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theRedBrony


Your friendly neighborhood mechanic / fanfic writer. Don't worry, I'm good at both! :D

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After last year's failed Starswirl the Bearded costume, Twilight designs a new costume -with magic- that the whole town is sure to love... What could possibly go wrong?

Teen gore tag only for zombie description. A little Nightmare Night one-shot for you! Enjoy!

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THIS IS GOOD.

Bwahahahahah! That ending! :rainbowlaugh: Wonderful job, bro. All my lulz. :rainbowwild:

Oh! That ending! :rainbowlaugh:

Wow. Bad end. (In a good way:pinkiecrazy:)

Luna: *Sigh* Tia?
Celestia: Yup?
Luna: Get your shotgun.
Trolestia: Are we going fishing?
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She looks like something from a fucked up R.L. Stine book or a George Romaro film.

Scumbag Red, doesn't use Rayne. :(

They're all gonna die!!:raritycry:

Not sure if Twilight was actually a zombie or not.

:yay:
Now someone just needs to nibble Luna!

That was pretty hilarious, especially the punchline.

There are only two problems I had with it, and the first is Spike: just because he has a dry, sardonic attitude doesn't mean he sighs and groans over everything, and I just realized that I've seen ne'er a trace of the excited, happy-go-lucky part of his personality in fanfiction. I would have expected him to be delighted with Twilight's awesome costume and concerned for her when AJ bucked her in the face.

The second thing that didn't live up to what I was expecting was where Twilight's storyline gave way to the epilogue. After she pulled her Bill Murray and then got zapped by Rainbow Dash, it looked like she would become the target of a running gag, encountering all kinds punishment at each instance in which she shows off her costume. But that wasn't the case.

Other than those two drawbacks, this was a lot of short-lived fun. I especially like the concept that Twilight would enjoy coming up with such a morbid concept for a costume.

1536997 1537009 1537071 :pinkiehappy:
1537023 1537045 I thought it was clever :rainbowwild:
1537093 lol
1537097 That's kinda the idea... less of a costume and more of a zombie.
1537103 Meh, she would have been out of place.
1537196 Dark tag! :raritywink:
1537347 She actually looked like one. But no, she wasn't infected or anything.
1537352 Hmmm... :trixieshiftleft:
1537418 I'll be honest, I wanted to do more, like you said, have a running gag with Twi getting hurt by her friends. But I wanted to keep it short. I initially planned to include all the mane 6 plus cmc, but it was getting a bit long for what I anticipated. Besides, I wrote this in like 1 day, I was kinda like 'oh shit 3 days til Nightmare Night, I should write a oneshot special for it.' As for Spike, you're right you don't see much of his happy-go-lucky side. I did have him snickering at Twilight's first injury though... Glad you liked it anyway!
1537482 :duck:

Twas a great read!

Did Luna figure out that it was just a misunderstanding?:trixieshiftleft:
Or did a seemingly harmless gesture come with the ultimate price?:trixieshiftright:
We will never know!:rainbowlaugh:

Just realized... Twilight spent FOUR MONTHS preparing herself to die!

and now you must realise


4 is death

the zombos are a commin'

who will be the 'one man cheeseburger apocolypse'?

This is probably a reference to the TF2 cursed souls, isn't it? :trixieshiftleft: :trixieshiftright:

eeyup twilights realistic zombie idea caused a misunderstanding and now Princess Luna is going to kill everypony in town

LOLOLOLOLOLOLOLOL, as long as she didn't bite flutters its o.k.

I can only imagine the aftermath. Luna stands triumphant against the zombie hordes, only to see the costumes wearing off on the bodies.

Luna: Oopsies.....

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Celestia: Luna, what have you done to my little ponies?

good short story even if i would liked a longer story
Still i wonder if this is will really wear off after 4 hours :pinkiecrazy:

1537719 Burger......TTTTTTTTTTTTTTTAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAANNNNNNNNNNNKKKKKKKKKKK!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

1537491 I actually didn't even finish it until now. The only thing I said at the end was "Shit". Great story though awesome concept with an even better execution.

BAAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAA!!!

Oh dear, oh dear.

*notices word count*
Hmm.
Was that deliberate, or just proof that this could hit featured easily?

1545169
MUUHAHAHAAHAHAHAHA

1536997

YOU...

...YOU

...YOU STOLE MY SKYPE PROFILE IMAGE! :flutterrage:
One I screencapped myself. :twilightoops:

1648242....I....I'm so sorry:fluttershysad:......I can change! I swear!:raritydespair:

This was great, good job. :pinkiehappy:

I would have loved to see more, when something is this good never be afraid to make it long. :heart:

Thank you very much for sharing it with us. :scootangel:

Sorry! Late replies! :fluttershysad:

1537500 The world may never know And duh, this is Twilight we're talking about here! :twilightoops:
1537719 MUH FRENDS CALL ME COACH.
1537753 I don't think so Tim.
1537822 That's pretty much the jist of it. :eeyup:
1538026 I dunno... :trollestia:
1538166 lol
1538538 I had a longer version planned, but it got kinda dry. Thanks tho!
1539733 Wow! Thanks!
1540205 LUL. :rainbowlaugh:
1542295 Oh goodness, everypony's a zombie... :fluttershbad:
1545169 lol it was Geta's Idea, twas close to the number when I posted so I did some editing afterwards. Shame it didn't get featured, oh well!
2012701 Sorry! The long version got kinda dry, so I shortened it. And you're welcome! And thanks for the watch! I really appreciate it! :pinkiehappy:

you could upload the long version in a separate chapter. that would be interesting also I'd love to see celestia's reaction to luna's slaughter.:twilightsmile:

This is superb lol

twilight, what the hell are we going to do with you?:twilightoops:

2063203 Meh, I honestly have a lot more to write for other stories :unsuresweetie:
2116511 :pinkiehappy: Glad ya like it! Not exactly my best work, but definitely not my worst!
2604151 hehehe... silly Twilight... torturing changelings for here own scientific/magical gains... :pinkiesmile:

2606168 That wouldn't be the weirdest/creepiest/sadistic thing i have heard her do :ajbemused:

2606204 Stay tuned! I'm writing a story like that! Interestingly, it was just a thought that crossed my mind, so I hinted at it in this story. Then I got to thinking... that would make a great story!

Ha cute, funny and ... Well funny! I liked it!

3400945 Hehe, glad you liked it! :twilightsmile:

Needed to be longer. :pinkiesad2:

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Now I just think Luna killed a bunch of foals...

:pinkiecrazy:This will be fun... I've always enjoyed a good hunt...

Yes. All of my yes.

4093737 Glad you liked it!

I finally understand Twilight's role in the group: she'd the lightning rod, the friend you keep around to attract and ground any free floating suck. Perhaps that also explains why I've such an unnatural attachment to her. :trixieshiftright:

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