Lucent Streak (and a bit about Suntaker) · 4:00am Sep 13th, 2023
Just for fun. Pretty different from what I initially imagined her looking like, but I still think it works. Not totally sure what her cutie mark represents, though... I like the idea of her talent letting her leave traces of magic here and there that allow her to "reconnect" and resume manipulating objects, even if she's farther away and can no longer see them directly. It'd get strenuous (and painful) very quickly if she's not reasonable with it, however.
With the contest done, here was my plan with the story, for anyone curious:
I wanted, right off the bat, to try and emulate a story that starts off simple, and enjoyable. Nothing deep, a straightforward plot, but with good enough execution. One that's easy to read and easier to get into, y'know? Then, right at the end, it'd just... drop a real 'but why?' of a decision. Something totally nonsensical that, when put together with everything you recall from earlier in the story, literally makes no sense. Just an off-the-wall choice that was completely unnecessary in an otherwise very non-convoluted story. I then decided to pair that with the author getting snippy when the readers are, understandably, put off by this really odd choice. So, put simply, try and make a story that starts off simple, takes a turn it really didn't need to, and showcase enough of the author's bitterness at the audience's reaction through the final note that you could easily imagine what the comment section on that chapter looked like. (The Stop trying to add this to Tyrantlestia groups is also supposed to be a funny little "celestia is not ooc! shut up already!".)
I can see more than a few things that I could've done differently, but I'm still pretty happy with how it turned out and had a blast working on it. Knowing that some people also outright liked the adventure portion/found it engaging despite the length feels really cool, considering all the stuff I'd like to write in the future. That, alongside the meta aspect being able to shine through feels nice.
Well, she definitely seems like the type of pony that has some sass to her.
hi i love this horse
posting again to say that i still love this horse! what a great design
and i loved the meta aspect! you def did a great job in putting in enough to imply the longer story and the audience reaction within the word limit. definitely look forward to whatever writing and genre you will get up to next!