Writing short stories is my specialty but I am willing to try new things.
World Wide (me) has a huge Crush on a foot ball player who is way out of my league. And when I accidentally spill his food all over his jersey, I run into the bathroom. But when he comes to comfort me, will they be friends, or more?
Please leave any comments on how I can improve my story.
Oh and just because they are mentioned doesn't mean they are a main part of the story.
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It'll come later.
The pacing in this is off, its too fast. Gonna keep reading for now due to the how short the chapter is.
Please give me any advice on what I could do better.
I have to admit that I find this story kind of cute. It makes me slightly sad that the chapters are so short...
oh this is the new edit; the old chapters were much shorter and the last chapter I made is going to be longer.
I like where the story is going.
I hope they end up together!
I'm sorry but, HOLY. FUCKING. SHIT. I've haven't laughed so in a while.
With that being said, it's a pretty good story so far, but, my man, you need to spread it out before it becomes basically one jump-cut to another.
I'd love to follow this story and see where it goes.
Stay based, bro(ny)!
hey I am having writers block and it will be a while before I can think of anything so I will be hopefully collaborating with a friend on this but for now this story is on a temporary break.
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You can take a break from the story to gather ideas, or discuss the story with people, see what ideas they have for the story.
In worst case, directly PM your followers, I'm sure they'll be happy to help out!
I am trying my hardest guys. I have been lazy and Tarot is not responding my emails.
SO FAR IM LOVING THIS!!
Lol I'm back! Is this based on geography club
4614490 I have no idea what that is. So no, and is it a tv show?
sorry about the long wait but hey I have been busy with family. and since school is coming up you are going to have to wait a bit longer. sorry
3991150 Me oh my, good story so far!
4029017 honestly, perfect.
Guys I am super sorry but my school work is becoming more difficult. I mean come on I am a junior in high school I will be busy. That and I have more writers block. So unfortunately have to postpone Burned Passions for awhile. I will tell you when I am back. Again very sorry.