While having a small chat at the library Twilight asks Rainbow Dash if she would come with her to Canterlot in the morning to attend a presentation on Biology the unicorn was already planning on seeing. After some convincing from Twilight to follow her Rainbow Dash hops on the train and heads to Canterlot for a few hours of real education.
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Continue. Your master (me) commands you.
CONTINUE!
My thoughts:
You're not your - misspelled in the chapter title, not a good way to make a first impression. This is a promising story, but needs a little help with grammar.
1597436 Yes Sir.1597502 I don't wear hats. Sorry.
Yeah I know, but when it's 1 o'clock in the morning the reason for mispells kinda speaks for itself. Thanks for telling me though.
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1598505 Just like that Minus the tears. I can't write crying Twi it would break my heart.
MOAR DAMNIT!
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1599721 Sir, I'm going to have to ask you to put your shirt on, I don't care about your pants but put a shirt on, and then wait a little bit please.
1600834 but i am demanding moar! how can i put a shirt on while i am of need!
Being herbivores I wonder how used ponies are to seeing things all splayed out?
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That could be awkward, or I wonder if it will be revealed that changelings really ARE made of cheese!
1601283 Just steal a shirt then, there are starving kids in Africa in need but you don't see them running around shirtless-
.....nevermind.
1602292 I'm sure they'll be fine with it.
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1605046 Dang, I can't say no to Fluttershy It'd break my heart, okay have another chapter.
1617260 The history is promissing man,and as a biologist myself...well,I must say I'm excited to see your story
1617843 Thank you very much, I hope I don't let you down. That's always my biggest fear is bringing in people with a story they like only to blow it later on. The story was inspired by my crazy awesome Biology teacher Mrs. Castro-Brandt from my sophomore year in high school, and I'm using her notes and stuff to make the later chapters ACTUALLY REAL biology things.
god damn those science students, now i wanna eat my tail, am stuck to the floor, and are changing colors!
1618011 They're pretty crazy, they got other tricks up their sleeves.
Erm... not really. I'm just watching it 'cause it's well-written, has an interesting concept and is good so far. Humour doesn't enter into it.
That said, with the 'pranks' it looks to be interesting however ya choose to continue.
1617900 Mastering human biology is pretty hard,I imagine pony and creatures biology,I'm waiting anxiously for the next chapter
I'm wondering if I'm making the chapters too short, I think they could be a little longer but at the same time the less I write per chapter, I feel it'll let me write more into the story. If any of you guys see this I'd like to know what you guys and gals think of the chapter lengths.
urgh! i want MOAR!!
The word is accept, not except. But those animal crackers sound useful for more than just pranks.
Animal Crackers ..... hmmm could this be a reference to Fluttershy Discovers Animal Crackers?
1638855 I'll make more then.
1643827 Thanks for telling me of my mistake. I can't really think of what else they could be used for besides jokes.
1644125 I don't think so, I think I read that a while back and it got stuck in the back of my head so when I was thinking hard enough it pushed it's way to the front of my mind and then BAM animal crackers are born, but I think she'll be a little happy with the fact they aren't made of real animals.
I'll take it you never read Animorphs. Just read the series, and look at all the ways the morphs have been helpful.
1647959 Never heard of or read that series. I'll give it a try soon, thanks.
I would go to eBay to find them. The original series ended in 2002, and a relaunch was recentally cancelled a couple months back.
Loved the cracker prank
Heh, who knew Twilight was a regular Fred or George Weasley?
1651933 Haha, yeah.
Remember pony vocab.
pony-person
hooves- hands and feet
SOMEPONY-SOMEONE
nice story though. Its very funny
Only Dash...
Nice Update!
1700385 Thank you.
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Captain of the guard? I could see that
1711897 I can too.
I find it impossible not to feel sorry for Dashie. Hoping things take a positive turn soon.
That said, it's still an interesting story.
(I could never remember the definition of Mastication...)
Poor Dashie
Until they get to pegasus anatomy, she's going to figure out a way to fly faster....
I liked it. It's a simple story and simple is good. Good work.
Love it. Good idea but I think rainbow will be all like
when she gets there.
By the way nice cover art lol
One error. How could Twilight come by Rainbow's house if she lives in clousdale?
I'm just messing with you bro!
Party Bash and Reinert. Lemons.
Fucking LOL you egomaniac
Fun and easy read.
I've kind of been of two minds about this story, liking and respecting how well written it is while...well, I'll get to that in a minute. This story is amazingly well written. I like the characters, the descriptions and pacing and all the elements involved. You're a very good writer and this is very good.
The only issue I have with the story is...well, the story. Each chapter is pretty much the same thing, Rainbow isn't paying attention and ends up saying or doing something embarrassing. Once or twice its funny but after a while...it stops being funny and starts being really just mean spirited. It makes me kind of uncomfortable to read a character I like very much being constantly humiliated, especially for no purpose. Perhaps I'm being too sensitive but it just makes the story a bit too hard to read (despite the excellent technicals). So...yeah, unless this is building to something or something actually happens this seems just too mean spirited for my tastes. I'm sure that wasn't the intent but...that's how it comes off to me.
One problem, early on: re-read these sentences:
huh?
umm...
Other than that, a very promising story!
No really Dash, you'll like it! 
I'm haqving fun reading this, but my red pens' a-twitchin' "Adolescence," here, is an adjective. I think you wanted "adolescents," the plural noun.
I see what you did there.
Oh my gosh, I'm being that guy?
the benches were for legs? not for rumps?
Captain of the guard... priceless!
Okay, that was embarrassing....
Poor Dashie, why can't he just let her sleep?
Holy shit. You came back and finished it.
Yeah, the ending was a bit abrupt and could use a bit of polish, but at least you made sure it was finished.
Well done, man, well done.
~Skeeter The Lurker