A date with destiny

When Starlight surprisingly says yes to Trixie’s date, she has to make sure everything is absolutely perfect.

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ShrimpShogun

ShrimpShogun #1 · Apr 21st, 2019 · 1 · ·

I noticed a small handful of grammatical errors that might be worth reviewing, but really cute otherwise.

Crowman265

Crowman265 #2 · Apr 23rd, 2019 · 1 · ·

the picture is adorable

Beau_Dodson

Beau_Dodson #3 · May 1st, 2019 · · ·

"You're just asking the mare of your dreams on a the date", really? You could've gotten an editor to proofread this thing. I'll gladly do it for you if you want. Just DM me. But that wasn't the only mistake you made. I can't give this story a like simply because the grammatical aberrations put me off. :/

Doubt

Doubt #4 · Aug 6th, 2019 · · ·

It has its moments, but mostly this story is too shallow and too riddled with mistakes for me to have enjoyed reading it.

TerraZeal

TerraZeal #5 · Sep 14th, 2019 · 2 · ·

Cute! My ex-husband once ordered cinnamon strudel for us both on an early date before I'd got to the restaurant...he later found out I was allergic to cinnamon. I didn't get sick because I could tell what it was, but the smell made me icky and we had to leave early. ALWAYS ask if your date is allergic to any foods! Hilarious.

TheLonelyDraconequus