Twilight suffers from a common problem among Equestrian mares. But how she resolves it is not acceptable.
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Not bad, not bad at all. The Goddess of Magic tries to starve herself so she could get thin....fail
I seem to notice a small amount of Spilight in this story but could be wrong, you did very well, a few errors that need to be corrected but nothing major, poor Twi, I'm very impressed though
And I think you meant Tartarus, you know, the underworld, hell, the dark and evil place that perhaps not even the Gods would dare enter unless they had no other choice and that is not meant for mortals, I love that place
There are a couple of persistent mistakes in the fic to work on for next time, but I liked the story :)
The singular form is "pegasus" while the plural form is "pegasi". So Rainbow Dash is a pegasus, whereas Rainbow Dash and Fluttershy are pegasi.
You use a hyphen for words like anyone and everypony, typing them as any-one and every-pony. That's not the correct way to write it.
All in all, very nice story.
Bad Twilight! No starvy starvy!
No seriously, a nice little story with the consequences of not taking care of your body. good job.
A big thanks to everybrony who likes this story, you have made my week. I will be sure to try this again.
I liked it. You obviously researched your topic well, and the emotions were spot-on.
Good job!
I really liked this story. However, men suffer from eating disorders just as much as women. Just thought I'd point that out.
It was pretty good except that they were mad at her for having a mental illness and blamed it on her, when it wasn't even her fault that she had it in the first place or saw herself that way. I think if this actually happened, Twilight's friends wouldn't have blamed her for her problem. Also, it was sorta fast-paced...2 months is a very short amount of time to develop an eating disorder.