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Cloudy Skies


Cloudy writes stories. Cloudy likes it when ponies like each other maybe a little too much and sometimes end up in love. Cloudy writes stories about these things, often.

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At long last, the wedding bells ring for Applejack and Fluttershy. Everypony does their utmost to try to make it the best wedding ever, but as the pair discovers, it quickly becomes a question of getting married despite, rather than because of this.

This story is a standalone, but is set after the events of Where Earth Meets Sky and Where Your Heart Is.

Chapters (7)
Comments ( 138 )

Commence read.

She ate the oven mitts...well, I could see that. Wonder what Dash's nickname for Pinkie is?

Twilight keeps on staring. Rarity on hyper drive.
Spike?

Yay! New Story! (Clears schedule)

This story is amazing. Usually wedding fic are one of two things: either short, sweet, and forgettable, or romantic comedies. This is neither. It really captures AJ and Shy's worries well. The problem is believable and doesn't feel forced at all. Even though it's primarily an AJxShy fic, the other four ponies are given their own parts and motivations.

I'm really glad to have helped with this. I'm super happy to have been able to do the cover art too. This entire series has been amazing and wonderful and I'm so glad you wrote them.

Good start. Such a tender relationship. Looking forward to more!

“Sugar? That’s a ‘yes’. A ‘yes’, a ‘you bet I do’, and a ‘I’d like nothing more in the whole wide world of Equestria, thank you very much’.”

This line made my insides all toasty.

As far as Christmas presents go, Cloudyfic isn't a bad stocking stuffer. Will say more when I get done with this.

Gotta like them CLOUDY WEDDINGS

Ever since lost and found I've wanted to read a Appleshy fic from you. Awesome!! :pinkiehappy:

Finally a Futtershy x Applejack fic. Y is it I never see these? Is there a group 4 this?

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Um yes. There is a folder in the shipping group.

Also, this is a sequel to another appleshy fic

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Can you tell me the group name or send me a link to it?

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The group name is "shipping". The subfolder is Applejack x Fluttershy. Here.

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Oh hehe :twilightblush: ty much appreciated.

I can't stop squealing in anticipation :rainbowkiss:

*chapter 1 read finished; Commence Squee*! :yay::yay::yay::yay::yay::yay::yay:

Oh my god, Cloudy MAKE IT STOP THE ADORABLE AAAHHHHHH :raritycry: it hurts of cute :heart:

:yay::ajsmug: cannot wait for more. best christmas EVER

Happy Holidays all!

:pinkiehappy:

That's me just now. Cloudy, your stuff is always fun to read, and this is utterly adorable.

so great, so great. I'm afraid I can't really put it into better words then that

never seen a apple x shy ship before..... .I will give it a try :twilightsmile:

Oh hey, unmitigated chaos with a wedding. That's...painfully familiar to me. My every day.

Still, loving this.

D'aww.
AppleShy:rainbowkiss:

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Just got around to finishing Chapter 2 as a Christmas special, and still loving this fic, Cloudy. I like that you have ponies who have real worries that aren't world-shattering, but are just as important to them as if they were.

Eh. I'm still not feelin' the Appleshy.
But since when have I let something like that stop me from enjoying a good story? :pinkiehappy:

So far, so good. I really liked how both Fluttershy and AJ were planning to propose to each other, and especially how Flutters was the one who popped the question. That was pretty adorable. Other than that, Rarity seems a bit overbearing about the wedding, no surprise there. Although I could see how this could lead to Fluttershy and AJ feeling like their wedding is being hijacked. It's going to be interesting seeing where that goes with everypony trying to plan their own version. Overall, I'm liking this, just like I usually like your fics, and I'm eagerly awaiting the next few chapters. I hope you had a very merry Christmas and and happy Hearth's Warming as well!

1849159 I swear I didn't forget the little guy! And hey, if the mitts are baked properly, I'm sure they're a delicacy.

1849173 I hope it's to your tastes, and that it's nonshit!

1849227 And I am damn glad to have had your help. Thank you, and thank you for your probably-disproportionate-but-still-kind words!

1849394 I'm very glad, and I pray it keeps up in your eyes; I'll post up the next bits soon enough, just need to decide on how to do this update malarky, hah.

1849593 Hee hee, stocking stuffer.

1849762 It's this, from now on. Cloudy only writes weddins'.

1849971 Oh! I've actually written an AppleShy fic that's sort of the prequel to this. In case you missed it in the desc, Where Earth Meets Sky is 100% AppleShy goodness. S'far too rare, this ship. Appreciate the faith though, thank you!

