Side Story : 'The Collector'
I see you are thinking about reading my story. Good for you, it's a good one.
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You need more than that to convince you?
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Fine.
I am a changeling. I go by no name, I can't quite find one that suits my sheer greatness.
What? Who said I was humble?
I just figured I'd tell you my life's story before I die. Well, not my whole life, bits and pieces. It's a long one, but its worth the time. No, you don't have something else to do, you have the time, you don't have a life. I suppose that I won't either in a few days. Stupid corrupt legal system.
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Actually, they're probably pretty justified in killing me.
Chapters (9)
Interesting... I'll give it that. I'll be keeping my eye on this one. Although your humor is a little static and typical. You might want to try branching out a little.
LOL... U SADISTIC MOTHERBUCKER... I LIKEEE IT *inserts pinkamena's smile here*
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I actually like your humor. It's kinda stupid, and might be otherwise annoying, but you seem to do it right. Narration is just how I like it for 1st person / past tense, exactly as if the narrator was sitting next to you and recanting a story.
I like the sarcastic tone you have going. Will follow.
The pacing between scenes seems a little jumpy, maybe playing the scenes out more? But other than that interesting story
CASHEW EATING MOTHER F**KER
This is a second time i think a new story has potential... Don't let me down...
I'm liking this idea. Will read later for feedback :)
2504047 I'll be sure to try that.
2504057 Yes. *Evil laugh*
2504242 Yeah, the protagonist is supposed to be the kind of character that you like reading about, but would hate to meet in real life, and I was going for the feel of the story being like sitting next to some guy on the bus who is rambling on about something, not really caring weather or not you're actually paying attention.
2504339 Thanks!
2504569 I'll try to fix that in new chapters.
2504653 I'm allergic to cashews! D:
2504701 I won't disappoint.
2504845 Thank you!
2505283 game station podcast 41 eldergeek.com
Iron brew is dangerous and Jesse just don't mix with it
Cashew eatin mother f**ker is a quote just waiting for a t-shit
I'm loving this so far!
Keep 'em coming!
2505392 Will do!
Those tags... I am intrigued. That beginning is an interesting set up, telling us what's going to happen. Good move; the how and the why should always be more interesting than the what.
"You soulless bastard" hahahahhahahahahahahaha keep up the good work man don't mind these other dick weed's just keep up the good work I like the changling's perspective :)
2505451 Thanks! And I definitely agree about what you said about the why's and how's
2505926 Thanks, and I'm glad you enjoy the story, but I do appreciate everyone's input, I strive to improve myself as an author.
Well, I've read the first chapter and I must say... This is pretty awesome. Faved, liked and a watch for you good sir
2506039 Thank you very much!
2506043 I might just throw up a blogpost about it too, cus it's freakin' awesome enough.
(Also, I can't use the watch function on a mobile site :twilightangry: )
I like it
2506057 You're awesome. And the watch thing kinda bothers me too.
2506109 I'm happy to hear so.
The narration style fit the character perfectly.
2506653 Thanks!
UPDATE:
I'm working on the second chapter of the story now, it's a lot more story driven and will be quite a bit longer than the first. I've currently written 1,390 words, and I think I'm about a half to two thirds of the way done. I hope to have it finished tomorrow. That being said, don't expect future chapters to be released in such close succession. Thanks to all of you who are following this story and letting me know that it isn't complete crap.
2508672 Just a tip, ya might wanna post an actual BLOGPOST on your FiMFic blog so people can get a notification about it
(You can also tag a story so those who have it faved will see it too)
Here's that blogpost I promised Link
2505273 That's perfect. I love those. Who the hell doesn't? Worked for Forrest Gump, right?
2509101 I'll definately do that next time. Thanks for the tip!
2509102 Yep. I just hope I get it right in the end like Forrest Gump did.
2509237 LT DAAAAN. ICE CREEEEAM.
I can't wait to see where this goes XD
2509456 I think I'll put a Forrest Gump reference in the next chapter.
The chapter after the next one, actually.
2510792 I think you'll be a bit surprised.
hmm fine but i'm not happy bout there advice not very ehhhm friendly? i guess now suck my DUBSTEP!! [youtube=http://www.youtube.com/watch?NR=1&v=KF8M5kLyIcY&feature=endscreen]
2513193 Fixed! I don't find enjoyment insulting the reader, but the protagonist of the story does.
SHU UP SHUTTIN UP
i love you now for that loonytoons referance
2513380 One of my favorite lines right there.
2513438 same here
I gotta say, he's witty, if nothing else.
2513552 He'll develop more personality traits as the story progresses.
he so i have returned hm let's check on my favriot changeling
bhahahah oh oh man just this one sentence made me ROLF so much "Ever think that somepony had a punchable face? Well this guy had, like, the most punchable face ever, it was like the feckin' magnum opus of face punchability." LOL LOL LOLING EVERY WHERE
keep up the good work mate!