• Published 20th Feb 2014
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One Last Crusade - Tidal



After a huge stint with their role models, the CMC decide that to learn their special talents, they have to take their search out into Equestria. They meet new friends, save many lives, and become an inspiration. This is the last crusade.

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Another One Begins

Author's Note:

So the amount of love the first chapter received was breathtakingly awesome. Thank you all so much for liking, favoring, and commenting! Since I didn't expect the amazing reception from all of you! This chapter is definitely more action then drama, but there will be a good balance between all emotions as the story goes on. Let me know what you guys think! I appreciate all of you, and I wanna thank you for being so patient. Real life has affected both my editors and myself, but I am glad the newest chapter is out!

I started to thank the users that favorited individually, but the number of favorites jumped up really fast... so I wanna thank ALL that favorited! Y'all are amazing and the support is what urges me to continue writing! Let me know how this second chapter is... remember, the adventure is only just beginning! We have been working on how the story is gonna pan out, and it's gonna be really exciting!

I want to especially thank SolongStarbird, and Blood Lord. These two are my incredibly patient and awesome editors. Blood Lord has been helping me with story writing and planning, and SolongStarbird gives me the occasional slap for silly grammar mistakes! They are amazing though! :twilightsmile: I had to upload in the middle of Solong's redpenciling, but I'll go in and add the grammar edits as soon as they are completed! Anyway, enjoy!

"Well how was I supposed to know that they weren't telling the truth?!" Twilight shouted from behind the three mares that raced towards the Ponyville Train Station. Surprisingly, Applejack and Rarity held the front, galloping at hat and horn to each other. Rainbow Dash, on the other hoof, had taken to the skies and streaked brightly overhead towards the station.

"Rainbow! Go stop 'em!" AJ shouted in between her panting breaths. The pegasi heard her friend's call, and shot forward, leaving a bright trail behind her in the fading light.

Rainbow pushed herself hard. She hadn't flown with this type of desperation since the Best Young Fliers Competition. The memory of that day was clear in her mind for a moment. She remembered when the wings Twilight made for Rarity had burst into flames due to the increased amount of stress she had put on them; flying into direct sunlight didn't help either. Rainbow flew so fast to catch Rarity she performed a legendary Sonic Rainboom. The thought of Scootaloo and the other girls running away pushed Rainbow to fly at those speeds, but she was steadily approaching the station and was forced to slow down.

"Scootaloo when I find you, you're gonna be in huge trouble!" muttered the pegasus to herself as she touched down on the train platform. Rainbow glanced over her shoulder and noticed that Rarity and Applejack were too far behind to wait for. She gave an impatient snort and took off into the station in a quick trot. Rainbow Dash glanced around the small station for any sign of the missing fillies. Nothing gave any clue away that they were there, and she hadn’t seen any sign of them from the air either, meaning...

“They’ve got to be on the train,” she said out loud. A quick peek around revealed the was conductor nowhere to be found, allowing her to briefly sneak on the train. She trotted inside and started to look around for Scootaloo and the others. Rainbow carefully walked down the aisles of the train car, inspecting each passenger and the luggage before continuing on. She peered down into each seat, hoping to see one of the Crusaders sitting comfortably in one of them. She was starting to get more frustrated with every row she cleared.

"Oh, Hey Dash!”

The cyan pegasus spun around, thinking it could be Scootaloo, but was disappointed to see that it was only Berry Punch.

"Oh, uhh. Hey Berry. Have you seen Scootaloo or any of her friends on the train?" asked Rainbow Dash.

“Nope, sorry,” replied the magenta Earth pony with a shake of her head. “The last time I remember seeing them was yesterday.”

"Tickets? May I see your tickets please?” called out the train's conductor as he entered the car. “Tickets!"

Rainbow quickly muttered her thanks, and casually dipped out of the exit on the opposite side before the conductor reached her, asking her for a ticket she never purchased. As she exited the train she caught sight of the others arriving at the station, and quickly trotted over to them.

"Rainbow Dash... where... are... the girls!?" Rarity asked between gasps for air.

The pegasus shook her head. "They weren't in the passenger car! But, I've been thinking... How would they have even gotten tickets to ride on the train in the first place?"

“Nopony here, is going to buy three fillies a ticket for a train,” said Applejack. “Could have disguised themselves, ah guess.”

