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Uh..... Someone should give him advice. I don't even know if a soldier accept to play game or not though
. If yes, they don't have even bother to remember anyway.
Edit: okay, this is the one I found that ridiculous. Is this a troll fic?
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Not a troll-fic. It's a compelling and emotional story of a rage-induced man who has the soul of a warrior and unforeseen willpower, yet he feels empty inside and struggles to find his purpose.
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Uh huh. Well then, you are not successful to portray a soldier in real life though. They don't even bother to remember the game they play. All they focus is mission.
Edit: I doubt that Human is exist in Equestria
P/S: What kind of commander is that? No commander will say "you know what to do" when a soldier report that all of the team dead.
This reads like an angsty 16 yr old's weird fantasy of the Marine Corps, circa like just after desert storm or something. I know this is probably a meme story and all, but still lmao
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I like that sound.
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I mean realistically the only sound here would be this character crying after being rejected at MEPS for failing the psych eval, and never even making it to boot. It's probably all an elaborate joke and all, but on the off-chance it isn't I've worked for DoD and the Corps specifically to know how the system works so this physically pains me lol
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Ikr, its such a heart wrenching story of a soldier struggling with his inner rage
Oh look, another angsty Gary Stu Creator's Pet in Equestria.
Hard pass from me.
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More like it's a story written by someone who knows nothing about the Marines and doesn't know about these things called psych evaluations.
How to say I wanted to be a Marine but couldn't make the cut, so now I'm going to do it in fanfiction.
Now, I never joined the military, but I'm 2,000% certain video games couldn't possibly prepare you for hour one in the Marine Corps.
Okay, look, seriously, what the hell was happening in that head of yours when you wrote this pile of drek? The only thing going for this is a lack of spelling and grammar errors. The rest is complete and utter drivel, and I don't have to look past the second paragraph to know that.
And if this is a trollfic, at least own up to it.
Yeaa naw homie that aint happening, i dont know if you've ever meet a drill Sargent, but youre not going to beat one of those guys no matter how big you are homie, most of the ones ive meet are black belts in Marine corps martial arts (which is a mix of all kinds of crazy shit) so no fucking way are you even geting close to beating one of them, another thing if your gonna be a degenerate and attack a drill Sargent during boot camp your geting court marshalled no special forces unit wants a idiot like that. I havent even read the story yet cause i fucken cringed so hard at the stupidity of the first few lines, and to clarify im not some dick who likes to comment on the military, i have legitimate experience and hate when pepole dont look into the subject of the marine corps, i love em, and am on track to become one i actually ship out for marine boot camp soon and have spent the last 4 years with some absolute units, for instance my sargent major was the leader of Marsoc, fuckin unit even at 50 he could beat the shit out of anyone he met, man was crazy. ALSO WHAT THE FUCK IN AINT NO WAY YOU SAID "i PlaYed MoTerN warFarE im reAdY for THe marines" like fuck no your not. Like i have no problem with power fantasy's but for christ sake stop shiting on the marine corps. Fuck. (Edit: i just read it, im going to disregard the fact that an apache is not used for troop transport, in favor for the fact that you called a P90 A FUCKING MACHINE GUN GOD DAMNIT UGGHHH) Edit 2 : i read what you have so far. . .... ..... i hate i atleast thought maybe it would get better, but i found myself gagging at all the bullshit.) Well now i feel like an idiot, i just found out this is a trollfic and god damn did it work.
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Hell yea, you got that right!
I can't tell if this is written with a completely straight face, or if it's meant to be a subversive parody of "Sheepdog" Chris Kyle-wannabe boot mentality.
All that's missing is your OC munching crayons and jerking off in a porta-john.
This is shit. Block me if you want to stop spitting on your work, slut-writer.
You know it's sad when the comment section is better than the actual story. I try to give a story at least at 3 chapter benefit of the doubt but I couldn't even make it through the second chapter before I had to give it up and I was struggling through the first chapter. I don't even know how to express my disbelief and how you the author thinks that the military works like that. Truly I am absolutely baffled!
