During the night, a villainous pony sneaks into Canterlot Castle and breaks Celestia's connection to the sun, taking it for her own gain. Twilight and the rest of the gang embark on a quest to recover Celestia's magic and stop the powerful thief before her plans, whatever they may be, can be fully realized.
(Stop trying to add this to Tyrantlestia groups!)
An Experimental submission for the 2023 'A Thousand Words' contest.
Thanks to Reviewfilly and a few other /fimfic/ denizens for initial readings.
Chapters (6)
A genius series of snippets straight out of Tyrantlestia Fic #853 from 2012. Have a like.
No. Celestia would never do something like this. Only in Tyrantlestia fics perhaps. I haven't heard a damn thing to convince me otherwise.
And frankly, this needs to be a properly long story for me to care more.
Alright, I admit that was way more intelligent than I thought on first glance. Something was bothering me about this after my first reading, and it wasn't until a second reading that it all actually clicked in my head with the A/N's. This was actually really good! And a very good fit for the experimental theme. Best of luck in the contest!
I do not really see Celestia speaking in such a cruel way, but that said: a hilarious idea to make a Cliff's Notes-like snippet adventure.
There’s something so off about this chapter. Something so off.
And I love it.
I dunno what everyone’s talking about, this seems like a perfectly canon Celestia to me!
Very amusing… even if it seems like not everyone is getting the joke. Best of luck in the competition!
So Celestia was the one behind it? Was she looking for a replacement or something? She seems like she wanted Lucent to succeed.
Part of me thought something was possessing Celestia and it went over to Lucent, when she mentioned the vessel thing.
Anyways, I enjoyed the unusual style of this story. It felt frantic and clearly purposefully keeps the big picture from you.
That was amazing!
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I think you are missing the implication in what "Celestia" said.
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Obviously, cause I have no idea what you're talking about.
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Still sounds like Celestia wanted to steal Lucent's body for herself.
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Makes sense to me. The rest of Twilight's friends have gone completely silent after having been audible in every preceding chapter (well, to be more specific, every chapter that wasn't the professor's exposition dump), and on the meta level I'm assuming this fic is going for, the spite Twilight herself harbors for Lucent — itself removed from most of its context — stands in stark contrast to the sympathy she provided the numerous canonical "reformed rogue unicorns" dotting FiM's run.
That's how I'm looking at it, at the very least. Sorry if I'm sucking the magic out of the off-ness.
oh well that's definitely unexpected
I'm confused is there a specific reason the story is jumping so many chapters there seems to be a few gaps in the story.
ooh, seems suspiciously straightforward as a narrative for an “Experimental” story!
aww that is exactly what Rarity would darling!
there sure are a lot of mares with light-themed names and prodigious magical abilities who are prone to outbursts and cruelty! honestly in retrospect it’s impressive Celestia got Twilight right
aww Twilight is so mean here!
noooooo Rarity! :(
ah, such unsubtle villainy!
so there are three layers i see here, which are the very straightforward adventure/thriller story, the “twist” of Celestia’s motivations here, and the artlessness of said twist reflecting a less developed author, perhaps a commentary on or pastiche of the early fandom. i do love metatextual things like that, but i also wonder if i am missing something from the above. thank you for writing!
Thank you to all commenters/readers!
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With everything all said and done, I added on to a BLOG if you'd like to see all I was going for.
I’ve seen several entries that felt more like scenes taken from larger stories, but this is the first time that feeling was deliberate. Fascinating glimpses at the larger narrative and good stuff overall. I’ve never been big on Tyrantlestia, but I am left intrigued to see where you might go with this. Thank you for it.