"Twilight?” asked Rarity, the unicorn having finally gained full composure of herself. “When you saw the girls, what else did they happen to mention before leaving the Library?"

Twilight took a second to think back. "Well... they mentioned needing a few books on the different landmarks in Equestria, a book on camping... a book on... Archeology around Equestria... and... a... map?" The alicorn paled as she realized how much of a hoof she had given to the Crusaders. "Oh no."

"Consarn those girls!” shouted Applejack as she turned to bolt back the way they came. “Come on they couldn't have gone too far!" Applejack turned, preparing to run off towards the Everfree when Twilight stopped her.

"Wait!” said Twilight as her magic wrapped around the farm pony’s tail, preventing her from leaving. “As they were leaving I heard Sweetie Belle mentioning she had to stop by the boutique! Maybe they’re still there!"

Rarity perked up when hearing this. "I'll head to the boutique immediately! Perhaps everypony else should go check their homes in case they decided to stop there too? We might be able to stop them before they even get a chance to do something reckless!"

"Sounds like as good of a plan as any,” replied Applejack. “Uhh, Twi? Sweet Apple Acres is pretty far from here. Think ya could just teleport me on over?"

"Yeah, let’s go!" said the alicorn princess as her horn started to glow a warm magenta. “After checking out your houses, lets all meet up at the library afterwards. I'll be there soon!”

Applejack got a little closer to Twilight, while the others took a small step back. Twilight's horn started to glow a bright magenta colored aura. Following an intensely bright flash, both ponies were gone. Rainbow turned to Rarity.

"Good luck Rarity, I'll see you at Twilight's in a bit!" said Rainbow as she launched into the air and blasted off towards her cloud home. Even though Rarity had witnessed Rainbow's skill at flying for years, it was her speed that never ceased to amaze her. She quickly realized that she had a task to follow and had no time for daydreams.

"I'm coming Sweetie Belle!" she shouted as she ran out of the station, and back into Ponyville to find her beloved sister.


Scootaloo rested her head on the scooter's handlebars, and stifled a massive yawn. She reached up and rubbed her face with a hoof and tried focusing on the dimly lit trail in front of her. Her constant nodding off made it nearly impossible for her to keep herself, and the wagon on the trail. The rocks on the side of the small road would force the scooter to bounce rapidly, which would in turn force Scoots awake, only for her to readjust the scooter, and the process to repeat itself.

"Are we... at adventure yet?" asked Sweetie Belle in the middle of a massive yawn. Apple Bloom’s only reply was the soft snoring from the side of the wagon.

"No Sweetie, we’re still in the Everfree Forest." Scootaloo replied to the sleepy unicorn, fighting back another yawn. "We probably should've gotten some sleep before leaving home. I guess we were a little too excited... right, Crusaders?" She waited a moment for the response from her friends; but was gifted nothing but silence. Frowning, she hit the brake on her scooter before dismounting it and turning to face the wagon. The sight she came to face only released a sigh from her. The unicorn had placed her head on Apple Bloom’s barrel, and had fallen asleep just as fast as the little farm pony had.

"Awh man. Looks like we should probably find a place to sleep." Scootaloo did a quick spin looking around in every direction seeing nothing but darkness, trees, and more darkness. "Um. Not here though." She jumped back on the scooter, flipped the kickstand up and flapped her wings to get them moving again.

For a while, Scootaloo was able to keep a great pace through the forest, but soon her yawns turned into nodding off and eventually the young filly dozed to a stop and toppled over. Her body numb, and her mind swimming in dre-

Snap

Scootaloo jumped up at the unknown sound.

Snap

"Wh-what was that?" she whispered, glancing around the darkened forest. Nothing was moving around them, and she could still seeing her two friend tangled all over each other sleeping. She dismounted her scooter and trotted past the wagon. Squinting to try and focus her vision a bit more into the darkness. After a moment of nothing suspicious she shrugged and turned back towards the path in front, slowly moving towards her scooter.

"Huh, guess it was just my imagina–"

Snap

Scootaloo whipped her head around quickly... and found the source of the terrifying noise.

In the shadows behind the wagon; were three pairs of glowing green eyes.

Timberwolves

"TIMBERWOLVES!!" Scootaloo yelled aloud, not sure what purpose yelling actually would serve. One thing was certain, it woke up Sweetie Belle.

