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Mistress Darkhoof
Erotica writer with a love for discipline and obedience. Step into my dark, lusty world.
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nope.
3158392 Nope?
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not my cup of tea. really, gave it a try but really not my thing. mostly of the dark tag mixed with sex, makes it seem like rape to me.
3158410 No, it's not rape. D/s is Dominant/submissive. That in itself is not rape, just a very dark, erotic way of expression. That's fine though, it's not everyone's cup of tea. Hehe.
3158414
eh everybody has different fetishes
will follow for future works,
3158426 Thanks, that's appreciated. I've followed you as my reminder to read some of your work, too. It's midnight over here and my mind is slipping into that sleepy, incoherent territory, lol.
My god this is awesome
3158504 Why thank you. I'll probably update this in the morning, as I'm currently on chapter four. It only gets better from here <3
3158535
Yay
Oh man, never enough of this. And though the opening was brief this looks higher quality than most of the fetish stories on fimfiction (not exactly a high bar, though).
3158565 That actually means a lot, thank you. I've been writing for about 11 years straight so the comment about quality is a real reward to read <3 I guess that means I can't let the quality of my work slide, then!
My my my what a way to start us off. I can tell this has good things in store for us. Sorry Twi, said good things might come at your expense.
I will disapointed in you if you continue this
There aren't enough quality D/s fics on this site, especially involving the princesses and twilight. Hope this changes that.
3158673 Get used to disappointment, sweetie. I'm four chapters into this already <3
3158681 Thanks. I'm a very harsh editor on myself and I don't believe in releasing half-assed work, so I release what I believe is the best that I can churn out. If it helps increase the quality then I think I would have done a good job around here C;
3158587 Oh, yes. Twi better hang on tight while she can, things are going to get going real fast, real soon
3158716sorry missed typed I meant I would dsapointed if you DONT keep this going
3158795 HAHA! One word can make all the difference, you know C;
Intriguing premise. I'll have to come back and check this out after you have a few more chapters posted.
I do apologize Mistress however I can't help it.
3158414 It may not be rape, but it's certainly kidnapping and betrayal so far, as far as Twi is concerned. How could Celestia hurt her like that? The poor thing is frightened out of her mind.
3159171 If your being serious, I'm afraid you may be in the wrong genre. ( if your playing along then I feel silly)
Also not my cup of tea. But Twilestia is Bestia, so I'll be adding this to the folder "clopfics" with your permission.
I will read this. Probably not right now, it's 7 AM, I am DONE, thank your deity or deities or other choice of things, with my shift, and need, and will have, my rest, just as soon as I finish one or two or three or five other things. Still. Being a switch? Submissive Twi is a favorite of mine. So's dominant Twi. So yes, kiddies.... I will be reading and following this closely.
This probably one of the few things which make Blueblood glad he was born a dude...
3159447 Yes, you have my permission. Thank you. We all have different cups of tea. Mine is just flavored a little darker, I think.
3159171 I know she's frightened, but do you think she'd willingly put herself there outside of Princess Celestia's orders? Even if Princess Celestia gave her a direct order, there'd still be all sorts of conflict
3159158 Naughty Silver, don't give too much away <3 I see you've gotten my message, btw. Nice to see you here.
3159600 Well yes, but that's just it, Celestia did order her to go to canterlot, and then she abducts her. What's up with that? The only logical reason is to scare the living crap out of her, I get that the idea is for Twilight to submit, but this doesn't seem to serve that purpose. She's just being mean, which isn't really like Celestia at all. Just my thoughts.
3159600 is fine. This should get you more tea sales, if we're to extend the metaphor even further.
Looks like this is a side of cadence that twilight could have gone without seeing.
Tentative fave. D/S isn't really my thing, and i may stop reading in the future, but the concept itself is interesting.
This... this is just silly. Like, really silly.
