Luna, frustrated and angry at Equestria is on the brink of losing herself, but an unpredictable encounter will help her recover and cope.
Orion? With Luna?Not quite a deep cut, but I like what this implies.
9582011Wasn’t orion one of the giants who joined Artemis with the hunt and almost made her break her Vow of chastity
This is an intriguing beginning, but there's a few misplaced commas and incorrect word usage.
Seeing his princess' silent command her saluted her
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Reacting faster then she could think Luna,
Move the comma to before "Luna".
I'm sure I've missed a couple, but these two stood out to me.
Interesting start, I think I will follow
Orion? With Luna?
Not quite a deep cut, but I like what this implies.
9582011
Wasn’t orion one of the giants who joined Artemis with the hunt and almost made her break her Vow of chastity
This is an intriguing beginning, but there's a few misplaced commas and incorrect word usage.
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Move the comma to before "Luna".
I'm sure I've missed a couple, but these two stood out to me.
Interesting start, I think I will follow