"AHHH!! RARITYIDON'TWANTTOUSESOMUCHSHAMPOO!!" She screamed as she sat up, mushing her hoof right into Apple Bloom's face.

"Ugh go back to sleep Granny Smith, the Zap Apples aren't coming yet." Apple Bloom pushed Sweetie's hoof away and rolled over, falling back to sleep.

Sweetie Belle's face went from displaying fear to showing confusion. "Scootaloo what are you yelling for?" She asked her Pegasus friend. Scootaloo didn't have time to respond.

The little orange filly leaped to her scooter and begun flapping her wings as fast as possible, causing the white unicorn to topple backwards in the wagon. Scootaloo turned her head and looked behind her, hoping maybe the Timberwolves wouldn't attempt to chase due to their quick escape.

Running away however, only turned it into a game for the Timberwolves. The three wooden monsters chased after the Crusaders. They snarled and howled as they inched closer and closer, Sweetie Belle looked back and gasped when she noticed how quickly one Timberwolf was approaching their wagon.

Apple Bloom still snored as she leaned over the side of the wagon. Sweetie was astonished that all the yelling, snarling, and bouncing hadn't woke her up yet. Her astonishment turned to fear as the closest Timberwolf was practically right on top of Apple Bloom. The Timberwolf snapped down at the little yellow filly, but only managed to yank on her bow with its teeth.

"What in tarnation?!" she shouted from the sudden flare of pain that awoke her due to her bow being pulled. The filly was still groggy, therefore hadn't really come to realize the situation they were in. “Scoots, what in the blazes are yo–" she looked up at where her hair was being pulled on from, and found herself looking right into the bright emerald eyes of the creature preparing to eat her.

"TIMBERWOLVES!!" She yelled as she reached her hooves up to undo the bow.

"WE KNOW!!" Her friends yelled back.

"WELL GO FASTER!!"

Apple Bloom hung on tight, trying to avoid allowing the monster to pull her out of the wagon. She was losing her grip, and began to slide out. Sweetie leaped forward and grabbed her friend by the hoof to keep her in. The unicorn filly reached forward and fumbled with the bow as the wagon bounced and jerked along with the trail until she was finally able to loosen it.

The Timberwolf yanked hard on the bow and it completely detached from Apple Bloom's mane. The sudden removal of the bow caused the Timberwolf to stumble off the trail and vanish into the woods with a loud crash.

“Sweetie!” called out Apple Bloom, as she steadied herself on the wagon. “We need to find a way to keep’em away from us!”

“How!?”

“Ah don’t know! Look in our bags for something!”

Apple Bloom turned her attention back to the Timberwolves, and watched them in horror as they slowly got closer. Scootaloo was moving too fast for her to just reach out and break a stick off a tree, she’d probably get thrown out of the cart, but…

The farm pony leaned out of the side of the wagon and looked ahead. In the distance, she found just what she needed.

Rocks.

“Sweetie, we can use these!” Apple Bloom scooped a few the rocks up from the road as they bounced along, several of them the size of apples. However, the silence from her unicorn friend was unsettling. “Sweetie?”

The filly turned around and froze. Right before her was the green, glowing eyes of a Timberwolf, its massive jaw twisted into something that passed for a grin. As is climbed into the wagon it released a powerful roar from its jaw, a roar that would give Apple Bloom nightmares for weeks.

The little crusader closed her eyes and could feel the horrid breath of the creature wash its disgusting warmth all over her coat. She figured death was near, and only wished she could see her sister one more time. Instead of a sharp pain and an introduction into nothingness, came a dull, but ringing thud. With caution, she opened her eyes and saw a frying pan, wrapped in a light green aura, smack the Timberwolf in the face again.

“You, stay away from her!” squeaked the unicorn filly as she brought the frying pan down again, knocking the Timberwolf off the wagon. The two watched as the wolf bounced down the trail and crash into a few of its brethren. To the two fillies' disbelief however, more wolves had joined in the chase as it went on; now five Timberwolves right on their flanks.

Apple Bloom leaned over the side of their fast moving wagon and scooped a few of the passing rocks up, and lobbed one at a nearby wolf. She was rewarded with the explosion of wood as the rock obliterated the monster. Sweetie Belle swung the frying pan as hard as her magic would let her at another one that was getting too close for comfort.

