"Nobody is perfect. We all had our victories and defeats… You learn from defeats, and with them, victories are obtained."
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This story is a sequel to The Night of Truth
(A Christmas Special)
Both Gallus and Spike had a difficult childhood and, that's why on this very special night, Prince Alfred will give them both a wonderful gift that neither the griffin nor the dragon will forget.
Part of the "Alfredverse".
Thanks to Bronycommander for helping with the story's editing.
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Loved it!
10371462
Glad to know it.
You do what I do. You see slice of life moments with your characters that are fantastic scenes and they make great short stories.
And this is another example of a great short story. Well done.
Here is something to keep in consideration. When you have one characters life portrayed in snippets, you have to be careful that you portray a wider range of situations and emotional feel. All three stories that this poor bastard is in are all rather depressing. While we as readers realize that this isn't all the guys experienced and that these are only small scenes in a long life, its human nature to judge based on what we see.
And wither its fair or not its easy to conclude the guys lived a miserable life. I really like this character and I would like to see more of him. You've created an interesting world just from three shorts and thats hard to do. I think you should continue doing shorts with this character, but you really should consider adding some victories, successes, some lighter moments. Im sure he has had them.
The Monk
“I mean, you just seem to walk in random directions most of the time. How do you ever get to where you're going?" "Oh, that's easy," said Candy with a smile, ”I just make the place I end up, the place I wanted to be all along." There was an extended moment of silence. ”That... that's absolutely brilliant," -Trick Question
Have you really had a problem with this?
Most stories that get hostility like that have themes that are somewhat controversial. Usually religion.
I haven't seen anything worthy of malice in any of your stories so far. They are fairly well written, well paced, and as unique as you can make a story about ponies. Then again, I shouldn't be surprised by anything these days. Based on current events in the US, Im starting to firmly believe most of the population is sniffing glue.
Now Im on to your multi chapter story. Lets see how that one is.
The Monk
“To say that Twilight Sparkle went bugfuck would be like saying the Incredible Hulk had some mild anger management issues.” -DustTraveller
10387904
Yeah, I do have it since people only like or dislike the stories without reading it first.
10387904
You should have seen me once. Got a story that got disliked by it's scenario, that is from a game and I advised not to take it seriously
YEET! X3
10402927
A promise is a promise.
10402932
Indeed =3
10402933
I felt like I needed to do this since I asked you to give me a character idea and you gave it, so I had to make your character appear.
Great Job!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! One of the best Gallus and Spike fanfic I read
10503975
Thank you, I appreciate it. Any deeper feedback you can give?
10503977
Not at the moment But I sure give it when I have the chance
10503981
Very well; also, if you want to, you may go and check the other stories of the "Alfredverse".
- The Night of Truth.
- The Weeping Winter.
- The Gala's Night.
10503985
I sure will
My initial read is done.
Hopefully, you can expect my review to be up before too long.
10717243
Glad to know it, thanks!
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I forgot to read this story last year... but I remembered when the Hearth's Warming season came around this time! This story is great!