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Umm, do you like stories about ponies? Hehe, I suppose I do too...


I've been seeing Twilight for awhile now. We've come to a better understanding of one another, and I believe we're ready to take that step now. I believe we're meant for each other, and I know that I need her by my side. I need to be with her forever.

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Author Interviewer

Worth it for the twist, though it's a bit of a slog to get there.

Why does he keep referring to her as his 'mistress'?

4650830 A mistress is a lady who isn't married, but has relations and occasionally stays with her lover, which is what Twilight is.

Also, he's a creep.

Thanks for reading, by the way. Glad you liked it.

Author Interviewer

Hmm. Too many connotations to that word, I suppose. :B

Nice twist at the end. I like how you wrote it in a way that its left ambiguous on whats going to happen next. The overall pacing was decent not the best, but still very good. The writing itself was nice. When i as reading it a chill slowly permeated as began to know more about the main character. The more i read the more a sense of wrongness of the main charcter crept up on me I couldn't really place it other than the weird speech it wasn't until the ending did i fully understand how corrupted the guy was.

Nice story and proves that this contest is bearing good fruit to us starving readers.

4710448 Thanks for reading. I'm glad you liked it.

I'd also like to thank you for the criticism. I know my pacing isn't the best. It's probably what I'm the worst at. I'll be sure to work on it for future projects.

Hi there. I hope you don't mind, but I liked this fic so much I've put together an audio version.

Hey, I wrote a review for this fic. It can be found here.

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