“Hold on!” shouted Scootaloo as she took a hard right on the trail. The wagon lifted up on two wheels as it slide around the corner with the scooter. The wolves, not expecting the quick change in course slid right past the turn, which for a moment led the Crusaders to believe they had escaped their pursuers. However a series of howls informed them otherwise as the pack burst through the treeline.

The danger they were in was fueling Scootaloo's adrenaline. she flapped as hard as she could. The possibility of dying at the claw of the wolves as one thing, but she in no way wanted to receive the scolding she’d get from Rainbow Dash if the pegasus ever found out about this. She lowered her head slightly, and narrowed her eyes.

Rainbow Dash may be the fastest flier Equestria has ever seen, but nopony can beat Scootaloo on land when she's riding her scooter.

"Hang on girls!" she called back to her friends as an idea popped into her head. “This is going to be just like Daring Do and The Griffon's Goblet!”

“Ya know those are just stories, right?” Apple Bloom called back as she chucked another rock. “She ain’t real!”

“Just hang on!”

The scooter-wagon combo slid without effort around the next bend, and approached the edge of a small cliff, spread out below the fifty foot drop were deeper, and darker forests. The following pack slowed down out of a mix of curiosity and necessity, due to the trail becoming too narrow to operate in the frenzied attack pattern that so clearly defined the wooden creatures.

But they were equally unwilling to let their meal go so easily.

The foremost Timberwolf raced ahead of the pack, dodging rocks from the screaming earthpony in the wagon, and gave a final lunge in an attempt to catch them.

He fell short, but not enough to miss the wagon.

The Timberwolf’s front claws smacked the back of the wagon with enough force to cause it to jump in the air, but it landed wrong.
Instead of landing neatly back on its wheels, it crashed on the front axle, violently jerking the little cart from side to side until one of the wheels caught a rock edge.

The wagon immediately went airborne again, and the fillies inside could no longer feel the metal beneath their hooves.
It smacked down again, but this time it slide partially off the trail and hung over the edge. The resulting force caused the fillies to bounce around and slide against the back.

“Apple Bloom!” cried Sweetie Belle as she tumbled over the back of the wagon.

“Sweetie!” The farm filly lunged forward and caught her friend by the hoof

“Just hang on, Sweetie!”

“LIKE I WAS GOING TO DO SOMETHING ELSE!?”

Apple Bloom bit back a sarcastic response and fought to try to pull the unicorn back into the wagon. All their saddlebags decided to try and help too, because they all shifted and now pinned the earthpony against the edge of the wagon.

The action was taking its toll on Scootaloo. The entire weight had moved to one side and she was putting more energy into keeping the scooter and what was left of the wagon on the trail, rather than move forward.

“What are you guys doing back there!” yelled Scootaloo as she risked a look back. Sparks fountained from the metal of the wagon was grinding on the rock, and she could just make out her white unicorn friend dangling for her life. Scootaloo gritted her teeth and changed her style. Instead of flapping as fast as she could with short, fast strokes, she started doing longer, powerful strokes.

There was no way she could fling the wagon back onto the trail, which meant that they had to go down.

Scootaloo took a deep breath, and drove her scooter off the edge.

Adrenaline slowed time, and the sound of her breath drowned out the screams of her friends. She could hear her heart pounding in her chest as the front wheel of the scooter dropped towards the forest below. As the wagon was the heavier item, it was the one falling first, causing her to be backwards in the free fall. It wasn’t a problem for the little pegasus though, as the same idea was in one of her stunt moves she liked to do back home when the canal was dry. Just larger scale.

Scootaloo rotated her scooter around and shifted her body down so she was now pointing at the rapidly approaching ground, and gave several powerful flaps with her wings. Pretty soon, Scootaloo was in front of the wagon and had the orientation back to normal, with the exception of falling. The pegasus kept her wings extended and leaned her body weight to one side to guide the falling scooter-wagon train to her next target; a dead tree.

The dead tree was a light grey, and sticking up out of swamp water at a lazy angle the resembled a C. It would work for a landing, if she had the wings of a fully grown pegasus. However, landing wasn’t her goal, it was the opposite; to keep going.
At the bottom of the tree was a large gather of mud a roots that gave as perfect as a ramp as she could hope for.

