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Orion? With Luna?
Not quite a deep cut, but I like what this implies.
Great story so far!!!! I really look forward to reading more of it in the future!!!
I’m looking forward to more of this
This feels rushed.
so how long until the cultist mess this up for her/ruin this for her? Back then Luna never had things constantly going her way and according to this story they're the most likely to mess things up.
When is the next Chapter
The only question I need an answer for is was they feeding him flowers when they said pony diet.
Can ponies even eat flowers?
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They would feed him things like bread, cheese, pastries and the sorts. If they tried to give him a sandwich that had flowers in it, he would have turned his nose up at it.
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Considering that Twilight's favorite snack is a daffodil and daisy sandwich...
mind magic is still on the table, just saying. One simply memory erasing spell ala men in black would do wonders here.
On another note, nice to see Orion has some friends and that thestrals and bat ponies continue to have the best names of all ponies.
Few spelling errors I noticed, and its hard to tell exactly how much time passed but overall great chapter. That Griffon girl seems to be a major jerk lol. And I can't wait for Luna's reaction to her son being called a "thing".
I beieve that Slanderous pony is part of the cult that wants Luna either dead or banished
Well too much Grammar Errors.....hurts my Eyes!!!!
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Wasn’t orion one of the giants who joined Artemis with the hunt and almost made her break her Vow of chastity
Prefer the night to the fat?
I know Celestia likes her cake, but even then, that's going a bit overboard.
Hey, I just wanted to say that I love your story although the chapters take awhile I’m always excited to see when a new one has popped up. Your writing makes the wait worth it and I can’t wait to read more of this story in the future!!!
This needs some good spell checking. I thought orion was being a little bit of a idiot but then i remembered that he is five years old here and is still a child
A wholesome chapter overall with a things that Luna is going to need to deal with later.
Seriously celestia couldn't verbally beat down the tabloid pony... this just seems to be getting a little bit silly on how they let things go. You would think that they would be way better at handling ponies like that.
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Yeah, sorry about that; the truth of the matter is, is that I'm lazy, and what should take about a little over a month takes a lot longer. I'm glad you are enjoying the story, though.
looks like they didn't expect Luna to have a particular set of skills when they decided to take her son.
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No doubt! Don't F*** with momma Luna.
Second i'm worried that Orion might end up the Nightmare's new target and vessel. I mean did you see what he did to that perverted Stallion. He unleshed all his hate, hurt, and fear of losing his mother and channeled it into powerful dark magic. I'm just saying and that the Nightmare might jump ship and try to possess Orion instead of Luna for that fact alone, and because he is young and might be easier for the Nightmare to corrupt and eventually possess Orion!
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if luna can be stopped form turning into nightmare moon by Orion then logically it should be possible for it to work other way around. Unless some stuff happens to prevent it from happening which is proably going to be amazing to read.
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True but we won't know til the author tells us
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at that point I'd be hoping for a sequel, looking up the author's other work I can see which direction the sequel could go in.
Update sometime soon please
Did Arcane Ward just throw Orion a wand? Guess i'll have to wait until the next chapter to find out. On another note if you plan to add romance into Orion's life when the time comes i want Galatea to be Orion's love interest and he be her's, i really love the idea of Orion and Galatea being lovers
Interesting 🤔
Update anytime soon?
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So long as I don't get hit with another wave of writer's block, the next chapter should be out before the end of February.
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Ok
"parid-fire" i think you meant "rapid-fire". Thought i let you know that was a spelling error. Also i'm glad you're back i was afraid this story was going to die. I love this story and i look forward to you're next chapter!
Also i have to tell you Galatea i'm one of the few who actually likes the idea that you and Orion being romantically involved. As you two would make a great couple. So beat me, claw me and bite me i will always be rooting for you two to become a couple. Also Galatea what better way to protect Orion then being by his side as his Marefriend /Girlfriend or whatever you call two Griffons dating
This is an intriguing beginning, but there's a few misplaced commas and incorrect word usage.
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Move the comma to before "Luna".
I'm sure I've missed a couple, but these two stood out to me.
And things were going so well.
Missing space.
This should be two words.
You either need a connecting word after the comma, or to replace the comma with a period.
be
cloaks
About
robed
scout
was
This should have a period instead of a colon.
Missed capitalization.
paste
of
how
strikes
deflected
was
evenly and two
You also need a comma between "matched" and "the".
You're also suffering a bit from Lavender Unicorn Syndrome with your overuse of "the night princess."
Issues aside, the story is quite entertaining.
If the ponies find out about Orion's magic and what he did to the foalcon it will only fuel their fear of him.
There's a whole slew of spelling and grammar mistakes in this chapter. I'd go through and edit it.
I figured Celestia was going to banish Luna and would take care of Orion out of guilt.
I’m really stoked to see this story is still getting updated! And I’m looking forward to seeing more chapters in the future!
People who make mistake in war, die. Especially if you make foolish mistakes. In this situation, nothing of value was lost.
Monk
Interesting start, I think I will follow
I'm liking this story alot, but you really need a proof reader. I'm able to read it but afew times even I was stumped
Interesting chapter, is Orion autistic? Loving this story so far
Good chapter, on a side note you know how Alicorns are the sender form of pony's? Would Nephalem be the sender form of humans? A random thought...
Good chapter!
Progress on next chapter?