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LockandKeyHyena


i write stories sometimes. your resident lightning dust apologist

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Flurry Heart tries to warn her father of the impending apocalypse. Shining Armor thinks his daughter has a lovely imagination.


My first attempt at writing a comedic(ish) story! Do be gentle haha. This is an entry into the Shining Armor is a Terrible Dad Competition! I don’t think there’s a worse thing a dad can do than cheerfully ignore the apocalypse, do you?

Chapters (1)
Comments ( 7 )

delightful


also, lmao

This was pretty funny for your first attempt at comedy.

Delightfully goofy :D

Uhm, I think the idea is good, but the grammar is awful. It hurt and was confusing to read. However, you only get better through effort and positive criticism.

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thanks for the criticism! i’ll work on getting better in the future!

Great story!
I enjoyed reading it.


Have a picture of Flurry Heart in armor:
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Source.

It was kinda hard to tell; was she just LARPing?

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