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Scorch234
I'm not as great of a writer like everybody else but I try the best I can when writing my stories so if you read my stories and have any tips on how I can better my writing I'll greatly appreciate it
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I think "punctuation" would serve you best as the first thing to focus on.
At a more meta level, you need to read more — and by "read," I mean professionally edited books, novels and nonfiction, from the library or bookstore, not fanfic or web comics or manga. You're clearly brimming with ideas but reading will improve your fluency with prose.
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Thanks for the advice I can’t believe I missed that mistake
Well, I must say you caught my attention. Your fic is the first involving [Displaced] and [Miraculous] that I've found on this site, so I have certain expectations about it.
Thanks for the story! And I will wait for the next chapters.
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Your very welcome and thanks for telling me that
Putting this on the list.
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Thank you
Pretty interesting
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Happy to hear you find my story interesting
I'm a little disappointed he didn't appear with the Predators suit
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You mean when he appeared to save Luna and Celestia?
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No I didn't see anything about the armor when he appeared in Equestria the Doom Slayer suit or armor from Doom guys military grade unless I missed it
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Oh that yeah okay I said in the story that he was going to go as the doom guy at the convention but he accidentally left his costume back home so that’s why he didn’t appear in equestria as the doom guy
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Ok
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Yeah
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Funny for him to have a deagle so you can make a joke like a villain saying why should I do what you say just for the main character to say because I have a gun
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Lol
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Ya please have that in the fanfics somewhere it will be hilarious
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I’ll think about it but I might have trouble putting that in when my character uses the powers of all miraculouses
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Ok ty
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Np
Why do I get a feeling that Luna and Celestia would have a crush on him in the future?
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Who knows it might be the case or might just be them being thankful for him saving them
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Well we’ll soon find out. Also you did a good job on this story and this is before the Mane Six were ever been born.
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Thanks and yup at first I was like doing this during season 2 but then I was like nah but then I remembered reading some fics where the mc was sent to equestria past and was made immortal by their merchants or by some other means before jumping into the main timeline so I decided to use that idea
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And he met the Royal sisters in their teenage years or something.
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No in their younger youths like Celestia is 12 and Luna 7 but a few time skips will change that of course
Thanks for the chapter!
Well, we have the prota again showing his great power, sometimes I forget that miraculous are very powerful items. Now I have some doubts;
First, will your story take place entirely in the past? Or will there be a time skip?
Second, could David use all the miraculous at the same time, like Hawk Moth at the beginning of season 5, without taking damage since he is immortal?
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Your welcome and do you mean time skip if so then yes there will be a time skip the first few chapters will take place in the past before time skipping to the main timeline also can’t give spoilers now so you’ll have to wait and find out
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I see, so one last question;
How far do you intend to adapt the original series? For example, will you adapt all 9 seasons and the 2017 film? Or just the first three as many people choose to do? Do you plan on using anything from Equestria Girls?
Sorry if I seem anxious or invasive with these questions, I just like to know what to expect.
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It’s fine but yes all seasons and movie but if I’m not able to fit all seasons I’ll make the rest of the seasons in a sequel
Hmm...
Twilight: Ladybug Miraculous
Rainbow Dash: Rabbit or Dragon Miraculous
Applejack: Fox Miraculous
Rarity: Tiger Miraculous
Fluttershy: Mouse Miraculous
Pinkie: Pig Miraculous
Flash Sentry: Black Cat Miraculous
Spike: Snake Miraculous
Cheese Sandwich: Monkey Miraculous
They're only ideas. You can choose wether to do those or not.
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Great idea but my editor and I have been coming up with our own ideas for the main six miraculouses
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*Shrug with a smile* It's cool, man. Just throwing it out there.
Damn, two chapters in one day! You are inspired.
And about the chapter, there was a lot of information being exposed, mainly explanations about aspects of the verse [Displaced]. Not to mention that David created a miraculous and a Kwami, great achievement.
I'm wondering how there will be a Hawk Moth? Because he can only exist with the moth/butterfly Miraculous, and that is in David's possession at the moment. The only chance for him to exist is if David loses the Miraculous for some reason or the original Hawk Moth is actually teleported to Equestria.
Huh. I didn’t know there even was a Miraculous Ladybug tag. Are there any other Miraculous Ladybug stories on here?
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also thank you my mind is full of ideas that are bursting to come out
Yes there are but some don't have the tag
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How did you know my plan for the butterfly/moth miraculous
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Dragon.
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Pardon?
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I understand
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Cool
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Mhm
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Your idea on Rainbow Dash as a Miraculous.
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Something that she would've like to match her awesomeness.
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Will Spike get one too?
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I was going with either how similar Rainbow Dash is to Alix or her talent involving speed and weather.
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You'll have to see when the main timeline comes
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Okay make sense.
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Ok.
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Thanks