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RayneTheSkunk


The Young Six are a blessing to this very earth

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A new School Year is starting, and despite everything he's done in the name of harmony Gallus isn't sure if he can live up to the ideals of friendship. Not when there's still this gnawing angry voice in his head.

You're no better than any other griffon.


The first story in the New School of Friendship continuity

Chapters (5)
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Now things are getting interesting!

“What the budgie was that?!”

Ha! I'm gonna have to write that one down, because not only is it clever and makes sense for griffon to utter, the mental picture I have of Gallus actually saying it amuses me greatly. :twilightsmile:

Looks like going to examine that blue flash led to their inevitable downfall after all. :trollestia:

So...what exactly caused Gallus's summer vacation plans to fall through? I assume due to the explosion last chapter, or related to it, but a clearer explanation of why would be nice, even if there's not really that much more to explain.

The whole concept for this actually reminds me of a comic I've been following for a couple of years, called "Bad Machinery." Same sort of premise--follows the adventures of a group of British school kids, alternating between the normal dramas of their everyday life and them attempting to investigate the odd and mysterious happenings taking place in and around their hometown.

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Look forward to getting those awnsers friend.

“Oh I’ve missed you and Smolder so much! Everyone at the hive is so nice. I need your snark back in my life.”

I guess Pharynx wasn't available to hang with, then. There aren't many 'lings more snarkier than him, after all. :rainbowlaugh:

“Well see you soon, sandbar! Find smolder and Yona for us so they can see my sword!”

“Oh, nothing too special. I told everyling stories about the school. Helped king Thorax with hive plans..."

Feels like there's a missing line between these two lines...

The slender, blue dragon grasped the mic as if it were prey. Some creature whose throat she could crush in an instant. "Ahem." Every creature was silent. "BE NICE TO THEM!"

Succinct as always, Ember.

Mm-hmm, mm-hmm, mm-hmm, it's all starting to come together now...I can see why you held off explaining earlier. :twilightsmile:

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thanks for the catch. On the missing line. A whole mini paragraph just disappeared from my document without anyone noticing.

And to be honest. I actually forgot about Pharynx.

To clear up genre. Its more slice of life than it is mystery. The characters live their normal day to day school lives, but there is an ongoing mystery as they live it. The characters put effort towards solving a mystery but it isn't their primary focus.

So, it's basically just Scooby Doo: Mystery Incorporated?

Intriguing. I was a bit iffy when suddenly weapons and fighting classes, before the characters pointed out how weird it was.
Also, I love the illustrations.

“Ocellus.” Smolder gripped Ocellus shoulder, and gave her a shake. “You’re stressing yourself out. If you spend a whole semester like this, you’re gonna turn into a conspiracy theorist.”

Ocellus the conspiracy theorist. That could be...amusing. :rainbowlaugh:

Yeah, Gallus. What does that mean?

What, indeed? :trixieshiftright:

Y'know, I completely didn't think Rainbow might have suffered injuries that day too until now. Hmm.

I knew you were tweaking the past chapters to suit the changes in direction, so I reviewed them in brief, only to find the changes were pretty minor, all said, but it was a nice refresher regardless. :twilightsmile:

Love how these pictures turned out.

The beans in Cleave’s mouth started to burn. Gallus wasn’t sure whether that was an answer but the smell of roasting coffee was pleasant.

Ew, no--personal opinion here, but I frankly hate the smell of roasting coffee. But it works out, seeing I don't like coffee in of itself either, but that's neither here nor there. :rainbowlaugh:

“What a tool,” Pierce grumbled.

“Agreed.”

Since Cleave seems to be the non-talking sort, I assume its Gallus who said that last line, but as it was a couple lines since he last spoke, it's not super clear, so I would advise adding something to clarify who's speaking there, just to cover all the bases. :twilightsmile:

If it couldn’t help him see a bomb beneath his own feet then it probably wasn’t going to help him with anything else.

To be fair, it just might be that he's not trained to recognize differing forms of magic. Like, how I could see two different types of trees, but still not recognize that they're different types, just that they're "trees."

However, possibly with some training, one might be able to change that... :trixieshiftright:

“Gallus.” Her energetic voice so dull and slow, it made his feathers crawl. “You know what? Don’t bother showing up to class. Go find a replacement.”

“Uh. Why prof—”

“You don’t need it.” The sound of hooves echoed till they drifted further and further away.

Ow-ow-ouch, that was below the belt, Rainbow. And, I would argue, uncalled for. If anything, the opposite's true--for the both of you. :ajbemused:

“The Diversity Club, it’s what all the upperclassman called you.”

I suppose that is a little more original than "Young Six." :rainbowlaugh:

Hope Smolder's doing okay. I hate that I'm going to have to wait until next chapter to find out. :twilightoops:

Otherwise, a fairly routine day at the School of Friendship it seems. I kinda wish the show did more of that kind of thing, honestly. :twilightsmile:

“If anyone will prevent the tragic end caused by my own greed, it’d probably be you, but you don’t get an epic legend about you without a tragic end.

Perseus would disagree. OG Perseus not Percy Jackson.

I love these illustrations. It's the first time I've seen a fic on this website actually do that. Well done.

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