How dose that work in a living being? This isnt a vidogame
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Have you ever met the future former marine, Commander Jace "Stryker" Connors of Deagle Nation?
Can't tell if this is supposed to be a "serious" story or the biggest shit post on this website.
Either way, take my fucking updoot
Ohhh I knew I was in for a good time from the first paragraph when the protagonist knew how to handle himself in the USMC from fuckin' CoD.
It’s sorta like saying “I can snipe anyone from anywhere with my sniper rifle without a range finder in battlefield, that’s why I’m the greatest sniper in real life as well!Even though I have no real training”
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Then yes, this is a troll fic.
That, or the author is a try hard edgelord wannabe who has some growing up to do.
Jesus Christ. What shitshow did I just read?!
Twilight is NOT white as Celestia. She's purple.
He needs to STOP trying to go "back to command". Because realistically, they would have court martial his ass, arrested him, and put him on death row for the MANY heinous war crimes against a alien species ( Ponykind ) that COULD be a great ally to us if we were acting diplomatic in here.
But, thanks to this delusional suicidal moron! They would be "rightfully" provoked to declare war against all of us ( Mostly the U.S.A. ), due to one of our "marines" being a psychotic, genocidal, inhumane monster.
Anyone this delusional would not have made it through boot. He would have been discharged 4F
You’ve been on this site for eight years. Yet you think and write like a pretentious insecure 15 year old. How old even are you?
I would like to have a word with your parents. I think they can answer some questions I have.
Okay. That right there tells enough. The author CLEARLY has no idea what he is talking about and from this he sounds like some little 13 y.o. who thinks because he played CoD that he means anything in the real world. Get real. This is not even a half-way attempt at a decent story. There is no real effort here. This is a 'I want people to think I'm cool so I'm going to lie because I'm too pathetic to actually be cool' to type story. Not only is this absolutely pathetic, the above described scenario would have some dick-head in prison for assault. And all that talk about beta males is simply idiotic. Whoever this author is, he needs to be introduced to reality and have his @$$ kicked by a dozen REAL Drill Instructors and stop insulting our service men and women who are better before boot than he will ever be.
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Considering that the guy’s account is at least 8 years old, I’m terrified that a kid whose age was in the single digits was hanging around this site for years without anyone figuring it out. We need to contact his parents.
dude would've been court martialed on his first battle, no cap my man, hes fucking insane
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does the author even watch the show or did he just watch some random episodes
Alright.
I am an eight-year combat veteran of the Marine Corps. I joined in 1984, did tours in Honduras, Desert Storm, and other places I can't name. It is painfully obvious from reading this one chapter you have no fucking clue what it means to serve in the military, let alone the Marine Corps.
First of all, boot camp is in three phases. First phase is to acclimate you from being a raw civilian to the process of becoming a Marine. This involves grueling physical exercise and intense mental discipline. I don't care how buff you were before you joined the Service, you simply are not prepared for the physical training you'll be put through. I saw many men built like Rambo who washed out because they lacked the endurance to make it, and I saw many beanpoles, that looked like they'd never worked out a day in their lives (I was one of them) struggle through and make it.
Second phase is more intense training. As bad as it was for First phase, they up the stakes times ten for Second. This is when they begin the forced marches, the weapons training, and the close-order drills. You're being trained to no longer think as an individual but as part of a unit. Anyone, anyone, who shows they're still an "individual" (which is the worst insult one can be called at this stage) is finally rejected from the service.
Third phase is a bit more relaxed. By now, your body has been conditioned to the physical, and your mind has been sharpened. You are no longer a civilian: you have been once and FOREVER changed to be a Marine. Then, and only then, have you earned the right to wear the Eagle, Globe, and Anchor, and have ingrained in your heart the motto: Semper Fidelis.
