On a cold market day, Berry Punch remembers her foal's first words.
Trigger warning: some innuendo, lots of swearing.
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I rather like Berry Punch, so I felt obligated to post a comment lambasting that heathen false name you have published her under!
Heh.
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I prefer Berry Punch to Berryshine, but the official name is what it is.... At least Dr. Hooves is now Canon.
Bitteesweet, with hints of hope. I liked this, yes yes.
Kids say the darnedest things. I was watching my friends son, and he belts out a Goddamnit. I know that my friend was the one who taught him it. After I laughed at it I was like shit, I'm making it worse...
Reinforcing the use of the word with laughter.
Eh Babies on up to 4, don't know better. Language wasn't the problem anyway, it was her stupid Baby daddy leaving that was the problem.
This reminded me of my own mother, a woman with great intentions, beautiful dreams, and none of the luck or knowledge to follow through. Well done. Any chance of a sequel?
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Sort of . . . the second half of her day is half done (and that half's been pre-read, even). I meant to publish it right around Christmas, then by January first, and then other things kept coming up. But at some point it will be finished and published.
She's also going to be a figure in another upcoming story, which is set several years before the show starts.
I knew it! I knew that's what the kid would say.
This is the rare kind of story that I actually find adorable.
They mention in one of the Side Stories that Berryshine had a foal under questionable circumstances don't they?
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Yes, as well as saying that Cormano was the father.
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So is this happening in the same universe?
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It is. There's about a half-dozen stories which all happen in my 'verse (as yet unnamed), including some of the prompt fics. The prompt-fic where Golden Harvest is telling Noi the Hearth's Warming Eve story takes place right after this one (Noi and Pinch built the snowpony). There's a third unfinished story which spans the gap between these two.
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Maybe the Bicuitverse?
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I considered it, but that just doesn't seem serious enough. I mean, it'd be fine if I was writing comedy. But, maybe that's just me. Maybe everyone else thinks "biscuit" and has serious thoughts.
Would you read a story if it claimed to be part of the "Biscuitverse?" I also thought of "Daleverse," but that makes me think of NASCAR. Celestia-Sleeps-Inverse is just too cumbersome.
I could just go with "Pony Planet;" that's got a nice ring to it.
A Foal's First Words, part of the Pony Planet series.
I dunno. I think I'll ask in a blog post.
I have to say that I like this. I liked it for several reasons. Yeah, Berry isn't the best mother in the world. (That award goes to Ditzy Doo) But I think that she has her daughter's best intentions at heart. I really do. She's skimping out on several things he could use in order to buy a doll for her. Plus she couldn't help that Cormano didn't want to be part of Berry Pinch's life.
All in all this story deserves a favorite, a like, and you deserve a follow.
- LF
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You may also enjoy Relaxing on a Cloud and Hearth's Warming Eve--both Slice of Life featuring Derpy.
For some cuteness overload, you might also like So It Begins, a one-shot with Golden Harvest and Noi.
This was great. Berry Punch may seem incredibly bitter, but deep down we know she has her heart in the right place.
And there goes the relationship.
Oh dang, I knew it.
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Was this when you made the name Pony Planet series?
Also this fic was cute and endearing. Sure Berry isn't the best mother in Equestria (that goes to Celestia and Luna [Ditzy a close second]), but she's far from the worst (who ever Snips and Snails parents are. Who what ever mare had Diamond Tiara slither from her womb.). But she does her best as an Earth Pony raising a unicorn, and it's kind of cute seeing what she's been through raising her daughter to the best of her skills.
I'm heading over to the sequel now.
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I think it's when it was officially decided upon. There was some discussion before this.
Like so many mothers, she tries her best.
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Looks pretty good to me XD. Honestly I'd put her on the top 5. Sure she swears like a sailor, and hits the bottle every now in then. But she'd bust down the doors of Tartarus and buck Tirek in the nuts if that's what'd it take to protect her daughter. That and she apparently has some awesome folks in her life that she needs to connect with [her dad is one. And she definitely owes Santa Derpy a super sized hug
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Berry is a favourite if mine, and this is well written. I'm posting to share my approval, and I'm leaving an upvote.
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Thanks! She's such a lovable character (and did you see her a couple of episodes ago, stomping fruit with Cherry Berry?)
One of my favorite BG ponies.
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Hmmm. Season 6? I always seem to miss little details. Which episode was it?
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The one where AB was angsting about her cutie mark.
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Thanks! I'll have another look.
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It was a pretty quick cutscene, but my headcanon is that Cherry Berry and Berry Punch are pretty good friends, and that just validated it.
berry punch you are a terrible mother
The joke was predictable that her kid would say f**k. Would have been better if she said something like Berry! Would have made the story more Hearthwarming.
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But it is heartwarming because she's trying her best.
Well, that just happened. Regardless, Berry tries hard to be a good mother and she should be proud of that
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Agreed. I really like her as a mother character, even if she's not terribly good at it.
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Indeed.
Very 2013
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Those were simpler times
You took what should have been a punchline and turned it tragic. c.c Wow.