"If you're hearing this... then there is still hope. Hope that you can avoid the same mistakes we made. We fought the Reapers, but we failed to stop them. We did everything we could. We built the Crucicble, but it didn't work. We fought as a united Galaxy, but it wasn't enough. I only hope the information in this capsule is enough to help you before it's too late.
My name is Liara T'Soni. Herein lies the recounting of our war with the Reapers."
(Being familiar with the Mass Effect games would really help you in this story.)
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Hmm, this looks interesting. I think I'll read this.
I was hoping to find a story based on this ending. Fav and watch.
Awwwww was expecting them to find shepard inside a freezer
So far, it's looking pretty good. There's a few mistakes in the grammar and such, but it doesn't make the story unreadable.
Looking forward to what comes next.
Ok, I cancelled the poll because I now have someone who will be helping me with the story and he made a good point so as to which Shepard I should use. Sorry if its not the Shep you want, but its the most fitting one for the circumstances and events I have planned for future chapters.
so this is what happens when you pick the color blue...
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Actually, this is what happens when you refuse to take action and allow the Reapers to continue their harvst.
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HA!!! I've been waiting for a good Mass Effect crossover. This one certainly takes the cake.
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I'm glad you like it
My hand slipped and I accidentally press the dislike button
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What didn't you like about it, if I may ask?
ill watch it and see where it goes.
You're moving too fast and not allowing the characters to develop. Great concept, poor execution. I... would suggest starting over and allowing a bit of buildup before you leap right to the discovery.
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I understand what you're saying but considering this is a fanfic, the readers already know who these characters are. Though you will see development among them later on, I want the theme of this part of the story to be somewhat fast paced so the readers could feel like the characters would when all of these events start suddenly unfolding.
I'm a newer writer and I appreciate the feedback on all of this, so thank you for that.
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Not necessarily. For one, this is a crossover, so you have to assume half the setting is unknown to any reader and it may not be the same half as another reader. For another, even if it IS a fanfic, you need to set roots before you try to grow. At least "this is how it was before." At the moment, though, all it is is "SUDDENLY ANCIENT ARTIFACT EVERYONE SCRAMBLES WE HAVE NO EMOTIONAL CONNECTION." Fiction is about the characters and their interactions, but I'm not feeling these guys at all.
Don't the reapers only kill people if they have space travel? T'soni is pretty much dooming them all.
They don't have any humans, so wouldn't Liara have been a minotauroid? Also, the Reapers only go after advanced species, so the ponies wouldn't be in any danger, unless they invented space flight in the next few decades. Maybe not even then, if it's only the level of the current Earth's space flight.
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Just wait and see
3141757 Well you have to remember, not every species of life has to evolve the same way, If you played the ME3 DLC that contained Javik, he comments on how life during his cycle had 4 eyes, and the only species that has 4 eyes in Shepard's cycle is the Batarians. So it is possible that eventually, life could evolve to look like an Equine species.
Humanity's innate, overwhelming badassery will be remembered.
Sure there is, but you ponies advance so slowly that you'd likely die of overpopulation before inventing a rocket capable of leaving your atmosphere. Then again, you have 50,000 years. On the other hand, humanity seems to be the only ones who advanced quickly enough, due to curiosity and tenacity combined with competitiveness, that 50,000 years would be enough for us to simply laugh at the Reapers and squish them like over-sized bugs.
For example, canon says the Prothean cache moved our tech forward by two hundred years. Two hundred years when the other species had it for hundreds, even thousands of years. Meaning that if we had the time they did (either the second newest citadel species or the Protheans), the Reapers would have had no chance.
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To be fair, there was no reason to expect sapient life to develop on Eden Prime. Partly because it was one of the worlds burned by the Reapers. Which is why she put the capsule there, because she figured anyone who could find it must have space flight, given the state of the world it was put on.
I'm concerned about finding the Capsule in the ruins. It was a grand, bold castle in it's prime (you could figure this out in the series pilot) so why would no-one notice a beeping pillar?
Unless it powered up recently, or any number of reasons but I can't imagine this being found near where anything used to exist. I am curious about it though.
Will they discover and use tech Liara left behind? That would be interesting seeing how a species like this uses ezo. Unless pegasi and unicorns already use it in magic and flight?
Heads up, the site does not allow stories with exchanges like the talk between Sovereign and the Sheperd's team. I think you can get away with it if it's a recording like that but I would suggest fixing it to something less 'scripted.'
You have my interest, go on.
Also, why would Rainbow and Pinkie be there with Celestia watching it? I can understand Twilight but not them. Also, Sheperd sounds like a pansy. Don't have him/her always pick the neutral option. Throw the Sheperd you used and go with it, but don't make him/her a wuss like that.
Liara left Glyph in her time capsules, she was there to give an introduction but I thought Glyph would be the primary VI.
Also, Liara should have known you don't need to use Reaper tech. Ezo wouldn't hurt their chances but they should develop their own tech, biotics, magic, weapons and more. And no-one said ponies had to leave Eden Prime at all, if they stay where they are the Reapers will never come for them.
And are you making Rarity the 'Sheperd' this cycle? That should mix things up from Twilight or Spike leading things as they usually do.
We beg patience from you readers
3847825 for this story i have nothing but patience for.
I still have patience but I need MORE!!!
Can I make a suggestion on the next story:
1) A more indepth explaination on the heavy Reaper casualties since their current military means do not explain it. I think a beter explantion is that the humans began a last ganbit by destorying the Mass Relays of the most ocupied Reaper Control space, ex all the homeworlds that the Reapers gathered. It also give the Ponies hope they can win the war since the Reaper Numbers are so small.
2) I suggest you have none of the species in the Council eara, even the primitive ones do not surivive. I doudt the Reapers would attack the Yagh at first, but would wait to build up their numbers before invading at the end of the cycle to build up their numbers. Same with the Roli. So that means I think only OC species should be introduce that Equestria will meet.
This fics has potential, but it would be a hard fic to write, a war with the Reapers won't be short or simple, it will be very big and complex.
I will contribute with something:
-The Humans brought to Eden Prime all kind of animals and plants from Earth (that actuallly happend, it is in the codex), but genetically modified them; with time, they evolved, started using biotics, and then toke it to higher levels, thus they are now the first species to wield magic.(ponies, dragons)
- It would interesting that the ponies find lifepods, with the crew, the normandy, an others individuals of species; in that way they will advance faster, because they are not technologically advanced, and they need something that push them, they alone would take forever(magic makes them lazy).
-No matter how much help they get, there is no much time to prepare, but they got enough to travel through the mass ralays and find the citadel, now with true space travel species, they warn them, and start preapering.
As I said before, this fic will have to be big, probably with various sequels to be properly explained, good luck.
i have to say friendship beating the reapers? yea right you need a ton of people,ships,and guns
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He he he he he he! HAHAHAHAHA
You will die for your ignorance
3136450 The reapers kill off every space fairing race, yes, but she would have expected them to be a bit more advanced than they are and the cycle repeats, so the ponies would die one way or another.
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are they insane? they think friendship can kill an army of galaxy cleansing robots, the citadel relay, AND SHEPARD AS A REAPER.
so story dead?
Note was posted in May.
Comment posted in late October.
Story dead?
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It's not dead, I'm just an asshole.
I've been thinking about the story since the last time I updated it, just haven't gotten around to it is all.
I promise this story won't die until I do. It's only going to improve when we come back to it.
“The wait will soon be over, I assure you.”
And then it wasn’t.