Look, I get it. I get that this is just fetish fuel, and that's fine! For real, I am totally cool with people writing things that play into whatever their kinks are, but that's not an excuse for poor story-telling and blatant mischaracterization. I don't comment on stories I don't like except when I see things that are ridiculous, contrived, or just plain stupid... and this is kind of all three. If you want to write fetish fuel, by all means, do so, but again, "it's just clop" is not an excuse.
Don't misunderstand me, this is decently, dare I say well written. Grammar seems sharp, and your dialogue sounds natural. It's apparent you put a good amount of work into this. The issue is that the scenario makes no sense, for the characters AND for the world. Celestia wouldn't do this! She's like a mother to Twilight, she would not put her through this without consent. The very idea of sexual subjugation, even temporarily, in any way translating into ability to rule is beyond silly. I can think of a thousand different scenarios that would allow for the exact same actions that are to come and do not revolve around, "Have kinky lesbian sex with us, or you lose your crown."
Look, I'M a leader, so trust me when I say that I get it. Knowing when and how to shut up and follow IS a vital part of being a leader, but this... gah, it's just ... SILLY! Unless this ends with some kind of "Oh, we were just kidding, you were never in danger of losing your title." But even THAT would be pushing it. I don't care how badly Twilight may secretly love/lust after Celestia/Luna/Cadance, I d can not see her going along with this. And Celestia/Luna/Cadance would never be THAT cruel.
I apologize for being blunt, but I am a Drill Sergeant; it's kind of my job to be an asshole.
3159889 actually really do like this comment, so first off, thank you. Maybe I should have tagged it more as alternative universe, as it's not directly within the "canon" world. Consent is a huge part of the D/s scene but I think the trust that's already established is what fuels it. Also as for fetish fuel, in the M/s scene, the Master is just as dependent on the slave as the slave is on the Master. D/s isn't necessarily my field, but that will be a reoccurring theme later; that it's not necessarily rape, but trust building in the sense of being broken down and rebuilt stronger than before. I guess I should include that a little more clearly, eh?
Thanks. Keep kicking my butt by all means. That's not meant to be sarcasm either, all writers need someone to keep them in line C;
3159927 That is actually something I feel I skipped on or played on too lightly since I got uh, ahead of myself. A writer's job is never done! C:
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Very true. In the M/S, the slave is the one holding the true power, because all they have to say is "stop"... or, "banana" in this case, I guess. (by the by, I lol'd at that.
And therein lies the problem: what exactly is Twilight being taught here? How is this supposed to teach her to be a better leader? Being broken down and built back stronger is, in the most literal sense of the term, what I do. I know that you have to break someone's sense of self to make them a better soldier, but trying to coach it in terms of sex is, well... silly! Again, there are dozens of different scenarios and things that could lead to the sexiness that will follow. I really think you need to rethink this whole "Required part of being a Princess" aspect. Honestly, that is what is breaking everything down for me. It's not the actions, per se... well, no, it kind of is, as I still can't see these characters acting this way. Not the whole BSDM thing, but abducting her against her will with no prior knowledge, while at the same time leaving her friends in the dark. I halfway expect a scene where Shining Armor, Spike, and the girls break down the door mid-coitus because they think their sister/friend is being raped. I can't see any explanation that would codify them in this situation, especially Shining, RD, AJ, and Spike. But if you add an AU tag... eh, I guess. It's making it some contrived kind of requirement that tips it over into being, well... do I need to say it again?
Also, thank you SO much for being rational. You have NO idea how many times I have done something like this only to be flooded with hate mail and downvotes for stating my opinion.
faved
3159968 I couldn't help myself after seeing that, "I'm a banana" video with Celestia's face on it. Guilty reference? Check.
Thinking back over it, the "Princess Training" was meant to be something like...some secret underground organization deeply rooted in tradition that, at one point, made sense and now everyone carries on ridiculous tradition for the sake of tradition. Twilight could be the one to break the tradition; she may crumble under its weight. Again, something I didn't explain well in the beginning because I had gotten ah, ahead of myself (I'm an erotica writer by trade, so three guesses as to why I got ahead of myself, haha). Chapter two might have been released a bit too early, but with my usual writing pacing, this chapter wouldn't have been available for release for fifty years if I had kept refining and refining...but I guess there's something to be said about rushing :P
Also, was that last word you were think of, "Fetish fuel"? I rather like that phrase.
