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Ezio Auditore


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In a time in Equestria where Hearth's Warming has simply become mere marketing, Rainbow Dash tries to find the true meaning of Hearth's Warming.

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So... I'll be completely honest. I checked this out because of your name.

3619734 I have no problem with that :eeyup:

3622346 Ezio Auditore de Ferenze... It is not sad that I know his full name and don't try to tell me it is

3622346 Ezio Auditore de Ferenze... It is not sad that I know his full name and don't try to tell me it is

Lemme guess, you wrote this for the contest?

3625624 I did indeed ^.^ And of course to share a hopeful message during this season.

With the massive affair of Apple Family Reuinions, it feels a bit out of character to display Applejack and the rest of the Apple family as not very concerned with traditional celebrations.

(Or, perhaps, they view working together as a family to be quality time of a sort. Hard to say.)

In any case, how the hay are they harvesting Apples in the winter?

Do I not properly understand Apple orchards, or is Applejack just a boss like that?

Anyway, I enjoyed it.

3647598 Concern noted, it was less of a reunion and more of a small congregation to celebrate Hearth's Warming and to pick the apples.

There is a winter apple harvest, though some apples die of frostbite, it's nowhere near as bad as citrus fruits during the winter. :pinkiehappy:

Also thank-you :twilightsmile:

*claps hooves* I liked it. Not the best fic I've ever read, but good all the same.
Down to the bones now- (reviews)

PROS
Well written with a good wording throught the entire story. (not choppy like- Rainbow dash waved hi. Pinkie waved back and also said hi)
Characters were written in detail, and I felt I could really connect to what they were saying and feeling.
I felt that it really, truly grasped the concept of Hearths Warming/Christmas. Others just seem to blow this off in general.


CONS
It was short. A little too short if you ask me. I felt like it was almost rushed to an end. I would have had you continue at least another chapter. It was like "I-need-a-hug" and "I've-been-hugged-and-now-I'm-okay" sort of thing. Rainbow should have at least tried with 2 more ponies.
Also, even though the characters were well worded,(Rainbow and Applejack) I thought they didn't quite embody themselves- Rainbow Dash should have been a bit more tough. (I get the whole it's Hearths Warming time thing, but to just drop the whole athletic competitive thing didn't sit right to me) Applejack would never choose family over work. It's not like her at all. (I absolutley loved Pax though:pinkiehappy:)
Honestly I'm running out of bad things to say about this fic, so down to nitpicking- How could Rainbow dash have a pet rabbit as a filly if she lived in Cloudsdale?




Overall score out of ten stars- 8.5/10

3647634 Thank you very much for your time, I'm a bit new to the world of fic writing, that one was my first, I know it was a bit short, I had a deadline to meet and wouldn't of had the time to add a new chapter, also my thoughts were running dry and it may have been a poor chapter anyways.

Thank you very much :eeyup:

3647690 you're welcome. :twilightsmile: But your number of followers states otherwise. You don't get that many unless you're good at something. If you got some time later on in life, I'd like to see it continued. In the meantime, have a Merry Christmas!

3647710 Well i had a few followers because of my username, I'm not sure if you're familiar with Assassin's Creed but Ezio Auditore is the main character in 3 of them :twilightsmile:

And maybe I'll do a sequel next year :eeyup:

Merry Christmas to you too. :pinkiehappy:

3647631

Come to think of it, it might be a lot of work to do the winter harvest, so perhaps their relatives come to celebrate and then pitch in with some work as something of a family tradition.

I don't think Applejack would place work over family, but perhaps to her working with them is just part of the family tradition rather than a break from it.

Also, Rainbow Dash is a silly filly for not buying some form of baked apple pastry from Applejack: its good stuff.

Anyway, since I am supposed to be a judge later, I'll try to put together a somewhat cohesive analysis for that time.

I just like mulling over fanon.

3647761 Questioning fanon is one of my favorite pastimes :twilightsmile:

Thanks a bunch for your input, it means a lot :eeyup:

Pretty darn good :)

I'd love to see a sequel to this, maybe finding out what happened to AJ and Rarity afterwards.

Great story, really sweet. :)

3662348 Thank you so much, if you haven't already please consider giving a 'like' and thank you again, as a first time fic writer it means a lot to know someone has appreciated my work. :twilightsmile:

So, this story has a good message, but I feel like it falls a little flat. Your characters are kind of ooc. I feel like,had you picked someone else, it might be a bit better. Also, the way you describe everything is very dreary and so quick paced it's hard to get into the story. Though I do think Pax was a great character! It's an okay story, but I feel like it could have been executed a bit better.

That was such a sweet story! It was so heartfelt!
This officially made "Hearth's Warming Eve" my favorite episode of season two :pinkiehappy::yay:
You get a WingedBrohoof (\ ( ̄▽ ̄ )

3705674 Thank you so much /) :eeyup:

3705681 It's all good :) I like Pax :derpytongue2:
And a belated Merry Christmas to you :rainbowwild: and a Happy New Year

I really liked this story, it is cute, sweet, and reminds me that Christmas is only a few seasons away! :twilightsmile:

Hey there! I enjoyed this story so I narrated it! Hope you don't mind. :twilightsmile:

7802799 Oh wow, I'm really quite flattered :pinkiehappy:

I'm glad you enjoyed it, thank you very much. :twilightsmile:

7802880 Your very welcome. :twilightsmile:

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