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We always tend to associate events with emotions if the event or emotion is powerful enough. This holds true for Fluttershy when Mother's Day rolls around.

My first try at writing a story without the use of spoken words. (Picture courtesy of Free-Leaf on Deviantart. Link below)

My submission for a contest DarqFox is holding, enjoy. (Edit: The winner of the contest)
http://free-leaf.deviantart.com/

Chapters (1)
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Comments ( 19 )

That . . . . . . . that wasnt good . . .:fluttershyouch::fluttershysad:

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AMAZING!!!!!!!!!! :fluttercry: BEAUTIFUL'!!!!!!!!!!!!!! :fluttercry: SO . . . . . . TOUCHING'!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!:fluttercry:












BRAVO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!:raritycry::yay::raritystarry:

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Hehe, glad you enjoyed it, and thank you for such kind words :twilightsheepish:

And so it begins. Congratulations. You've gotten the first entry.

I will say that I saw a few little ticks in here like the use of adieu. (adieu is basically a permanent goodbye, whereas au revoir is more of a 'Until we meet again' sort of thing. However, you did manage to wrench my heart, and thus did incredibly well with that aspect. We'll see how you do, friend.

<3 DarqFox

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Curses! Adieu has foiled my plans once again! But none the less, thanks :3
And the first entry huh? Nice :moustache:

This was absolutely adorable, and not just a little sad. Good job! :twilightsmile:

Very bittersweet. :fluttercry: I love it! :twilightsmile:

Note to self: Do not listen to a new album while reading. Why? This started playing.

Anyways, great story! I didn't get my entry finished in time, though DarqFox did say if I finish it by Monday, I'll be able to post it...

Problem is actually finishing it. :fluttercry:

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You can do it!:yay:

And thank you :3

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I don't think I'll be able to...

It's only seven minutes from monday (at the time of posting) where I am, and I haven't worked on it in weeks...

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Oh....um...You can...do it? :unsuresweetie:

:pinkiegasp: Hey, you're the author of "Despite All Odds", my favorite TwiShy fic (OTP).
Reading this NOW!!!!! :pinkiehappy:
MUSTACHE!:moustache:

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Heh, why yes I am :twilightsmile:
Hope you enjoy this story as much as you did Despite All Odds

2704980 Just finished, and I must say your writing is just as masterful as it was in that story.:yay:

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Aww, you're too kind :twilightsheepish:

This was quite well written on its own terms... but I had trouble accepting that Flutters, after seven years with Twilight, wouldn't already have told her all this. It just doesn't fit with her character. That and a reference to Rarity's mother aside (going by what we see of her in "Sisterhooves Social", I cannot imagine her discussing fashion!) it was a solid enough read. You mostly pulled off the "no dialogue" requirement pretty well, though.

I was engaged in the story until shortly after this point:

The voice had scared Fluttershy out of her near-trance and she spun to see Twilight walking up to her.

I believe that the from this point on, your story is hindered, and not helped by the lack of dialog.

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