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Dragon-In-Black


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After Princess Celestia denies her destiny, Sunset Shimmer defies her former mentor and flees to the human world, intending to create an army to invade Equestria with, however, that changes when she becomes friends with Trixie Lulamoon, who takes an interest in Sunset.

Now with a friend by her side, will she invade her former home or does she open up to friendship?

Chapters (2)
Comments ( 9 )

An interesting start. You have my interest and I will look forward to the next update.

A little rough in spots but has promise. I'll be looking forward to updates.

Quickening her phase, she made it to the doors

Quickening her pace, she made it to the doors

this... pencil didn’t need ink, all she needed to do was sharpen it every once in a while and the eraser could ‘erase’ words she had misspelled or written the wrong thing.

What is this sorcery! Sunset must have thought.

Occasionally, she would look for words she didn’t understand

The use of some examples would have been nice, whether for world-building or comedy purposes.

last of her homework which was chemistry which took some time to finish due to some words being different due to their Equestrian counterparts.

last of her homework, which was chemistry, took some time to finish due to some words being different to their Equestrian counterparts.

Also, once again, some examples would have been nice here, to.

This is a really cute story so far. I'm excited to see how it progresses :trixieshiftright:

Amazing story keep up the great work

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