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In a realm outside of reality, Discord challenges Princess Celestia to a little game of wits and strategy to determine the fate of Equestria. Of course, with Discord, there's always a catch. And it is this particular catch that gives Celestia pause. For no matter what she chooses, it will lead to her downfall...
Special shout-out to Celestias Paladin for inspiration and help with conceptualization.
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I actually think it's pretty good. I've got my own theory in my own universe that probably won't be revealed until I get to that particular episode in about 30 or so years...
Well you were correct about the ending it did surprise me.
On a technical level this was very well written and easy to read, Discord's dialogue was from what I could tell very accurate to the show, Celestia's I felt was less so, she was very casual for the most part, I did like her speech on fighting with her soldiers though. But I do feel there were some significant differences between Luna/NMM and Discord, that Celestia should be more than aware of, all things considered and seeing as she was able to block his magic in KCAFO how is it he pulled this off here? That and if he was capable of this kind of power how did he get captured/kept imprison if he could simply jump outside reality and play with the world?
Still for what it is worth this is very well written and the characters very much sounded like themselves. My apologies if this review comes across as rude at all, I wish you the best of luck with this fic.
2328541 Thank you for the candid review, and I'm glad you enjoyed the story overall. However, there is something significant that you missed:
The whole game with Discord was taking place solely in Celestia's mind. It wasn't really happening.
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Thank you for your response, I greatly appreciate it, that does clarify the place somewhat, but it does leave me with a question, if Discord could do this (particularly when Celestia can at this stage block his magic without the elements, though I suppose thinking him unconscious/stone may mean her defenses are lowered) then why not before? My apologies if this is troublesome.
2328751 Not at all. I'm glad that you care enough about my story to ask these questions.
As for this particular question, I think I should clarify my previous response:
Discord was not using his powers to mess with Celestia's mind in any way, shape, or form. This was simply a vision brought on by Celestia's meditation.
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IC, thank you for these responses, the clarification and discourse has been very helpful, I greatly appreciate it!
Celestia's self-doubts just won't leave her alone, will they?
Another masterful work of art. If I could find anything wrong with your writing I'd speak up with a critique, but it all runs so smoothly. The characters voices all sound perfect in my head. The story is complex and well executed. I'm lovin it!
3194455 Thanks. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
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Yeah I enjoyed it. It all felt so real until Celestia snapped out of her meditation, and then the reveal of how that vision led to Discord's reform. Never saw it coming, but it was totally believable. Gotta admit that it is the best explanation I've heard yet. Usually when there's no reason to fix something, you just don't. So Celestia had to have had SOME kind of problematic reasoning to free him. I just always thought it would be something along the lines of cleaning up old messes he'd created, but nopony else could handle and it was worth the gamble.
I kinda want more. I mean I feel like there something that needs to be said face to face. Like Discord asking why she let him go and how she knew he would change.
4131854 I don't know if Discord actually cares about the why. I think he's just glad to be free. Therefore, I don't envision him having much of a reaction to Celestia's reasons.
4132430 Maybe you're right I don't know. Anyway good story.