• Member Since 29th Aug, 2012
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Lord Guffington


The Mustang is a powerful warrior, who was created to protect Equestria. It is said he can travel through different worlds stopping evils in any dimension. Unfortunately, the power of The Mustang was lost to a different universe a long time ago, right before the outbreak of Nightmare Moon. That's where I come in...

Chapters (12)
Comments ( 119 )

A little to fast paced and also have some mistakes but otherwise good. And just to clarify, I have bad grammer so I can't spot all the mistakes. And A Watch to keep it going.

"I'm sorry, but I don't know a 'Twilight Sparkle.'" (O_O) The plot thickens...

All I can really say at this point is find a proof-reader. I saw a few problems with puncuation, spacing, and some of what you said would be better in italics. Other than that, meh. To each his own. Let's see where you go wit dis. (However I will add at this point it's all very...confusing. Yes, that's the word)

:duck: I love the concept, but yes, its a little fast, you should try slowing it down a notch in the next chapter :twilightsmile:

I'll make sure to slow it down and I think it's fixed
P.S. this is the first time I wrote anything for fun

I would like to know if you guys want this to have romance or not.If so,then who?

... With the clearly non-existent editor. :3. Also. FIRST! (Author comments don't count! dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Lyra_smile.png )

This chapter took 8 hours to write, and I got 5,000 words from it? Awesome!:trollestia:

Now keep doing that and you get alot of happy people:D

1390571 I would, but I've got a football game to go to, and I don't think the people in marching band would like that.:fluttershysad:

Interesting, thought you would make him an alicorn. Thats what everyone else does.
But do continue really enjoying your writing style.

And do try to make the chapters as long as this one.

1438366 If they were all this long, I'd probably get sick from sleep deprivation.:pinkiesick:

1439743 Thanks. Did you see the references?

1272933>>1272986>>1273004 For your sakes, I have rewritten the whole chapter. Read it now!


I has read it. Tis much more appealing. Good fer you!

:derpytongue2: I didn't remember ever reading this, but now I do :pinkiehappy:

You did well to fix it up! :twilightsmile:

1695890 Is that because they're human? Or I'm referencing a game?

1696920 you're refferencing a game?

Yeah, next chapter I'm going to include everyone's favorite shout.:moustache:


I'll do my best with an iPod

1833850 Add some zap!WITH A CAPITAL Z!

Might as well check out who is the one replying to my comments on slenderman. :moustache:

1865549 Too bad I still have to finish one story but after that I'll try to read the other 3 chapters in this story, in the meantime have my mustache :moustache:

Again, thank you very much

A skyrim MLP omniscient-character human crossover? I approve. Nice story.

I think you should stop actively using links in sentences. Instead of

The person in question gives a groan and is about to complain before I give him a glare much like this.

you should use

The person in question gives a groan and is about to complain before I give him a glare.

and link "a glare". But that's just personal opinion.

1931027 you said a "vote" thats my vote Apple Bucking season

I shall vote "Griffin the brush-off".:pinkiesmile:
Btw great fic.:pinkiehappy:

Hey look! I finally got round to reading this! :twilightsheepish:

I'm liking it so far, gonna keep reading. In the meantime you can have an upvote, a favourite... and one of these things --> :moustache:

I vote for Griffon The Brush-Off. Show Gilda who's boss! :rainbowdetermined2:

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