A young man is fatally hit by a truck before his time and is visited by a presence that offers him a new life elsewhere. He chooses Equestria (as you do), asks for special powers (as you do), gets them, and exercises his right to use them. It's tough for him, you know, being the most powerful being next to the gods themselves when they won't just roll over and give him what he wants. He can overpower Princess Celestia AND Luna at the same time, of COURSE he has to be in charge!
Will he learn the value of restraint? Probably not, but this other guy's got a solution.
A HiE story that might be a commentary. Maybe. I just want to have some fun guys. Cover art subject to change whenever, I dunno, it's just a stock photo with the watermark for the meme.
Featured on July 15th, 2020. Wow, I'm surprised, but thanks guys.
The extraneous ellipses are the icing on the cake.
You hear about anti-Sues, but none quite to this degree. Lovely bit of urine extraction. Thank you for it.
I've not read anything but the description and single chapter title, but 'The beatings will continue' is inevitably continued by my brain with 'until morale improves'.
Edit: After reading I feel that if morale is replaced with morals the saying remains accurate.
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It's kinda impressive in that regard.
Like... yikes.
~Skeeter The Lurker
What make me think that this narrator's first name is Spawn?
"no one would abject to him slaying"
"no one would object to him slaying"?
I'm not sure "Manticores", "Diamond Dogs", and "Changelings" should be capitalized.
Or, a bit later, "Human".
Or, much later, "Ponies".
"to nip it in the bud!"
"to nip them in the bud!"?
"of Equestria!" He growled"
"of Equestria!" he growled"?
"eighth guy whose tried to pull"
"eighth guy who's tried to pull"?
"villain group) than anyone native"
"villain group) native"?
"An unknown amount of Equestrias"
"An unknown number of Equestrias"?
"thankfully not embarrassing most of the time except for "Tony's", which I often nearly died laughing when I remembered it"
"thankfully not embarrassing most of the time... but then there was Tony's, which I often nearly died laughing from when I remembered it"
I don't know if you'll want to use all or part of that, given it's a fairly extensive bit of changes (some of which might be to style). Still, I thought I'd suggest it.
"to that scene of Avatar vs. Black Wolf in Wizards. The Magic Trick."
...This is in the author's note, which I don't usually go into for error spotting, but I thought I'd mention that I have basically no idea what you're trying to say with that string of words.
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You missed a classic, then. Go watch the whole thing. I knew *right* what the author meant immediately. Kids today. (tch, tch) No respect for the classics. (Spoiler clip)
(Wizards (1977))
So you mock Gary Stu tropes by... making a Guy who is smarter, stronger, morally superior to other humans and is friends with Luna? I think you missed the point a little.
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...Huh. Thanks. :D
...I think that there might still be something off in the grammar of that bit of text, but I do, at least, now know what the reference was to, and it was funny. :D
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God that movie was such an acid trip. So was Fritz the Cat but hell, who am I to complain. I loved em both!
Estee brought me here.
*tips helmet*
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Gonna repeat the author's note and say "when you stare into the abyss". Even if I extended the story Camper's powers ARE a cop out deliberately designed to no-sell whatever bullshit powers the Sue/Stu in question comes up with and there's a certain story featuring Donte from that DMC "reboot" in mind for ribbing. I can only defend him by pointing out that he doesn't have the rest of the world bowing to his whims like your average Sue or Stu.
As far as the meeting with Luna goes, admittedly it's tacked on just so I can say there's a pony in this story. Maybe I could have made them NOT actually meet, but I was tired and wanted to push this out so the best I came up with was "well they talk but he doesn't jerk off to her". Being friends with one or both Princesses imo is fine. I'm jabbing at how out of five HiE stories I've looked at in the past year, four of them ship the MC with Luna to some extent. Luna shipping is fine, do whatever the hell you want, but I saw a trend that warranted "urine extraction" as someone has said.
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I'll give everything here a tweak, but the capitalization of the names of species (Human, Griffon, Changeling, Pony) is valid in terms of style so long as it carries through for all of them.
Edit: Fixed and made tweaks, even to the author's note lol. I'll drop the upper case of manticores because they're not sapient.
I was about to downvote the sh!t out of this until I realized it was a kick in the b@lls to all the horny losers to inflict their fantasies on the readers.
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Your profile pic fits the comment and I think it's funny.
Are spawnkilling campers any better than an isekai protagonist though?
...the answer is yes, because isekai protagonists are a whole 'nother unsavory breed that nobody would miss.
I like it. Keep up the good work.
The real monster is T̴̤̜͊r̴͇̩̩̾͝͝͝u̶̻͇̺͌̄c̴̭̗̠̈́͛̉̀k̴͈̯͉͍͆̕ͅ he only runs over the worst of us
Only on a re read do I realize I missed the whole fucking point.
You clever fucker.
~Skeeter The Lurker
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Or are we the ones rolling around T̴̤̜͊r̴͇̩̩̾͝͝͝u̶̻͇̺͌̄c̴̭̗̠̈́͛̉̀k̴͈̯͉͍͆̕ͅ ‘s wheel? What goes around...
If I were to be isekai'd I would ask for infinite organ durability, for that kind of immortality that being a lazy piece of shit can't overcome. That's all I'd really want besides maybe being tall.
At first, I thought Estee was trolling you until I read this. This is a work of art.
And here I'm wondering where the guys that are reincarnated end up on... what's-his-name's list.
fuck T̴̤̜͊r̴͇̩̩̾͝͝͝u̶̻͇̺͌̄c̴̭̗̠̈́͛̉̀k̴͈̯͉͍͆̕ͅ
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Remember the rules about media: good news don't sell as much and are not worth reporting. I'm sure there are plenty of good person who just ask to be background pony #4200 and live a quiet peaceful life full of friendship.
