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cooopercrisp
Author of "Filly Fooling," "Cuddling," and "Spread."
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Uh...
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Nothing but positive reception. Instead of read latering this story, like I have with... -checks read later list- 1,526 stories, I'll just read this now.
EDIT
HAHAHA! YOU DIDN'T USE FOAL INSTEAD OF FOOL! THANK YOU!
VS 
!!!!!!
I love you because of that.
As for the story...
Other than that, a generic clopfic.
You get an upvote.
the ending made me go
Everyone is out of character, Spike trying to describe a sexual encounter was a bad idea ('suck me off' really?) ... the porn itself was bland and uninteresting. It was quick but in a not-so-good way, there was no build up.
The essence of 'and then they fucked.' Sorry.
HELL YEAH! SPIKE! WOO HOO! TWILIGHT BITCH SLAPPED HIS ASS! DON'T PISS OF THE SPARKLE!
Well, that was disappointing. The writing isn't bad, I was just hoping that it would end the way Spike thought it would. Kind of trolled, kind of not, I guess.
Not much to say on this matter.
Calling him disgusting after he had his dreams crushed was a little harsh.
Why is everyone out of character?!
>All comments are uniformly negative, expressing a dissatisfaction with the story's execution and character portrayals.
>22 upvotes to 17 downvotes
Wat.
Are people really that desperate to read drunk unicorn on underage dragon porn?
That ending was funny.
from desc.
you spelled douchebaggery wrong.
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I liked it to even the numbers out. It was rustling me, man.
1535526 "Debauchery" is a word.
Unless you were being sarcastic. Over the Internet, it can be hard to tell.
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Spike is an awful person..dragon
Twilight is cruel
Rarity is an alcoholic
I love Sparity, I love Sparity clopfics even more, but this is a disgrace all around. Everypony is out of character completely in this story. Twilight is a snarky bitch in this entire story. Rarity was just an alcoholic and downright awful in this story and her letting Spike know that even after what happened, she had no feelings for Spike. Spike was being a bit of an asshole and a douche in this story as well. The clop scenes could've been handled a little better and there really was no romance in it since Spike gets his heart broken. It could've been such a great Sparity clopfic, but sadly this isn't the case. What we get is a story that acts more like a troll fic than a romantic Sparity story and a waste of time for those who came for a great Sparity story. Now if you'll excuse me, I'm going to go read a better Sparity clopfic like from Path_of_Cloud or Arby Works and get this terrible one out of my head.
o.k. story
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Yeah... I think it is high time that the CMC got ahold of him. I suspect they would pound him into little purple dirtburgers!
1535063 Oh, come on, he banged a really really drunk chick. You can only do that to your girlfriend and extra-shouldn't ever do that to someone you actually like. It was a really dicky move only somewhat made Okay because Spike is really a baby in this fic. He is in absolutely no condition to meaningful consent, thus is unable to act responsibly. Rarity essentially did exactly what TS said, she f-ed a minor to get back at his caretaker. Said Caretaker has to make it clear to her charge that this was extremely not OK.
1535903 He acts like a little boy would. That's the point. Sparity only works if you assume that Spike is emotionally mature. He isn't in the show. He is Intelligent enough. You could interpret him in a way that he just thinks differently because he is a Dragon. Then it works best in my opinion. Also possible is that he is smarter than he looks like and just plays the innocent boy. I favor this interpretation and imagine Shining Armor to have begged him:"Please, I'll do anything. If Anyone finds out..." "Don't worry bro, if anyone asks: There never was a Bachelor Party. I'll chalk it up to being a "Baby-Dragon", they eat that stuff up."
Maybe Rarity wanted to confess to Twi and got drunk for courage, but didn't know her dose. Which would mean she is the opposite of an alcoholic.
We still don't know what they meant by "drunker than a milked cow" Also, Rarity was a bitch. I honestly expected it to be a small revenge joke in the end.
Really I would like to see where this goes, but looking at it I think it's finished conflict resolved. Rarity got dissed on, spike got some, the only problem I can see is that twilight is mad at spike and that's nothing new. Where are you taking this?
Out of character and a poor excuse for a clopfic. I LOVE Sparity (And Twilight/Spike, and Spike/Applejack, and Spike/Fluttershy), but this was a DISGRACE. And having Rarity deny everything and crush him on the spot and then have Twilight be really OOC and even SLAP Rarity and Spike...I disapprove.
~Raxel~
I wish I was spike then.
Yeah buddy could have gotten all of that....and more.
I thought it was pretty funny. I gave it a like.
get some spike
you da man, or colt or baby dragon,or what ever the fuck you are.lol
Ha!
Spike is a total jerk now.
He didn't regret anything.
He was like:
Pff, I got what I wanted. Who cares if she didn't love me at the end.
What Twilight and Rarity are fighting now? Well, please count how many bucks I give while I sleep.
BTW:
This line feels somewhat odd for me.
"You then ran kisses down my chest and to my belly..."
This might be just me though.
I thought that was interesting Rarity was out of character along with everyone else, but I really got a sense of Spike's/Twilight's brother/sister relationship, in the little things like their analogies for Rarity's drunken as a cow-ness, all the way down to simply how they relayed past information in exactly detailed story format.
All in all I give the story a (T).
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That's (T) for Troll.
Alcool... realize dreams.
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He totally deserves it. He's a worthless cad, and reminds me of the reasons I dislike most men. 'Doesn't matter; had sex.'
2396525 This. I'm the author, and even I think Spike was an asshole.
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This. It is my personal view on Spike. He is in some ways MUCH smarter than he lets on. His maturity is lacking in a few areas, and part of it may be that dragons see things differently, but he isn't quite the "baby" that people take him for. Sadly, this also means that Spike is likely lying with his 'too shy to talk to you at first' line, and may very well have known EXACTLY what was going on with Rarity even before she started kissing him. This means that Spike is most certainly a jackass in this fic.
And while Spike might be out of character, I do NOT feel that Rarity or Twilight are. As said before, Rarity may very well been trying to get liquid courage to build herself up so she could tell Twilight what she feels. It is one thing to flirt with random strangers, and quite another to try and start a relationship with a close friend when you don't even know if their barn door swings that way. Since Rarity is almost certainly not a heavy drinker she most likely went well beyond her limit without even realizing it. Again, fairly in character.
As for Twilight, she does come off as being rather heavy handed on Rarity, but during the party she had been drinking as well, and after the party she admits to Spike that it was an act to convince Rarity never to do that again. She told Spike specifically NOT to take advantage of Rarity, who freely admits to Rarity he had every intention of ignoring that. Twilight is trying to both help a friend to never get into such a compromising position again, as well as trying to cover up the fact she knows that Spike was really being a complete jackass. Asshole that he is, he is still family to her. This doesn't prevent her from smacking him for it when nobody is around. Also mostly in character for her.
This all being said, still giving this a thumbs down. The writing needs polish and the clop elements were very bland and uninspired. And a lot of the story requires making assumptions in order to either make sense or to keep the characters remotely in character. This is partly explained that its a fic about someone being drunk and trying to figure out what the **** happened. But even that is not quiet enough to salvage this. Great concept, needs a bit of work on the execution. I still enjoyed the fic, but it needs work.
From the description I kinda was hoping for this to end on more positive note. Oh well, Rarity messed up and Spike got some, that's fine by me. Maybe next time she'll try drink more responsible if she doesn't want the sweet dragon tongue action.
1537832 I really hate when people just start bashing on Spike for no reason
It's just really fucking annoying
Why is there a romance tag?
The ending left me