Your protagonist would have been arrested and kicked out of service. Not the first day, because you have him "beating up his DIs." Drill Instructors aren't assigned until the third day you've been there. That's after three days of no sleep, military food, buzzcuts, and uniform issues. The purpose of boot camp is to make you a soldier, someone whom the other soldiers can trust their lives to, and a psychopath like your protagonist would not only get himself killed, he'd take everyone else with him. So he would never earn the right to be a Marine.
Another thing. You mention he was assigned to "Special Ops." That only happens AFTER you've proved yourself to be competent, and in the Marine Corps it's not called Special Ops, it's called Force Recon. A mere private fresh out of boot camp would never be assigned to an elite organization like Force Recon. There's a rank requirement, as well as needing recommendations from superior officers, and those take time. Your protagonist hasn't even learned how to handle an M16 yet, how could he be trusted to use the special weapons and tactics needed for an Elite? And forget the stupid idea of a civilian "kicking the ass" of a Marine Corps Drill Instructor. In reality, he would have tried to throw a punch, it would have been easily countered by ONE DI, and his ass would have been in the brig before he could blink.
This is what happens when your entire knowledge of the military comes from playing video games. You're ignorant, and you have absolutely no understanding of what it means to be a Marine. When you're old enough, put down the controller and try to enlist. IF you can pass the ASVAB, and make it through MEPS, it will remain to be seen if you can pass boot camp. If by some miracle you do, then and only then can you write this story.
Until then, show some fucking respect.
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Don't ask me. I'm not the one that's making this. And thank goodness I'm not.
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I came because cringe fic sounded funny, didn't think I'll find one in the comments too. Trying a little to hard sir.
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Or writers could, you know, not write power trip fantasies about military type protagonists in a world that has no place for them.
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Bruh literally just went
(Yeah, I know it's a Navy Seal copypasta, but shhhh)
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(sigh) I know it's just a copypasta, but the original poster is so laughable in his feeble attempts to sound badass I just couldn't resist pointing out a few of the errors.
First of all, it's SEALs, not Seals. SEAL is an acronym, one that a member of that organization wouldn't mistake by describing themself as a cute aquatic mammal.
Second, and this is the worst giveaway, NO SOLDIER BRAGS ABOUT KILLING. The only people who do so either hasn't killed a soul, or are complete sociopaths. Neither belongs in uniform. Chris Kyle was the top sniper with 150 confirmed kills, so this idiot is claiming he has twice that number. Kyle reluctantly talked about it, and even he never mentioned a number; the was left up to the Pentagon.
Last, no one who had gone through the intense mental, physical, and psychological training to become a SEAL would risk his career by posting death threats to a minor because of something said on the Internet. If he were that easily triggered, he wouldn't have passed the rigorous examinations. What we have here is a keyboard "warrior" who has played way too many video games.
There's plenty more I could mention, but I think I've made my point.
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The American sniper Kyle doesn't have Shit on the true OG sniper of Finland better known as the white death
The author must be past the point of no return, because this is one of the worst looking stories I have ever seen be related to the military to ever exist on this site.
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I completely agree. I've spoken a few times with my late Great-uncle Lou, who fought on Iwo Jima with the Marines in WW2, and he would be ashamed to see this were he still around to.
Personally, I believe this needs to be either A: Completely rewritten or B: Deleted.
That's just me, though.
The author should grow the fuck up regardless. No soldier would ever act like this in any rational unit of any rational military service.
EDIT- ALSO..."instead of killing himself like a beta male"?
WTF. Author, delete this. Right the fuck now.
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This is like, the most obvious trollfic ever put to screen
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Couldn't have said it better myself.
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If the author considers this a legitimate fic, he is sorely mistaken.
I would like to have a talk with your parents. Where can I contact them?
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I highly doubt he will answer back to you? 😕
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This at least deserves an award. Is this story supposed to be satire!? It's like a certain ex-president infiltrated fimfiction. No, it has to be a joke.
A bit too coy to be taken seriously. Too bad it's not the first of April. You just couldn't wait, could you?
This guy writes like he’s the next Chris-chan.
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Still fun to mess with him over it.