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Doctor Perseus


I'm just a guy who loves to write.

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Rainbow Dash wakes up with a searing pain in her head fifteen days after a serious accident. Her friends tell her that she was in a coma but a series of strange visions make her think otherwise. Why does she know of things that don't exist in Equestria and who is this man that keeps appearing in her dreams? Only a certain princess holds the key to Rainbow Dash finally finding peace.

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Well, closure, warm feels, okay.
Kinda wish it was a richer fic... more in depth.
Nonetheless, good job.

*sniff* It's beautiful... :pinkiesad2: Not as emotionally compelling as My little Dashie, but still *sniff* beautiful... :pinkiesad2: May a thousand comment be bestowed upon thee, my faithful writer! :twilightsmile:

Oh! :pinkiegasp: Just read the author note! :pinkiehappy:

Well... There were some unnecessary phrases and sentences, but I just go and ignore them in case some other readers haven't read MLD yet. It's pretty straight forwards. It's almost a near perfect sequel, their reactions are great, since they were present when they took "Dashie" away. I thought the princess might have been a little more hesitant then letting Dash know the truth straight away :facehoof:, and I was also hoping to see either Applejack or Fluttershy telling her the truth later.

The couples and kid were a complete surprise to me, but I'd rather see them happy, instead of wallowing in despair for his greatest lost. I could not see a single grammar error, although I haven't fully complied my full attention seeing any real faults, like a faulty phrase for example. The story, again, is really straight forward. I could see Dashie being the happy mare she is, and seeing a dare devil like her get all "mushy" is really comforting, making us know that no one, not even Rainbow Dash, is perfect. And her mending some wounds is also great to see! Since being taken care of by a great, and I mean great, human being. His moral was passed down to her, in my honest to Celestia opinion.

My only problem is, scenes. Celestia waiting at the gate? Shouldn't she be in her quarters, studies or the throne room? Twilight and Pinkie waiting outside Rainbow's house, shouldn't they have used the cloud walking spell? And the air balloon that Twilight has if she's exhausted. If I recall correctly, Applejack and Twilight were talking about Dash's father, and their excuse was that "... she never mentioned them before.". I would have questioned her about that, why did she happened to suddenly think about family, when she just remembered about her human father? "Did something happen to the Apple family? Did Shining Armor get a baby? Has Pinkie Pie's parent come over to visit or has Fluttershy's parent visit?" And the Celestia was in town, Rainbow should have known about the egghead's obsession of everything being perfect for royalty. She should have also asked if Celestia could have helped with the "comatose" Dash. All these faulty plot lines has now been revealed, can you explain this to us mistah Pottah? :trixieshiftright:

Kind of a nice twist with the half-brother thing, but overall fantastic work as always.
Here, have epic Dash:rainbowdetermined2: and mustache:moustache:
(Wow, that rimed!)

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One last thing! :pinkiehappy:

I am highly recommending this fic right now, it's perfect for anyone! This fic has left me thinking for past ten minutes, and made me feel complete. This fic made me lose my motivation to read any other fic for today, it's that beautiful. It's sad, but makes you feel happy, and complete, in the end. Knowing that everything is going to be okay for the man, and makes that gut feeling go away for "Dashie" knowing that her dad would be okay.

And from the perspective of "Harry", It made him feel relieved knowing that Rainbow has at least remembered him, and used the last chance to just see him one last time. She has also met his little brother, knowing Pinkie Pie he has already done a birthday ahead of her. But enough of that "mushy" stuff!

This fic is highly recommended from me, if someone says otherwise give me a call and I'll see what I can do. In my honest to God opinion, this fic fits the title of sequel of My little Dashie. It's well written and well thought of. The characters fit the description of ROBCakeran53 to a B from me. The Dashie of ROB was a little bit more Twilight-y then the cyan colored daredevil, in my description. The fic goes down hill, then immediately hits a boat and drives to the setting sun, making a happy ending!