The scooter touched down gently on the tree, but the wagon bucked with such a force from its occupants and supplies that Scootaloo nearly lost her grip and almost got thrown off in the process. She bit off a few choice words that she had heard Rainbow Dash use a few times when things went weird or “sideways” as she would say.

The Crusaders found themselves sailing in the air again as they left the impromptu ramp of the tree. Scootaloo was ready for this landing and pulled on her handlebars in order to pull off a smoother landing. Because of the weight, she felt the wagon touch the ground first and then her own scooter, and skid to a stop. She gave herself a smile and a loud victory shout.

“Crusaders! Did you see th-” In the wagon was some sort of pile of ponies and saddle bags. She watched as one of the saddlebags shifted and Apple Bloom’s head stuck out, shooting the other filly a glare of death, of which Scootaloo couldn’t help but laugh at.

“Ah swear, Scoots, if ya ever, ever do that again, Ah’ll kill ya,” huffed the earth pony. A white hoof broke free of somewhere underneath the pile and shook in agreement.

The sound of howls in the distance stopped Scootaloo’s remark of them at least being alive. “Shoot, I thought we lost them.”

“They’re Timberwolves,” squeaked Sweetie Belle as she finally wiggled her head free. “They aren’t going to give up that easy!”

“That was easy?”

“Just get going, Scoots!” shouted Apple Bloom. The pegasus again shot forward like a rocket, causing the fillies to get squished underneath their bags in the back again just as they were nearly untangled.

The Timberwolves green eyes could be seen in the shadows behind the crusaders. It wasn't long before they were fully visible in the dim light under the trees, and were gaining on the little wagon. Scootaloo had to push her wings harder than ever before, closing her eyes to try and focus more on flying then anything else. Her wings were moving like the engine of a machine, causing the scooter's speed to be instantly doubled, almost as if it was powered by magic. Slowly, but surely, she started inching her way from the predators. Soon the Timberwolves were ten feet away... then twenty feet away. They didn't give up the chase, however they howled sadly that their food might be getting away.

But this could only last so much longer. Scootaloo was tiring out. Her wings were incredibly sore and she didn't think she could maintain this speed for much longer. She closed her eyes and hoped for a miracle, because in a moment they would be completely out of luck.

"Look! The Castle!" Sweetie Belle shouted desperately. Her voice forced Scootaloo to open her eyes. Scootaloo smiled at the sight of the Forest's end and the looming castle ruins coming into sight. As soon as she entered the clearing she slowed down to prepare to ride over the rickety bridge that sat between the crusaders and the ruins of Celestia's old castle.

"Hang on girls!" She commanded to her friends, Sweetie Belle and Apple Bloom nodded while grabbing the side of the wagon. The Timberwolves were approaching once again but Scootaloo starting forcing herself faster once again.

"Girls grab something sharp from our bags and get ready to cut the ropes!"

"CUT THE WHAT?!" Sweetie Belle yelled, voice cracking stronger then usual. Scootaloo ignored the unicorn and hoped Apple Bloom understood what to do. As they started to cross the bridge Scootaloo looked down over the side of it. Memories quickly came back to her from a few nights before... If Rainbow didn't catch her as she fell... she shuddered the thought, and refocused her attention to the situation at hoof. They reached the end of the bridge and Scootaloo came to a stop right beside the pillars the bridge's ropes were tied to. As she turned she saw Apple Bloom produce a pair of scissors out of her own saddlebag.

"Quick Apple Bloom! Cut the rope!" Scootaloo shouted. She looked up at the other side of the bridge and saw the Timberwolves starting to cross it. They would be on the Crusaders in a matter of seconds.

"APPLE BLOOM CUT IT!"

"I'M TRYING!!!"

She snipped the rope many times but despite being old, it held strong. The Timberwolves were halfway across by now.

"Come on you dumb rope come on..."

She pushed the scissors hard against the rope and it finally gave away. The bridge completely turned on its side, forcing the Timberwolves to slide off and fall down into the chasm below. They howled and whined as they fell, but when they hit the ground the girls no longer heard a peep.

The Cutie Mark Crusaders let out a big sigh. Each one of them falling to the ground, taking a moment to breathe.

"Scootaloo... this crusade isn't exactly going as you planned it so far is it?" Sweetie Belle asked.

"Well not exactly... but it's only just started," She panted softly. After a moment of rest she rose to her hooves and flexed her tiny wings, they were unbearably sore. Apple Bloom and Sweetie Belle stood up as well, glancing over at the large and ominous castle ruins spread out before them.