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Hmm... You know, my big issue stems from the way these things usually end, with the subject becoming some kind of newborn fetishist, suddenly e snored with the process because, of course, they secretly always wanted it.
But, if Twilight ends up no being able to take it... Cracks under the pressure, ends up admitting that she can't do it, breaks out into tears, screams the safe word under the weight of being so thoroughly destroyed and broken, begs to be let out and stripped of her title and wings because she failed and is now certain that she can't be a true leader.
OR! She gets mad. Under the last step, when "Queen" Celestia is humiliating her, defiling her, constantly insulting and demeaning her, demanding her to do... Something. Some kind of humiliating thing to show she truly submits, she snaps. "Get you filthy I king hooves off of me! I will NOT submit! You can beat me, hurt me, rape me, I don't care! I will NOT back down, and if that's what it takes to be a princess, then you take these wings and shove hen up your fat ass, TIA!"
Then, Celestia smiles. The chains fall off. "Now, my faithful... no, your highness, NOW you are ready to ear the weight of rule. You know that before all else, you must be stronger for your subjects."
THAT would make this not just fetish fuel, but an extremely interesting character study.
Oh god Jesper, I told you to choose ONE fic I had to read today, and you picked this?
Holy Hell this is interesting! BTW, you OC is fantastic! What do you use?
3160179 Thanks! I actually used the standard Pony Generator. v3 came out recently, someone posted a link in a local brony group I'm a part of and I went crazy with it C: I couldn't figure out how to add a cutie mark like the one I'd used before so I dropped her in Photoshop and added it myself, lol.
http://generalzoi.deviantart.com/art/Pony-Creator-v3-397808116
3160217 No kidding! Thanks!
3159889 I agree with everything said here except "like a mother to her".
Fuck sake, some times I just wished this story was full-on (That being complete.) so I could just row-read it, put it away in my trashcan and never open it again.
3159889
This is why I can't read beyond the first chapter and downvoted, although it isn't silly, it's disturbing (to me). Kidnapping, drugging, and eventual rape by a quasi-mother figure and her actual sister-in-law.
interesting, lets see where the story goes.
3160685
Well, let's be fair, it's not really rape. The author changed it a bit to make the consent part more clear.
I still have the issues listed, but the rapey bit is gone.
3160770
I'll take your word for it. I read the first chapter earlier this morning (I'm assuming prior to any revision)
Having said that, I chose not to say anything then because I couldn't put my finger on why exactly this fic creeped me out when so many others I've read like this didn't. Then I read your comment and a light bulb went off.
Still, I find kidnapping and drugging by what amounts to family a little too dark for my tastes, not to mention the other reasons you listed
3160685
Then I would suggest steering clear of stories with the "Dark" tag
3161028
Therein lies my problem: I used to avoid Dark tags like the plague. Then, on a whim, I decided to read one and it was REALLY good. Soon after, I read more. Not all of them were to my liking, but enough of them were amazing enough that avoiding the Dark tag would cause me to miss out on a lot of quality fiction. To borrow from Confucius - it's like using a cannon to kill a fly.
Instead I'm left reading fics until they cross a line with me that I don't even realize is there until it's been crossed
I see what you did there...
3160056
Interesting thoughts.
Your first scenario does sound like something she might do. The second one, not so much, I think.
Following the first thought: even if Twilight "successfully" manages her Princess Training, there's still the (likely) possibility that she'll be emotionally hurt- in a way that makes it impossible for her to look at the other three Princesses the same way ever again; because she feels she can no longer trust them. I think seeing Twilight afraid of her could be devastating to Celestia, even if it's only manifested in "little" things: like being uncomfortable when alone with her and the other princesses, and turning emotionally distant in her letters. That could be the thing showing her this training just might've run its course, and should be abolished.