1850961 I'm glad - I think, hah. Hope you enjoy; shouldn't be too much longer before I post more, and should keep a rapid schedule.

1851092 Thank you, and happy holidays indeed!

1851288 1854147 Your face is pink! You should get that looked at, oh dear. But seriously though, I never really thought about it writing this, but it's true. Perspective and all that, I guess, that's important. Kinda makes me wanna experiment more with non-dangerous drama, perhaps even nonshipping, hum.

1852066 Much appreciated, though! I hope the rest of the fic is to your liking.

1853163 Hope you enjoy it! There's an AppleShy "prequel" to this (as mentioned in the description) - if you want to go back for completeness' sake, or if you decide you want more AppleShy in your life. I'm a sucker for it.

1853347 Are you a wedding planner in Equestria? I don't think "normal" weddings are possible there.

1853550 You, sir or madam, have excellent taste in shipping.

1855108 Curious t'hear what you think, then! Story's very AppleShy, even for an AppleShy story, so I'm wondering if it'll be to your tastes at all!

1855844 I shall of course spoil exactly nothing, but thank you for reading so far, and I hope to not disappoint!

1866593 Alright then. Will have to see when he appears then and see what he thinks of Twilight/Rarity possibility.

Take your time! Don't feel like you have to rush anything, sorry if I sounded impatient..

1866615 Oh, alike so; I think I misunderstood your concern. All I can say as to that is that Spike isn't listed as a major character in this fic, so you probably shouldn't expect much from that angle. Sorry!

1867343 Oh, no, no, not at all! I'm just annoyed with myself for not posting up more, sooner, really, hah.

1866593 No, but it is at a magical kingdom! A wondrous place called Florida. Home of face eaters and meth labs!

Nice, proposing at the same time:rainbowlaugh:. Still nice that Fluttershy got the punch in first:yay:.

Can we say go say hi to Mr. and Mrs. Twilight’s Mom too while we’re there?

Oh, Pinkie :ajbemused:

excellent as ever. My only complaint is that there isn't more to read : (

Dafuq Applejack, whats got your panties in a bunch?

1880077 Perhaps because the affair is turning out to be way bigger and way more complex than she actually planned, or even wanted.

Anyway, one of the best things I like about your style of writing, Cloudy, is just the character interaction, and there's a heck of a lot of it here. Half way through, I forced myself to break immersion, and just sat back and appreciated just how well characterized they are. You've done things spot on so far, I had no trouble believing that this was the natural way these characters would interact in these, or any other situations that may come up. I feel it's one of your biggest strengths as a writer, and boy do you play to it.

As for the ships themselves, well, I wont go into the whole "Everypony's a Lesbian" thing, even if it's a little hard to swallow, but the ships themselves are solid. PinkieDash obviously working well, it took me a little to acclimate myself to FlutterJack, or AppleShy, or whatever you crazy kids call these non-TwiDash ships (=P), I see obvious proof that it can work or I wouldn't be reading. As for Rarilight, and feel free to disregard this part because we don't know for certain if this ship will sail in this story yet, but I'm sort of torn on it. Torn by the fact that really I can't see how it could work, apart from the whole "we're both unicorns pinkiepieshrug.png" thing. Another factor that's probably playing into this feeling is my biases. One of my favorites and my least favorites (as far as Mane 6 goes), getting together, I can only see the negatives of such a pairing occurring. It's nothing on your writing, I must stress, more to do with me.

Another thing when you're taking Mane 6 ships with Rarity into account is she's pretty much canonically straight, so a bit of extra care needs to be taken when trying to craft a Rarity ship (it's even how I feel about Rarijack, the Rarity ship I actively like), into this sort of thing. Sure one could argue that Equestria isn't as hung up about the real world on the whole "gay", "straight", and "bi" labels and whatnot, but Equestria is a different world to our own, with some parallels, and we are but strangers to its customs. You need to show readers about these sorts of rules as part of the world building, or he/she's going to just fill in the blanks with similar scenarios to our own world, and when this stuff comes up, the reader's going to be blown out of immersion by questioning this against their own assumptions, instead of remembering back to that one or two sentences and going "oh yeah, it works like this". This also counts towards the whole "Everypony is a Lesbian" thing.

That said, I'm gonna mention that I'm not a writer (yet), but this is how I feel on this sort of subject, so yeah, take it or leave it. I'll leave it at there, just thought I'd throw in my two bits about the situation. I'm immensely enjoying it so far, and I cannot wait to see how it pans out, there are actually a few secrets here that I'm really interested in seeing what they are. Keep up the good work, friend. =)

Heh, I'm liking this budding rivalry that Twi's got going on.

