This was a awesome story, I hope you have a sequel planned.

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Yes I do.

mi ha un pò deluso il finale

Who stole hope? I will murder whoever did this.

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Take a guess.

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nightmare moon

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Nope. I won't spoil anything until I start working on the sequel.

brb I'm finna read this real quick.

Why isn't there a tragedy tag?

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Honestly? Oversight on my part. Thanks for pointing that out, I'll fix it now.

Finally managed to read the final chapter there.

Starlight held the still spasming Twilight close to her chest as the tie tunnel opened, pulling them both in. In the Castle of Friendship, Spike, Twilight and Starlight emerged from the time tunnel and slammed into the friendship Map.

Since it seems like the original Spike got spat out of the portal, was he in some void and conscious there? Given how he's part of the original timeline but displaced due to confusion stuff?

Wonder how he felt with what happened to Twilight there but he wasn't there for her due to being lost in some void or something due to time-travel thing?

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Still though..

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Kinda for him no perceptible time would have passed.

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So he was basically erased and "dead" till Twilight and Starlight came back?

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When Twilight got blasted through the wall in the time tunnel, it created for the tiniest measurable increment, a paradox, which the universe then over-corrected, making the spell partially rebound. Spike got suspended in the normal time flow, while Starlight and Twilight were sent into the over-corrected timeline, the latter showing up a few weeks before the former and getting captured. Just remember timey-wimey wibbly-wobbly.

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Really prefer he was still conscious and moving or so.
Like a "meanwhile what he was doing" kind of thing. Like what thoughts he be having since he's stuck in there and not there for Twilight like that(especially with what happened).

Just wished Twilight actually reacted that her number-one assistant was gone like that. Not like off-screen though.
Given there's no reaction at all, its like Spike was just gotten rid of like nothing there.

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Considering that this was a Starlight-centric story, I'll leave it up to the reader as to what Twilight was thinking in the long hours between torture sessions. Remember that Starlight was in that timeline for a couple of days before being brought face-to-face with Twilight. Also we see the external factors of being tortured, implanted with a tantabus and cursed did to Twilight, but we don't see the internal machinations of her mind.

If there's enough readers calling for it, I'll do a side story of Twilight between the time she crash-landed in that timeline and when she was reunited with Starlight.

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Still I feel like Spike really got shafted here.

Also, maybe asking the question might see if other readers are interested about that or something.

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the torture instrument was stuck into twilight's "frog"

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Could you show me which sentences that I need to edit? I think I'm overlooking them.

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The lavender unicorn smiled viciously. Levitating a long, thin needle in a magenta field, she waved in front of Starlight. "We'll start slow and gentle." She tapped the needle against Starlight's frog . "I'll begin inserting this into that one's frog."

Starlight braced herself as the lavender unicorn walked over to Twilight. "Be strong Twilight!", she whimpered.

Twilight hissed in pain as the long, thin needle was slowly pushed into her frog. "Alicorn physiology is such an amazing thing.", the lavender unicorn said cruelly, "I must thank you my queens for allowing me to study this one thoroughly." Twilight groaned in pain as the lavender unicorn wiggled the needle in her frog. Pulling the needle out slowly, the lavender unicorn began dragging the tip of the needle across Twilight's frog on her other hoof.

Twilight yelped softly as the lavender unicorn poked her frog quickly. A trickle of blood came from the lavender alicorn's lips as bit down on it to try and keep from crying out in pain as the needle was cruelly shoved into her frog until it hit bone. Starlight sobbed as she stared on in horror, unable to close her eyes.

Chapter 2

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From what I've seen, I needed to expand the description on a sentence. If I'm completely missing something, could you mark it with an underline please?

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No, I'm just wondering what do you mean by "Twilight's Frog"

like, i don't think hurting a pet of Twilight's is exactly torture

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The frog is the soft meaty part of an equine's hoof.
https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Frog_(horse_anatomy)#:~:text=The%20frog%20is%20a%20part,the%20bottom%20of%20the%20hoof.

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Aaaaaaaah, thanks.

Over the same seven months Twilight slowly lost her fight against the tantabus that was attacking her mind. One night as she lay sleeping fitfully on her bed, here eyes snapped open, glowing an unnatural purple, dark swirls of magic came from the corners of her eyes, the shadows extended from all the corners of the room to merge with her coat, turning it a dark purple. On that night Twilight Sparkle fell asleep and something much darker woke up in her place. An evil smile graced her lips as her teeth became sharp fangs, her pupils became cat-like slits. Her coat was dark purple with splotches of black staining it like soot, her feathers were a gradient of dark purple to black. A purplish-black aura swirled around her horn as she lit her magic and levitated a couch.

Nightmare Moon: Purple edition

Starlight woke up in the hallway smelling iron in her nose. She scrambled into the nursery, seeing Hope's bassinet was empty and the window was smashed in from the outside, she screamed in horror. That night all across Equestria, mares joined Starlight in their screams of horror as they discovered their foals stolen.

That’s funny
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