tell what I need to do to improve my writing thank you

I think "punctuation" would serve you best as the first thing to focus on.

At a more meta level, you need to read more — and by "read," I mean professionally edited books, novels and nonfiction, from the library or bookstore, not fanfic or web comics or manga. You're clearly brimming with ideas but reading will improve your fluency with prose.

11800258
Thanks for the advice I can’t believe I missed that mistake

Well, I must say you caught my attention. Your fic is the first involving [Displaced] and [Miraculous] that I've found on this site, so I have certain expectations about it.
Thanks for the story! And I will wait for the next chapters.

11800268
Your very welcome and thanks for telling me that

Putting this on the list.

11800330
Thank you

Pretty interesting

11800353
Happy to hear you find my story interesting

I'm a little disappointed he didn't appear with the Predators suit

11801413
You mean when he appeared to save Luna and Celestia?

11801438
No I didn't see anything about the armor when he appeared in Equestria the Doom Slayer suit or armor from Doom guys military grade unless I missed it

11801471
Oh that yeah okay I said in the story that he was going to go as the doom guy at the convention but he accidentally left his costume back home so that’s why he didn’t appear in equestria as the doom guy

11801487
Ok

11801737
Yeah

11801876
Funny for him to have a deagle so you can make a joke like a villain saying why should I do what you say just for the main character to say because I have a gun

11801881
Lol

11801891
Ya please have that in the fanfics somewhere it will be hilarious

11801893
I’ll think about it but I might have trouble putting that in when my character uses the powers of all miraculouses

11801913
Ok ty

11801973
Np