Hope this is the last time I comment here, it's just sooo good and well thought of! I was starting to think your ROB in disguise trolling with us in to thinking someone has the same level of beauty ( no homo )! Anyways, the fic is great for any previous readers of MLD and good for kids to teens to read as well!
It gives the reader the emotions of the fic, it makes the reader feel what Rainbow felt. She felt a little betrayed and lost a little trust from her friends not telling her the truth, even Applejack didn't tell her! Lastly, the story is really a great sequel in my honest opinion, the emotions are present, the personality, heck even the picture was present! Well, hope this is the last comment I'm putting here! JamesC signing off! :rainbowdetermined2:

*sniff* *sniff sniff* *bangs face on keyboard crying Niagra Falls* Dashie still remembered him! That is so beautiful! This was amazing! *continues sobbing* :applecry::fluttercry::fluttershbad::fluttershyouch::fluttershysad::pinkiesad2::raritycry::raritydespair:

:fluttercry::pinkiesad2::raritycry::applecry:
THAT WAS SO GOOD!!!

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Twilight and Pinkie weren't standing right outside of Rainbow Dash's house. It's stated that they were waiting down on the path that runs along the ground by Rainbow Dash's floating house.

Thanks for the feedback and I'm glad you enjoyed the story.

*sniff, sniff* that was wonderfull *sniff, sniff* :applecry::raritycry: :pinkiesad2: :fluttercry:

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Oooohhh, looks like I wasn't paying much attention in the first paragraph DAAANG. :pinkiesad2: But, that also adds lots up. What were they waiting for down the path? I can understand waiting outside the cloud house, but waiting down the road? That doesn't add up, CONSPIRACY! :pinkiecrazy:

Hey, I actually have an idea for how Daniel discovers the truth about her 'sister':rainbowdetermined2:. With your permission, I would like to do it.:raritywink:

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Sure. Go ahead. I'd be very interested to read it when you're done.

the feels man, the feels.

MLD was the first fanfic i ever read. And i loved every word of it. I've been hesitant to read sequels to it cause i didn't think they could ever do it justice. But you man good sir! You did it justice. Very well done.

WHY WHY WHY!!!!! *sniff sniff* why cant she stay :raritycry: :fluttercry: :raritydespair:

this story was excellent, amazing and so well thought out. thank you for making a sequel, it was good to read what might have come next. :pinkiehappy:

Having read a few other sequels to MLD, I have to say this one brought me the most closure.
Job well done.

One nit-pick, and nothing major as I can see why you might have done it.
MLD did a good job of not applying a name to the main character, just seemed odd putting a name to the character. (Not that I disapprove just found it odd).Or maybe I missed it mentioning his name.(I'm pretty sure it didn't) Ok arguing with myself now.
Bleh
Anyways good story, like and fav for you! :pinkiehappy:

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Thank you. I'm really glad that you enjoyed it. :pinkiehappy:

Yeah, the dad remained unnamed in the original story but, given the circumstances of what occurs in my story, I felt that I kinda had to give him a name. I think it would have been odd if Celestia had referred to him as 'human' or if his wife constantly referred to him as 'honey'. That wouldn't have really sounded completely natural, in my opinion. But I'm glad that it didn't bother you that much and that you were still able to enjoy my story. :twilightsmile:

I loved it awwwwwww

I swear I'm not a heartless person....sniff....just got a strong heart on the inside and I cry inside my heart....sniff....good story got me to the heart:pinkiesad2:

"Daniel. Daniel Cooper. I felt like giving my child a name that started with a D." I chuckled at my dad's comment. "I guess you can call him your half-brother."

Is this a reference to the Dan Cooper?

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No. It's just a random name I came up with. The DB Cooper coincidence is pretty funny though. :rainbowlaugh:

9073575
I'm quite the Cooper fanboy enthusiast. What about you.

9074973
It's definitely an interesting mystery. I always love a good unsolved mystery.

9075133
Part of me want to know what happened to him, while another part of me wishes he got away,.

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