Taking place after A Canterlot Wedding, Queen Chrysalis is none too pleased about this state of affairs. Battered, bloodied, and with only a fraction of her forces left, she immediately takes off to Ponyville, refusing to stop for anything, not even the welfare of her own army. In order to satisfy her own sense of pride, she ignores everything in favor of destroying that which Celestia holds most dear: her dear student, Twilight Sparkle.
But as the march takes its toll on her subjects, will she realize what she is losing before it is too late?
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The feels. The good feels. Very well done, author man, very well done indeed
Oh i wished it wasn't a one page story i want to know what heppen to everyone expecially the queen and her drone. If you were to consider it would you make a story to continue on this one?
Hmmm, I suppose I could consider it, I'm just not sure which direction I would take it in
This was quite an enjoyable read! Pretty much everything worked as it should; the dramatic reveal at the orchard was effective, and the characters all acted and reacted in a believable manner. Rarity got a chance to truly prove her generosity, and I also like the touch of Twilight having the self-confidence to make her own choices in how to deal with Chrysalis. The story very much neglects to answer the question of how Celestia and her remaining people are supposed to be able to live, just the two of them. Is it even possible without hurting others - feeding off their emotions? Part of the underlying sadness of the story is the inevitability of it all. There is nobility, a sense of honor in Chrysalis, but just by the type of creature she is, the food she requires, peaceful coexistence with her prey just is not a possibility. She is fated, one might say doomed, to live at odds with creatures of other species who she might otherwise have been able to connect, even sympathize with. There just is no other way; changelings have to feed. In a more optimistic story (say, Monsters Inc.) one would come up with an alternate solution that makes everyone happy. And I do have hopes that Twilight paid close attention; if there's anything science does, it's come up with solutions. There's always hope ... or isn't there? Oh well.
Well done!
Wow, this was a great story!
I liked how in character they all were and how the story teaches what too much pride and confidence can do. So, great job to you!
Also, Obabscribbler did a dramatic reading of your story.
And, Happy birthday to you, sir!
Grats on having your fic read by Scribbler
Ho ho, the fellow can write too! :O I was impressed by Chrysalis throughout this story. It's not often that writers in this fandom surprise me, but this story was definitely a surprise. You handled the tragic element well, which is also not something I often get to say. :)
I was half expecting the changeling drone to drop dead while the ponies were considering.
that would've killed the ending a bit
This story definitely made me feel for the changelings. Loved it, very well written
This was really good. I loved it. But... this really needs editing. I found tons of spelling errors and messed up sentences that I had to piece together. Just go through this again, or get an editor (I would be willing to offer my services) and it will be wonderful.
wow. Really good. I listened to sribbler's reading and this was good.
A very moving story, well written and beautifully narrated.
This story deserves more likes.