Co-Author: benjamin
Editor (and the best): LetThereBeWords
"Because Day and Night were meant to be together"
This is the story of Golden Sun, your everyday 16 year old stallion; shy, funny and a great friend, who works in a coffee shop as a cashier. His life is not particularly exciting, that is until the day he meets the love of his life, Night Star, consort and advisor of Princess Luna. He is not only one of the most handsome ponies in all of Canterlot but he is also a fun, loving, caring and responsible pony with a secret no one else knows.
After some plans to get to know each other better the two of them start feeling something for each other, but they can’t tell the other for fear of losing him.
What will the future tell for our lovers?
Will their love conquer everything?
Oh damn.
I don't mean this offensively at all, but you did a perfect job of using pony creator to make two homosexual-looking OC's. I didn't even know that was possible.
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I don't know if take that as a complement or not.... but thanks XD
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This was pretty ok aside from the alicorn part. I could read this without killing myself. Didn't even notice that fact about the cover image until now.
Fug.
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haha thank you... I hope you like it...
3449966 wow bro me and my colt friend have been working on this for a while nice to know you can read it with out killing your self bye the way im the co arthour
It aint looking to be on the right track, but I'll give til ch. 3.
GAAAAAAAY.
3450148 kind of the whole point
3450112what is the matter with it
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>Alicorn OC
"“But how? How will I get over the hung pony that made my ass stretch like no pony has?!” Luke was starting to make a drama out of this." This whole scene escalated rather quickly.
And it doesn't quite fit the MO of the group it was submitted for.
But like I said, I'll give to 2 or 3 more chapters before I write it off.
3450305whats wrong with alicorn oc
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Well Alicorns are portrayed in the series as rare with power beyond that of what anypony else can do, have wings and horns, and have one "Super talent", I suppose is a good name for them. Only Luna and Celestia can move the moon and sun by themself, Only Cadence has complete control over love and Twilights uberness has yet to be fully explored but she was already one of the most powerful mages in history.
TL;DR, Alicorn is short hand for Mary Sue in OCs.
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OK OK OK GUYS CHILL THE FUCK OUT!
I will change Night to be an Unicorn so please stop all the fighting please...
3450342 but now just go with me on this but what if luna made night in to an alicorn?
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But the story looks promising, I look forward to see the next chapter
Let's see where this goes.
When will u add more?
please hurry
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Im really really sorry..... but right now I dont have enough free time even for breath I will update the story the most fastest I can... please forgive me guys... Im really sorry...
3573307 Take your time
will you continue this story i'd really love to see a new chapter