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Thanqol


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Critique: Discord's First Very Faithful Student · 12:17pm Feb 11th, 2015

Goodness. Where does the time go?

Anyway, today I'm looking at Discord's First Very Faithful Student by Pokonic. This is a bit of a tough one because it's a lighter tone than the two previous things I've looked at, but I'll see if I can get to what it's saying. (Irrelevant: Pokonic, this story is lousy with typos, man, fix your shit)

The story opens with both Discord and Diamond Tiara being bored and lonely. This is, curiously, not a cause for sadness for either of them. They seem totally content with themselves and aren't in a position where they want someone to reach out to them and pull them out of a bad spot. Their first connection isn't one of empathy - it's a profoundly selfish moment where both of the two realise they can extract something of value from each other.

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2301770 don't gimme no lip, woman

You do words really good.
Thanks for that.

2285084
Sorry, don't have one. I was just curious if you had anymore stories with Lyra and Bonbon in the center planned. Hopefully, you'll come up with something though.

2284867 I hadn't planned on it, but I can be persuaded! Tell me your idea of what a sequel looks like!

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