesome:rainbowkiss:
So yeah.
Good day:twilightsmile:

4117079 That's just me!

By the way, nice profile picture.

4117106
Haha, thanks:pinkiesmile:

I asked my brother to find me a new avatar/profile pic or whatever
and he found this one:rainbowlaugh:

Pretty funny 9.14/10

4302306

That is a very specific decimal number.

Maybe I liked it for an even reason, rather than odd, did you ever think of that? :flutterrage:

4666370

Fear not! For I have fixed this glaring error to fit the people who liked this story for odd and even reasons.

Also thank you for taking the time to read this :)

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