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Thanks, and no problem. :)
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Likewise!
I think we need more, but it's already fantastic as a one shot.
Let's be honest, the gun is a courtesy
Now a bat or hefty crowbar, is when the lesson just isn't sinking in fast enough
Failing that, the almighty chancla or their dad's belt
Ah, Truck-kun. Someone really ought to do something about that.
I fucking love this. Everything always follows “the human goes to a equestria, human gets powers, human becomes god king emperor” shtick. This is a breath of fresh air.
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All-knowing while being Unknowable. The highest station on the Tree of Life. Beyond good, evil, order, and chaos. T̴̤̜͊r̴͇̩̩̾͝͝͝u̶̻͇̺͌̄c̴̭̗̠̈́͛̉̀k̴͈̯͉͍͆̕ͅ can be found everywhere and nowhere, in everything and nothing. T̴̤̜͊r̴͇̩̩̾͝͝͝u̶̻͇̺͌̄c̴̭̗̠̈́͛̉̀k̴͈̯͉͍͆̕ͅ knows no joy, sorrow, pleasure, remorse, love, nor hate, for It is all of those and none of them. He who crosses Its path shall be smote such that the weave of the firmament is shaken so that the heavens themselves will be forced to bend lest they break.
T̴̤̜͊r̴͇̩̩̾͝͝͝u̶̻͇̺͌̄c̴̭̗̠̈́͛̉̀k̴͈̯͉͍͆̕ͅ peers down from upon Its station, looking upon us human beings, and sees us as we see ants. If one falls beneath Its wheel amidst Its pan-dimensional writhing the result is of no consequence to T̴̤̜͊r̴͇̩̩̾͝͝͝u̶̻͇̺͌̄c̴̭̗̠̈́͛̉̀k̴͈̯͉͍͆̕ͅ.
T̴̤̜͊r̴͇̩̩̾͝͝͝u̶̻͇̺͌̄c̴̭̗̠̈́͛̉̀k̴͈̯͉͍͆̕ͅ feels all and nothing. T̴̤̜͊r̴͇̩̩̾͝͝͝u̶̻͇̺͌̄c̴̭̗̠̈́͛̉̀k̴͈̯͉͍͆̕ͅ is all and nothing. T̴̤̜͊r̴͇̩̩̾͝͝͝u̶̻͇̺͌̄c̴̭̗̠̈́͛̉̀k̴͈̯͉͍͆̕ͅ already knows where you are. T̴̤̜͊r̴͇̩̩̾͝͝͝u̶̻͇̺͌̄c̴̭̗̠̈́͛̉̀k̴͈̯͉͍͆̕ͅ does not care if you cannot escape It. T̴̤̜͊r̴͇̩̩̾͝͝͝u̶̻͇̺͌̄c̴̭̗̠̈́͛̉̀k̴͈̯͉͍͆̕ͅ is already there.
Aww, for a second, reading the short description I thought that the human was bringing a truck with him to equestria... Guess not. Still I'll give it a read.
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Holy shit you may be onto something.
HiE protagonist who is a truck driver gets introduced to classic freak storm stuff and so he and his semi barrel through a wild magic portal and into Equestria. What adventures can they possibly get up to? A lot if you think about it.
So here's an idea, based on one of my own probably-terrible-tropeish-ideas for if you do decide to continue. Basically, same initial premise, only this time the guy who spawns before camper is capable of reweaving the physical fabric of but doesn't actually want anything to do with basically anyone and just live in the Everfree, undisturbed. I dunno, might make a shorter chapter, might just be all kinds of suck in your/everyone's opinion.
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I have been playing snowrunner since it came out in April and I keep getting mental flashes of a potential xover fic. In fact I have a bit of premise set up already if you're interested.
I'd love to see more Camper vs. Gary shenanigans. I could not stop laughing. Loved seeing the classic HiE tropes get wrecked.
I LOVE this, but it also reminds me why people hate bronies, because people like gary do exist. I'd definitely like to see more though. Maybe it could be a mini series.
SAO is shit though?, like the first part was fine but the rest was just a downward spiral off shit
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You do wonder why after fist time they get killed by Camper , they dont just wish bullet immunity. T̴̤̜͊r̴͇̩̩̾͝͝͝u̶̻͇̺͌̄c̴̭̗̠̈́͛̉̀k̴͈̯͉͍͆̕ͅ is the unfeeling agent of chaos , "kindly spirit" is the true evil, they are knowingly enabeling this.
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I'd read that
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Progressive, an Asuna focused LN, is pretty good, actually fairly well written. People say Acilization has gotten better....then the author had to add attempted tentacle rape
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https://www.fimfiction.net/story/221804/highway-502
Not exactly what you asked, but...
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As said in the story, Camper's ability is literally to teleport to a Stu's location and nullify their speshul powers, this would include bullet immunity.
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agreed, though the shit about between them were still shit
Hhmmm. My only complaint is the lack of overkill used against the Gary Stu but eh we can't get everything we want.
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Yeah I mean, they're not the best written couple, but they're not the worst. At least, after they got out of the game, they tried to find out more about the real person behind the avatar and connect
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the concept was alright though the execution was lacking, i found it lacking overall and i still think its shit but thats personal preferences perhaps
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Yeah, plus the fact that, Progressive aside, the author ain't the best writer. I liked Alternative as well. Seriously SAO creator, can you NOT included attempted rape for one season?
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yeah, prob some weird Japanese inferiority complex with how restrained their society is
Since you are already asking:
"He already knew one way or another than Princess Luna would fall" should have that instead.
Good story!
I enjoyed reading it.
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What about the ability to nullify nullification fields?