"Hey... you know what," Scootaloo started, "I think I've got some good news!" She trotted to the wagon. and after a moment of digging through her orange and pink saddlebag she pulled out the Equestrian map.

"Look, if we had gone ALL the way around the forest it would take us forever to get to Manehattan! Thanks to those stupid Timberwolves now we just have to go through the castle and through a little more woods and we'll be on the other side!" she proudly rolled up the map and casually tossed it back into her back. "Crusaders, we've got ourselves a shortcut!" Scootaloo stood tall and triumphant, but when she turned her attention to her friends, she found Sweetie Belle asleep next to the wagon, and Apple Bloom trotted to the other pillar that held up the bridge. She rolled her eyes and chuckled softly. "Oh come on guys we really should keep...." She let out a yawn, "going so we can... ugh. I'm tired." She trotted over to the little unicorn and gently attempted to lift her up.

"Come on Sweets get up! At least get in the wagon!"

Sweetie must've heard Scootaloo subconsciously because without opening her eyes she stood up and threw herself in the wagon.

"Alright, one down..." Scootaloo did a one-eighty and turned to face Apple Bloom.

"Apple Bloom?"

Apple Bloom stood by the rope with her scissors and was rubbing the dull blade against it. She slowly nodded off as she tried to finish the other rope off.

"Apple Bloom what are you doing?" Scootaloo asked her curiously.

"Just making both sides match." She answered back tiredly. After a minute of cutting, the rope snapped and the bridge in its entirety fell against the opposite side of the chasm. Apple Bloom waddled back over to Scootaloo. "There... I got it." She handed Scoots the scissors and then got into the wagon. She laid down next to Sweetie, and slowly drifted back into a peaceful sleep.

Scootaloo smiled. "Sleep tight Crusaders... we got a long day tomorrow!" Scootaloo hopped on her Scooter and using a hind hoof slowly pushed herself and her friends to the crumbled entrance of Celestia and Luna's old castle.


Comments ( 87 )

Hoo boy!
I have got alot of work ahead of me...:eeyup:

I always worry about fics with only a single chapter in an ongoing adventure story. Authors can get distracted or lose their inspiration, but you've gotten past that hurdle now.
Glad to see another excellent chapter.

This is getting good! Can't wait for Chapter 3!

"Look! The Castle!" Sweetie Belle shouted desperately. Her voice forced Scootaloo to open her eyes. Scootaloo smiled at the sight of the Forest's end and the looming castle ruins coming into sight. As soon as she entered the clearing she slowed down to prepare to ride over the rickety bridge that sat between the crusaders and the ruins of Celestia's old castle.

This paragraph shows up twice

4123179 I swear I deleted that! Thanks, editing errors lol:facehoof:

4123119 Yeah it took me awhile to get this going, but I won't give up on it:twilightsmile:


4123124 I'm glad you enjoyed Harmony! I can't wait to write more!:pinkiehappy:

Poor Scootaloo's wings are going to fall off at this rate! Love it so far, hope to see lots more

Talk about an adventure. It's a little difficult to read complicated action scenes like that and follow what's going on, but I got the gist of it. Well done.

HA! And Twilight's supposed to be the smart one.:twilightblush: Keep it coming, buddy.

4123588 Lol or maybe grow stronger...

Thanks, putting out the second chapter worried me... But I'm glad it's gotten good reception so far :twilightsmile:
4123607 I'll go in and try to simplify it a little bit :twilightsheepish: I'm glad the adventure feel is present. I hope to continue delivering that!

4123714 You don't have to do that. I understood basically what she was doing and I gotta say, for someone her age, that takes an incredible amount of skill, guts and sheer concentrated luck.

Okay, I suppose I have a few problems with this. :trixieshiftright:

1. I love this story so far.

2. I need moar...

3. I need Woona too.

:moustache: And those are my complaints.

4124049 lol you liked it? Yay! :pinkiehappy:


4124338 we'll see her, she'll be in there soon :twilightsmile:

4123714

Definitely can't wait to see where this story takes the crusaders

Nice work, I'm glad Twilight is an alicorn in this fic. If the crusaders can avoid a princess, it gives credence to their powers of evasion. Cant wait till Fluttershy and Pinkie pie learn of the trio of runaways. Also I hope they come acrossed something more powerful than timberwolves, and I mean apocalyptic level of power.

