30 year old man from California who likes to fight with swords. Author of Successor, Love Mark, and Daybreaker at Canterlot Wedding Verses.
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Not bad for a first time fic like this. Definitely has room for improvement. Good job.
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How could I improve it right now?
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Well, one thing I can say is that when writing a fic like this, the most important thing is to be able to make sure that you're readers can picture and feel what is going on in their minds. So, the more you can give a clear description of what's happening, the better off it'll be for reading and helping you to get comfortable when doing these kinds of fics.
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I thought I did do that. What description do you feel is lacking? If it's with the action of sex that's cause this my first time writing that as I said.
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Right, and I understand that. Just letting you know that the more you practice with describing a scene out, the better you’ll get at it. Practice makes perfect, but for a first attempt, not bad at all.
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Thank you.
They're a cute couple. Also kinda hot. ^^ I enjoyed it, maybe we can see more saucy bits starring Fire Sword? ;)
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I plan on a set with Rarity as she is his love interest in Element of Strength (Element of Balance now).
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Looking forward to it then. ^^
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It will take a while though since I probably won't have them do this till at least Mystery on the Friendship Express or Canterlot Wedding.
I remember you liked Alex Wolf's story, this is kind of the same.
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Gotcha.