I loved the story, but the ending seemed ridiculously swift in coming.

the end? The very end? Is there any more?

482827

The story will continue, but not from me

A good ending but could been better
Happy that fluttershy wasn't killed
Can you make a sequel

482832 who will continue?

It's over?
And no picture? Aw well, I'll live.
I loved this story, it was well written. I really want to know what happens to Fluttershy, though, with all her best friends dead.

482836 I'll be continuing it... sorta.. It's more of a point of view thing with Fluttershy... I'll try to make mr happy face proud!

482836 I'll be continuing it... sorta.. It's more of a point of view thing with Fluttershy... I'll try to make mr happy face proud! 483026 I'll draw something tonight! I'm really sorry!

BUCK YOU YOU FILTHY SCUM BAG I WILL BUCK YOU UP FOR ENDING IT THERE! YOU NEED TO TELL US WHAT HAPPENS WHEN THE BODIES ARE FOUND, WHAT FLUTTERSHY DOES, HOW THE OTHER CMCs CARRY ON! YOU MONSTER HOW COULD YOU!? I'm sorry, I just need more from you for this story. I don't think anyone else could continue it correctly in your style.

483367 Easy there, turbo. The story is in good hands, trust me!

That was awesome! But, no awesome picture? And (Deep inhale) MOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOORE!!

483372 who's continuing it, I need to follow their story now.

483921 Suspicious tumbleweed. It won't be out for a while, though.

Hey Squarks... suck me schlong boiiii! Sorry, got bored.

484070 present it.

where's the picture, damn it?!?!! ololololololol

484142 YOU CAN SUCK MY INVISO DUCK TOO! as a matter of fact, I'm looking at you riiiight nooowww.. That a V-neck? a White V-neck?

it's ABOUT TIME!!! GEEEEEZUS!!!!!!

Here's the pictuuuuuuurrrr... ya whiny little -inaudible-

485629 it needs to be about 20% cooler

AWESOME! PICTURE

487269 Why thank you!

Sweeties mark means and yes its a guess that she makes you see the last moments of your life break in front of you

489455 look at the big brain on cornlover! That's actually exactly what I was going for

489629 WELL SHIT! It was only a guess

489635 what a boss... im done writing the first chapter of fluttershy's POV you guise... scarred? It'll be up when i draw a pic for it tonight. NECRO 4 LYFE.

I think sweetie belle's means inpatience.
I really wish scoots hadnt died

DONT CALL ME SCOOTS YOU SON OF A BITCH!!!

where did you come from?!??! What are you doi-

490561 O, by the way thanks for making my picture for ze Coucil S.T! and careful suprises lurk in every corner...

497370 wana know what fluttershy did?? check out the cutie mark killers 2. should be up there heheheheheHAHAHAHAHAHHAHHA!!!

What about fluttershy? Why didn't she die? Pretty good story though.

534151 Thanks! Flutters isn't dead because her story isn't over yet

534151 try reading the other comments.. also the one right above your head.

534493 Oh... Okay!

Nearly 1500 views later...

705409 Well, it was actually 3 brooms taped together into a tri-dildo, so yeah...

This emote seems appropriate now

Fucking great btw.

this got me off SO many times.

What I find most disturbing is the fact that I'm completely ok with this.

WTF IS WRONG WITH ME!?!?!?!?!

The fuck I just read?!?!

Well, I can't say that I enjoyed that. I mean, I like Grimdark and all (Cupcakes, Cheerilee's Garden, Rainbow Factory, that kind of thing) but those had interesting stories and were decently well written (the latter two especially) but this... wasn't. I'm sorry but between the ridiculous (and overdone) premise and the amount of errors in it I wouldn't re-read this. The basic story has potential but... yeah.

2243633 not to mention your story, that thing is amazing. But I can't get my friends to read it... I think it has to do with the fact that I've had a couple of them read sweet apple massacre, so they've lost all trust in my suggestions...

That was a great story! Although the end did seem the tiniest bit rushed and abrupt, it was still great. I loved the running gag that Fluttershy somewhat enjoyed all of the killings, and was attracted to them. (also the hinted necrophilia)
ANYWAYS good job! TENOUTTATEN

Dammit, it's over?!? Well, buck! Back to my "Faves" page, I guess. *whistles "Giggle at the Ghosties" and trots off*

3115525
I could ask the same question

3308085 Damn son, over a year after it was published. I thought I got all the spelling mistakes ironed out. Good eye.

3313681
To make it easier if you want to correct them, most of these are near the beginning of After School Special, though some are closer to the middle/end.
Sorry to nitpick, as well. It's a habit. Take no offense by my pointing out these errors, I still enjoyed the story greatly.

Who was more dedicated then her and the other cutie mark crusaders?

>Than

AppleBloom

>Apple Bloom's name is two words, but I can understand if you don't want to comb through your entire story and weed out every time her name is mentioned.

Finally, when Cheerilee stopped talking for a moment, Sweetie Belle shot her hand up.

>Ponies don't have hands, they have hooves...

Cheerilee smiled softly and said: “yes, Sweetie Belle?”

“Well…” She began: “If a cutie mark is what reflects what you are best at, what happens if what you are best at is something bad?”

>No colons, friendo.
>Capitalise the beginning of her sentence.
>Again, no colons, dude.

“ummm…” Sweetie Belle trailed off, not sure how to continue. “Let’s say that there was a pony who was a really good robber. Would his cutie mark be something that reflects that?”

>Capitalise the beginning of Sweetie's sentence.

Cheerilee chuckled to herself. These three always had some scheme or adventure planned to obtain there marks.

>Their

“I’ll try my best.” Cheerilee said, closing her eyes and beaming at them.

“Good”

>Needs a period after "good." In fact, in many places, I'm not putting them all, you lack punctuation at the end of what ever sentence somepony's saying.

“Grab Her!” Shouted Sweetie Belle, her horn lighting up again.

>"Her" needs to not be capitalised.

However, the Teacher still screamed her blood-curtailing scream into AppleBloom’s hoof.

>"Teacher" needs to not be capitalised.

“Uhhh… Yeah…” AppleBloom stammered. Her normally off-yellow coat hat turned slightly pale.

>Had

Guess I'm not sleeping tonight good story though

**comes back 6 months later"
-_-

*thinkthinkthink*

Okay, whats the broken hourglass symbolism?

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