1870075 Applejack obviously agrees with you there! (As do I!)

1877294 It's a bit of a throwback to, er, hm. WYHI, I think? Hah.

1878615 Soon, promise!

1880394 I obviously don't want to spoil anything, so I'll leave off on commenting on RariLight in this fic here, but I will say that I basically, hm. It's not that I disagree, but I feel less compelled to observe the "Oh, btw, Equestria is tolerant/progressive" thing. To me, it takes something away from it in the same way the whole "It's okay that you're gay" -- "Well, uh, I'm so glad you're giving me permission. Jerk." convo goes, you know? Iirc, there are a few subtle pokes at the fact that it's F/F. I don't ignore it, but perhaps it's a flaw of having written a full dozen shipfics now that actually mentioning this breaks immersion for me to a greater degree than not mentioning it?

That all said? That you're "not a writer" (who the heck says I am?) doesn't invalidate anything, in case you were trying to insinuate that, and you do have a point. I can comment more on this when we're done here, but in short? I decided to just let my mane out and let things be a little silly this time. Rather go overboard and grin all the way to the altar instead of taking myself or this fic too seriously. That's not a defense; it's not a valid counterargument to "I think the rampant F/F shipping is silly". It's an explanation, but not a counterargument. I'm curious to see how you feel about it in the end - and thank you for reading so far!

1880692 It's funny actually, because it was a little less pronounced until I did the final pre-publish edit pass yesterday and touched it up. Great fun!

Buzzing with excitement! I can't wait for this to continue!

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FWIW, I'm never going to bother with "ew, lesbians." To me, Equestria just doesn't work like that. I probably will write about OH MY GOSH PEGASUS X EARTH PONE some day. Which will basically _be_ a coming out fic, in the same way the CMC are about puberty.

As for Rarity being "straight." I think that's more about her being a romantic. There's no indication that this is her sexual preference. Just that she wants a prince to have her story-book relationship. Course, all that does imply that m/f is the norm. Still, I think it's more MLP to pulling the IRL sting and substitue something that is just as (un)important. Besides, Twilight's brother is a prince. This obviously makes her a princess. THE DREAM LIVES ON!

Oh gooood... Cloooouuudy... Cloudy why. I just finished my Applejack/Fluttershy vows like, two weeks ago, and now you gotta go upstage me before I even upload them! I can't... Well, at least someone who writes far and away better than I do treats Appleshy with such respect.

I guess I just have to read your heartwarming story and hang up my writing towel AGAIN.

1889205 Well I'm not complaining about it (in fact, it would be quite hypocritical of me to do so), but I'll say again that the reader is essentially an alien in a strange and wonderful world, we don't know all of the nuances and customs of this new world, and since it's similar enough to our own world, the reader is gonna fill in the blanks with what we know.

I dont imagine Equestria's at all like "Ew, lesbians." Though with that said, I feel steps should be taken to ensure the reader understands that there is essentially no conflict about who ponies choose to love. I don't at all expect it to read like "oh gosh but Im not into mares/stallions *blush* *blush* *blush*", and if I may use an example from your fic, Twilight's List to make my point clear, Twilight just decides out of the blue that she's gonna go for her friends (a gross underanalysis of what happens in the fic, but bear with me), which yes is a good way of saying "hey, this stuff doesn't matter" it still left me feeling like I'd been blindsided, but if you would have taken a sentence to basically say something like: Twilight reflected on the sillier times when Equestria was hung up on gender issues of whom one chooses to love, before Celestia put her hoof down (but, you know, in an actual way that a writer would put it); I feel it would put the readers thoughts to rest on the matter, instead of oh, Twilight's a lesbian and she's assuming all of her friends are as well.

I hope you at least see where I'm coming from, the way it was in that fic read into both viewpoints of "It's either okay", or "It's not okay and Twilight's naively made assumptions on her friends". It certainly doesn't detriment to the fic that it isn't in there, but again you're telling a story to someone, and more questions you can answer inside the story, the more a reader will enjoy it without that nagging "what if" question at the back of their mind.

1880811 I'm certainly not making complaints about Rampant F/F shipping (again, hypocritical :P), but I feel that there should be a sort of explanation to why "everypony's a lesbian" (and as always, I'm using that phrase tongue in cheek), it's all good and well to say it's not a societal problem in the comments, but until a reader has actually confirmed that, he'll always be wondering. :)

A wild RariLight appeared!