Ahh, good to see it up. Adventure is kinda fun to proof-read for. I'll brush up on how to do action scenes for next time.

4124338

These are good problems to have with a story.

Well, thanks to that ribbon I can totally see Rarity, Applejack, and Rainbow thinking their little sisters were eaten by Timber wolves. Just imagine the looks on their faces if they get a post card from someplace with a picture of the CMC attached and start racing off to bring them home only to be eating Crusader dust the whole time.:trollestia:

4124363 AWW YES! :huzzah:


4124422 Aren't they?! :trollestia:

Damn, that chase scene was actually pretty intense. Scoots is definitely gonna get jacked by the end of this lol. Good stuff. Keep it up.

4124408 lol I'm honestly very excited to write the next chapter! A lot of you liked it, and that's inspiration for me! I lost a handful of favorites, which makes me sad, but it's ok, I'm gonna hopefully start the next chapter soon!

Apocalyptic level huh...

I'll see what I can do :raritywink:

4124422 thanks again BL, I really enjoy working with you, when the next chapter is ready for dissection I'll let you know!


4124463 it's gonna be fun! :pinkiehappy:

4125451 Awh why thank you! I have to give credit of that scene to Blood Lord, but I'm glad I earned your fav, I hope I continue to entertain:twilightsmile:

"Soon the Timberwolves were ten feet away... then twenty feet away. They didn't give up the chase, however they howled sadly that their food that had the possibility of getting away."

Is in there twice, not sure if you did it on accident or not.

4126478 for some reason... That happened more then once... And it's annoying me lol.

I need to go re read my own chapter. Thanks for the heads up! It's not supposed to be like that. Probably an error when I transported from Gdoc to fim. :facehoof:

When did that Tragedy tag show up?
Foreshadowing...:unsuresweetie::pinkiegasp:

SHL

That's the way to start an adventure XD

4126478 One of the proofreaders (me) has seen this comment and will take the error into account. Thank you for making my job a tiny bit easier.

4128149 it's been there for a while, no worries, I'll fill you in :twilightsmile:

4128152 I'm glad you enjoyed it!

SHL

4128196
You're welcome :pinkiehappy:

What in Jelly Bean Tartar Sauce just happened? Nice work Tidal, and also Editors, nice work.:rainbowkiss:

4128194 Nah. It is fine. I like a good surprise. I just can't believe I haven't noticed it until now... :applejackunsure:

Uh, Apple Bloom has another bow, right?:unsuresweetie:

4129828 Lol they can certainly get one, yes

4128235

Thank you. (Proof reader)

This has to happen... lol

Cutie Mark Crusader Nomads! (yay)

As the wagon was the heavier item, it was the one falling first, causing her to be backwards in the free fall

From Wikipedia (and every physics textbook since the 17th century): "During the 17th century, Galileo found that, counter to Aristotle's teachings, all objects accelerated equally when falling." Sorry to be like this, but... yeah.

4171918 Shhhh, don't tell Galileo!:raritywink:

Lol thanks, I'll rework that sentence:twilightsmile:

4171930 No problem! Also, props for getting the physics of the bridge part right.

4171948 Thanks! I worked hard alongside my editors to make sure everything ran perfectly, I guess we just didn't catch that one part. :twilightsheepish:

Hope the chapter was overall enjoyable, and I'll be sure to be more careful about such sections like that for next time:twilightsmile:

Update this!!!

4265092 I'm working on it now:twilightsmile:

Whenever I take one glance at the cover art for this, "Hearts strong as Horses" just starts playing in my head.:trixieshiftright:

4436289 Same here. That's song mostly inspired this fic :twilightsmile:

4437525 I thank you for that favorite! I hope you continue to enjoy:twilightsmile:

this is exactly the kinda crusader fic ive been wanting for a while now. cant wait for the next update

...are you serious? I have work to do and you think you can just waltz in here and write this exciting and wonderful story, forcing me to read it? No no, go ahead, take my like, it's not like I have any productive work to do.

4569991 I'm gonna be updating soon... It's been too long! Thanks for the comment :twilightsmile:


4571185 :rainbowlaugh:
I'm glad you like it so far! Thank you :twilightsmile:

Any day now...

4591518
Any year now...

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