RASERIX VICEROY has had enough of the games, but instead of killing himself like a beta male, he joins the USMC to become a badass so powerful and relentless that even life itself fears him. Winding up in Equestria will put him to the test.
The author must be past the point of no return, because this is one of the worst looking stories I have ever seen be related to the military to ever exist on this site.
11062528 I completely agree. I've spoken a few times with my late Great-uncle Lou, who fought on Iwo Jima with the Marines in WW2, and he would be ashamed to see this were he still around to.
Personally, I believe this needs to be either A: Completely rewritten or B: Deleted.
That's just me, though.
The author should grow the fuck up regardless. No soldier would ever act like this in any rational unit of any rational military service.
EDIT- ALSO..."instead of killing himself like a beta male"?
This at least deserves an award. Is this story supposed to be satire!? It's like a certain ex-president infiltrated fimfiction. No, it has to be a joke.
Had played some Modern Warfare 2 and 3 in the past, so I knew what I was doing.
A bit too coy to be taken seriously. Too bad it's not the first of April. You just couldn't wait, could you?
That was it. I was going to kill all of these entitled fucks and figure it out myself because I had had enough of their pathetic antics. I jumped to my feet and pulled out an RPG-7. "Don't fucker with me fucker and I won't fuck with you fucker, but you just fucked with me, fuckers! I'VE HAD ENOUGH OF THE GAMES!!!!!!!" I aimed towards the middle of the room and fired. The big whistling grenade propelled itself immediately, but then it suddenly stopped. In-fact, everything stopped - the whole world had gone completely still.
Sheesh!!!! HOW many F-words are you gonna keep shouting in one sentence??!! Sure, I even say it sometimes, so I'm not completely innocent.
But not this much. It's like your trying to make a new dirty language out of cuss words?!
P.S. What are the FRICKIN Games are you referring too?! This ain't Call of Duty, Battlefield, or a simulation!!!
"Heh... yeah, because you won't be able to." Images of my fellow U.S. MARINES began to flow through my mind as they lent me their strength once more. I reached down and grabbed his sword, pulling it out of my own chest and then violently thrusting it into the fuckhead in-front of me.
Yeah right, keep telling yourself that. I think your own mind is becoming delusional from the massive blood loss. Because realistically, your fellow U.S. MARINES won't save your crazy ass.
" AAAAAAAAAAAARRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! " I yelled out mightily as I thrusted the cunt's own sword so far and up into his body. Blood poured out from my now open wound in my chest, and as the demigod gurgled on his own blood, time began to resume once more. The rocket propelled grenade exploded upon making contact with the stone floor, fucking up everything and everyone in the room in an orchestration so beautiful that it could be respected on a cosmic scale. I was sent flying backwards from the blast, and my body slammed into one of the walls before falling straight to the floor, where I weakly laughed among all the smoke and debris.
You call that "art"??!! HA! This is ART! (And it's even from a video game too. )
https://m.
https://m.
( And there is more where that came from. Owned by BedBananas. )
Anyway, I guess anypony is dead then too? Eh, don't care about them either. Luna was being a stupid, arrogant dumbass anyway for provoking a super insane, genocidal "marine" with a frickin RPG!!!!!
"Heh, so this is how it ends..." As I began to lose consciousness from my injury, my vision faded to darkness, and I felt the life drift away from my body. For once I felt at peace, knowing that cunt of a fuckhead had been killed as was every other entitled bastard of this strange land. I was happy to die in such a prophetic way. With my strength leaving me and my mind turning to fog, I reached for my ear-piece. "Command... Diamond Wolf is out."
Command would be actually glad that you are long gone from their radar.
( Don't take it too personally, just heavily criticizing your OC. )
Honestly dude, this is one of the worst fics that I've ever read. You need to get your facts straight about the military like some of the other commenters have said before writing anything like this. I've read military Equestria fics that are a lot better than this. Next time you decide to post something, make sure it's not trash first. And like I said, get your facts straight.
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The American sniper Kyle doesn't have Shit on the true OG sniper of Finland better known as the white death
The author must be past the point of no return, because this is one of the worst looking stories I have ever seen be related to the military to ever exist on this site.
11062528
I completely agree. I've spoken a few times with my late Great-uncle Lou, who fought on Iwo Jima with the Marines in WW2, and he would be ashamed to see this were he still around to.
Personally, I believe this needs to be either A: Completely rewritten or B: Deleted.
That's just me, though.
The author should grow the fuck up regardless. No soldier would ever act like this in any rational unit of any rational military service.
EDIT- ALSO..."instead of killing himself like a beta male"?
WTF. Author, delete this. Right the fuck now.
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This is like, the most obvious trollfic ever put to screen
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Couldn't have said it better myself.
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If the author considers this a legitimate fic, he is sorely mistaken.
I would like to have a talk with your parents. Where can I contact them?
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I highly doubt he will answer back to you? š
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This at least deserves an award. Is this story supposed to be satire!? It's like a certain ex-president infiltrated fimfiction. No, it has to be a joke.
A bit too coy to be taken seriously. Too bad it's not the first of April. You just couldn't wait, could you?
This guy writes like heās the next Chris-chan.
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Still fun to mess with him over it.
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Sorry about that, couldn't resist doing it
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Sheesh!!!! HOW many F-words are you gonna keep shouting in one sentence??!! Sure, I even say it sometimes, so I'm not completely innocent.
But not this much. It's like your trying to make a new dirty language out of cuss words?!
P.S. What are the FRICKIN Games are you referring too?! This ain't Call of Duty, Battlefield, or a simulation!!!
Yeah right, keep telling yourself that. I think your own mind is becoming delusional from the massive blood loss. Because realistically, your fellow U.S. MARINES won't save your crazy ass.
You call that "art"??!! HA! This is ART! (And it's even from a video game too. )
https://m.( And there is more where that came from. Owned by BedBananas. )
https://m.youtube.com/playlist?list=PL5IeDrDkTj2K50Yr46XojRsKjRREciv3i
Anyway, I guess anypony is dead then too? Eh, don't care about them either. Luna was being a stupid, arrogant dumbass anyway for provoking a super insane, genocidal "marine" with a frickin RPG!!!!!
Command would be actually glad that you are long gone from their radar.
( Don't take it too personally, just heavily criticizing your OC. )
Honestly dude, this is one of the worst fics that I've ever read. You need to get your facts straight about the military like some of the other commenters have said before writing anything like this. I've read military Equestria fics that are a lot better than this. Next time you decide to post something, make sure it's not trash first. And like I said, get your facts straight.
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By deep story, I hope you mean deep pile of shit, because thatās what this disgrace of a story is and nothing more.
11064227
And video games donāt ācorruptā people whatsoever. What are you high on ATM?
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I had to look up that name to get a sense of why he would enjoy this abomination. Lo and behold, the reason is worse than I thought.
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My mistake.