On another note, it's interesting to see how much it's bothering Applejack to have her wedding usurped. I would have expected it to get to Fluttershy before AJ, honestly. I'm loving what I see so far, though, so keep it up. Remember, there are no brakes on the shipping train.

Apple... Soup?

I mean yeah okay great story everything's cute except Applejack bugs me blah blah blah, but really I'm just hung up on...

Apple.... Soup?

1888328 Editing fast's I can, captain! Now that we're up on EqD, I can edit and publish faster without fearing giving the pre-readers an unnecessarily silly-long burden. Next chapter'll be up tonight!

1889268 See, you say that, but all I can see is that you wrote bloody AppleShy! You got my a christmas/new years/whatever present, yay! Thank you!

No seriously. Self-deprecating leads to me biting peoples' ears. That's how it works. I have no idea why you'd move your towels anywhere on account of me indulging myself by finishing this old story pseudoseries, but hey; I can not wait to read it and/or hear what you think of this one! World needs more o'this.

1889357 Naw jeez, didn't mean to sound like I was accusing you of railing against F/F in general, sorry. I know my first fics made a bigger deal out of observing exactly this, and I've moved away from it since. On the absolutely simplest of levels, it's because I like imagining Equestria a utopia where it's a complete non-issue hardly even worthy of comment.

What I could-and-may do at some point is make more fun out of it. Not as in ribbing, and I'm not sure it'd satisfy your desires here, but I like the idea of going all "I now pronounce you mare and-- well, mare." and that sort of stuff.

1890608 How I wish I could comment without spoiling. But hey, dang straight. No brakes. More coal/run faster, earth pony pull-team!

1890867 Haha, okay, okay, you have to realize, I was sitting there writing, and I'd already used some new Apple family names, and I was looking for another, right? I spent so damn long trying to find one, moving via Apple types (most of the unused ones are place names, thus not usable.) and rare dishes (Apple Fricassé, anypony?) - in the end, I just said screw it.

Thus, Apple Soup was born.

I hope the following chapters give you cause to sympathize with Applejack. If you hit the end and she still annoys you, I'll consider that a partial failure on my part, but thank you for reading this far!

1891739 Ah but again you as the author implicitly know that, but unless otherwise stated, the reader does not, though I wont go further, lest we get cyclical. I've said my piece, and I'm fine with leaving it at that. :)

And I didn't at all read it as an accusation, merely a passing comment. It's your story, and what you decide to do with it is up to you, it was a non issue to begin with, and it remains so now, and I'm happy we could get a bit of a discussion out of it, and it certainly doesn't detriment the fic in any way. So keep writing, you brilliant person, you. :)

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New chapter for my birthday, yay! La de da, wait what's this - GASP!

Cloudy!

Did you retcon her name to be Apple Sauce? Or does Fluttershy misspeak? Twice? I've been thinking up recipes for apple soup all night!

The crack about Applejack was mostly pro forma. The character annoys me, rather than anything she's doing in this particular story. So I do sympathize, I'm just less empathetic than I would be towards others.

But hey, new Cloudy Skies story, yay! And this time it's not exactly what I was writing, only done better and actually completed!

1892994 Wait. She's not- wait. Crap. If there's an inconsistency, my brain totally didn't at all notice that soup and sauce were both used, augh! My bad, checking and fixing right now! I did not change anything. It's an original derp, yay!

That said? Congratulations if it's your birthday and all! I hope your day is absolutely marveltastic! Er, and have I accidentally written something you intended to write? Curious now!

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I released chapter one of my first (and so far only) fic like, two days before Lost and Found came out. They share, how shall I put this, "several thematic elements". Since my story was heavily inspired by Within and Without in the first place, I spent a couple of days going "damnit, and it's good, too!"

FimFiction says five days. Close enough.

Thanks for the well-wishings! I must resist a mighty urge to use my birthday authority to make people (who aren't me) try my first attempt at apple soup...

"Balloons dotted the ceiling, forever locked straining against the unyielding stone"

It's the little touches I really enjoy.

they should have eloped.

Another great chapter. I thought that Fluttershy and Applejack cuddling and talking before bed was particularly adorable, and I think it's starting to make a bit more sense to me why it's been AJ that's been so bothered with all of the spectacle rather than Fluttershy. Time will tell to see if I'm thinking on the right track. I guess one of the only unfortunate things about this chapter was that since you were too busy focusing on the two established pairings, there wasn't any time to see more of that cute awkward RariLight, and that's not really much of a complaint at all! Also, I'm curious, roughly how far into the story are we in terms of chapters/length?

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