For years now a creature wanders the world of Albion, with questions in his head and sand in his boots. The questions are rather simple: Where do I come from and where will I go? But how do they say? Sometimes, the journey is the reward.
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And finally we will learn of the humans downfall.
I'm actually pretty neutral towards Flash Sentry.
So, what percentage of the blame did Celestia, Luna and Antheon share each one?
4480770 You can't really hate a character you don't know anything about. They didn't develop his character enough to really get a reaction from me.
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I don't dislike him for is character (like you said, he doesn't have any). I dislike him for what he is. A generic pretty boy love interest for Twilight Sparkle. Also something that never should have showed up in the show. The authors promised that the Equestria Girls movie won't be canon for the show. So Flash shouldn't exist there at all. Well, but here he is.
Also, I personally refer to him as Edward or Jacob. (The first one is a fairy. I mean, he sparkles and lives in the woods. The other is a stupid orange alpaca.) Or Brad. Brad fits too...
4481279 I call him Generic Love Interest. Fits the cardboard cutout nature of the character well.
All throughout the Humans were complaining about lack of energy, despite having tech like hover cars and heavy Walker tanks. So what, no Fusion-Fission, Geothermal, or Antimatter power plants?
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Because any explanation would spoiler at this point, just leave it at that they don't have things like that.
Weekend was just coming to an end, when I thought that it would be a good idea to check whether there is something new in my in-box. You may have guessed that I was pleasantly surprised.
Flashbacks, I-I don't really like them, because they divert us from the original story and present a completely new and different point of view. As everyone knows, people like what they already know and distrust (at least in my case) this type of literary manoeuvrings. However, this does not change the fact that this was really fun to read. I only hope that act XI will bring long-awaited answers. (Who I'm kidding.)
As for the infamous Flash Sentry: I think that you all are overreacting a bit.
Narrator: *dramatic voice* Could it be the blueprint to build Megatron? Optimus Prime? Or Pacific Rim Jaeger? Maybe Gundam? Or any other anime robot ever made?
Author: You will never know...mwuahahaha!
... Thumbs up.
By the way, I know you're trying to develope the history and give some context to the story, but your chapter long tangents are making it a bit rougher. It's straying to far from the main plot. Honestly, you could just have some of those chapters put out into full blown stories, developing the separately and meshing them with your main story towards the end. It becomes difficult to read when you have four or five different stories going on in one book, but two might work. You're using your intermissions to help develope the main characters personality to give the readers a new view on how he's changed. And you're doing flashbacks, something that is still incredibly hard to put into a story without making it annoyingly difficult to read. Just try and tone it back a bit.
I always called Flash Sentry... Spencer. He seems like a Spencer.
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There is only one plot in Journey. No side plot or anything. Sure, there happen other things along the way, but thats totally normal. But there is a total of one story going on. Everything is connected, but the puzzle doesn't fit at this point of course.
The intermissions are mostly, as you said, supplementary, with few exceptions.But in the end they also only a part of the same puzzle. (Not all of them are flashbacks by the way.)
And act 11 I wouldn't call a "full" flashback. Our heroes are in a library at the moment. Its what they are reading about.
It doesn't look to good for Celestia at this point, somebody has indoctrinated (Mind control ?) and trash talked against the humans for a thousand year.
And don't forget somebody (celestia?) has suppressed technology & advancement for the same time in Equestria/Albion.
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Hello there,
after finding this “journey” by chance, I ended up spending most of the last two days reading all of its 240k words. Whilst I consider this time well wasted I demand the completion of this story as compensation. Preferably by doubling its length by tomorrow morning.
In all honesty I just wanted to let you know that I utterly enjoyed your story so far.
And for that …. THANK YOU!
Lastly a question. Would you recommend reading future chapters in in German? I must admit that I cannot see myself dealing with anything pony in translated German. However I would continue in German if you so recommend.
Cheers …. and keep up the good work!
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Well, the story is originally German. Gron translates it and JBL acts as proofreader. I'm just the original author who is publishing it with their help here on fimfiction. If you can read German, you could continue in German. But actually I wouldn't advice to do so. Because of the translation process many errors are found and corrected. Over all, I would say the quality of the English version is better than the German version.
Also, thanks four your kind words. Sadly, JBL will kill me (Gron probably too) if they had to double the length of the story over night. And it's not like you will have to wait long for a new chapter, because every Sunday there will be one and that for a while. We're at act 11.1 at the moment while the German version is at intermission 15, what would be like 15.7. So the near future is save with a lot of updates and I'm starting to write act 16 probably this weekend.
Much appreciated, that's exactly the answer I was looking for.
However... letting me know I should continue in English whilst there is more available in German is evil. Trotzdem Danke und gute Nacht ;)
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Wrong, the question is how you think that you could suppress the freedom of speech. I'm allowed to express myself as much as my character is. Also, the personal believes of my character aren't necessarily my own.
(And still, I had to laugh quite hard. The history of Christianity and America are not any better than the history of Germany. Just two words: Crusades and slavery. Just to give an example.)
Edit:
Editing your comment now. That I call the chicken move. Your opinion not strong enough?
Huh, wonder who this could be.
not much for flash backs (Steven King killed them for me with wind through the key hole) but I pushed through this and found that it was good.
1. HUMAN AMBASSADORS?!
2. LUNA'S GOT A LOVE??!!
3. A NEPHEW?!....wait.....no.....it couldn't be! It wouldn't be...! Should it be? It MUSN'T BE!
4. Never supposed to rule?....hmm....
5. A friend of Luna's? Who?
4483864 mmm jaegerbombs...
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yes
yes
alicorn in front also the statue in maze garden
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and Grandma Changling
PS
stupid flash sentry
Well. I think a suspicion I discarded quite some time ago just rose back to the top of the pile, though it raises some new issues.
Is it just me, or is the entire chapter in bold?