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You know what sucks? This story reminded me how I can't even piss anywhere other than a toilet. If I do need to piss without a toilet nothing would come out. None at all. Nothing
What would happen if they had sex while peeing?
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Some couples like to utilize watersports in their foreplay, and it is often the peeing event that leads up to the sex, but some couples willingly pee on each other, during or not during sex as part of the fetish. Hopes that clears things up a little.
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Like marking territory?
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Some see it that way, yes, but some see the action as a turn on and a way of displaying affection. It's a fetish, but the way a couple includes it in their sex life varies based on individual.
What makes this chapter great is the fact that it uses my ship.
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I'm not entirely sure what that meant, buuut I think I might not want to find out.
I need more.
I'd like to offer my congrats for writing a very decent story (chapter)despite it being about 3/4 narration. The biggest strength this story had was less focus on how extreme or kinky the fetish itself is, and more on the emotional state of the focal character as they're experiencing it; it's something that a LOT of fetish fuel kinks don't do, which is why I tend to loathe them. It feels like you weren't trying too hard to impress people by coming up with odd ways to describe the situation and visuals, and that's actually what impressed me: simplicity can be very effective, since we as readers already know what gets us off and don't need any crazy ways of describing it.
One small critique I would like to offer is perhaps try to make future chapters less heavy with narration and more on action and conversation. While internal insight is lovely and extremely important, it sometimes can get overbearing. Also while most of us are here to see the visual descriptions of the pee coming out, I think it would also help to describe in more detail the vessel it's coming out of, i.e., Twilight'd vagina (the color, the shape, the size, the clitoris, etc). Little changes like that can add a whole lot more for your readers.
And if you're taking requests, I would be thrilled if you were to write a chapter for Celestia, preferably one without desperation and more intentional urination somewhere other than a toilet similar to how Twilight did (also, without Luna, or at least very little focus on her; she'd be best suited for her own chapter imo).
Anyway, thank you very much for giving us this story, and thank you for reading my critique of it. Good luck with future chapters.
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I'll try to keep that in check. Another anonymous user requested for Celestia as well. I'll most likely answer to his request which hopefully will at the same time satisfy yours.
Thank you for the comment! Given that I'm very much used to first person narrating I tend to overdescribe things...
It updates... to a missing chapter? What happened to the new chapter.
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Sorry for the confusion.
The thing is I was being stupid and I tried to press the edit button but my shaky hands hit publish instead to an unfinished chapter. I'm sorry but I wasn't intending to false bump the story, I simply misclicked due to probably low blood sugar level...
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Makes sense. Mistakes happen, but that does mean a new chapter is in progress which makes me happy. So no worries.
so hot, love reading your ws stories <3!!!
insanely hot <3<3 wish Celly had peed in midair tho, would've been even hotter!!
actually pretty hot <3<3 love lazy wetting!!
You better not make us wait a whole month again.
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Ah well I don't think I'll be. A lot of real life things were plaguing me these past weeks and a major event was going on so it wasn't my choice. But don't worry, the next chapter is actually already about 25% through.
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Ok, good. And I never did say it was your fault so, yeah.
Love iiiit <3<3<3 I wish my namesake was more sexual about it though...
Now I totally wanna see a Frosty x Fluttershy fic!
You know, I think would actually be interesting to see what was going on with Trixie.
I was wondering if you’d end up doing Spike.
Least he didn't mark someone.
*pokes the story with a stick*
Can you please write one for Luna? I would love to read it.
When I was like 4, I had a tendency to believe that if it was raining, the world was your toilet. But come on, it's better then in the pool. Hey, you should write one about that!
Well it’s been over a year so I don’t know.
That was great, there’s not much WS of Gallus so 12 points for your effort.
That depiction of peeing was also mostly accurate, you should do more male character chapters if you ever decided to come back.
Absolute gem and wonderful romantic lazy kinky love time ♥