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8652070
Thanks! The 3 got cleaved off somehow!
8652079
How to find db post?
8652143
I don't know! .
Is it wrong that I sympathize with Gypsum in this story?
I may never know why but I had a thing for Delta the first time i saw art of her. So I am ALL for more clop with her.
Well, that was another fun read! You really don't disappoint clops, you know that?
Though, I feel like a jerk for saying this, but I found numerous grammar errors in this story, including a part where you said "hand" instead of hoof.
But regardless of that, this was still a fun read. Delta acting like a bona-fide MILF, that's just UNF!
And a bashful male character. That was quite adorable.
That romp they had though... yeah. You still got it, clops
That one little thing Delta yelled in her own throes of pleasure. Nothing suspicious at all. Nope.
It seems like she realized quickly that these quick romps will just not do anymore.
And how she tried to let Gyp down gently, that was a nice little touch.
Overall, 6/9 (if you don't see the joke in there then you should not write clop), enjoyed thoroughly!
8652143
just put "derpibooru.org/XXX" where XXX is the number into your browser's address bar
You should get permission from Shino to make a happy end for Delta. Kinda like a small story where things pick up for her.
Well, this certainly got my landing gear down. Hur hur~
8652558
I second this
8652494
Fixed the hoof bit! Thanks pahna!
Half of this fic was written on a plane on my phone. So I may have borked a few things without noticing.
So glad you liked it! And you picked up on that one little bit... Fantastic!
great story as always
Another fic so soon!? Yoy're spoiling us all!
actually, that animation really is something and well deserved a tribute
I keep being impressed by the consistency of Delta's character across every fic and piece of art, it's incredible how everyone got her down so on point. Gyp is also a surprisingly round character oor the role of "random pony at a bar" in a one-shot fic, I wouldn't be surprised to see him pop up somewhere else as well.
I can't tell where xRei put his hooves, this only raises the hype for his upcoming fic!
"discombobulation" is my new favourite English word.
Well... damn, this got my heart pumping all of Delta's dialogue is just my fetish. This was a really nice read dude, and aside from some hand/feet to hoof things andthatlittleyellaboutJetduringthesex, this was really nicely done!
I had to stop reading for a moment to be sad. Excellent story though! You do Shino's OCs proud, man.
remove the comma
again
breath
growl ?
hmm one or the other here.
don't know what you meant but torpor is definitely not it.
Probably not. No one likes to wake up in the morning with a man or woman with fucking beer breath breathed all over their face, regardless how good the sex is. You just...no, you don't do that to a guest. That's rude. Fuck off with that shit.
8652717
I third this
Why do I feel like she wasn’t telling Jet to bite her because she got some but lost in a fantasy that Jet was rutting her and called poor Gypsum “Jet.”
There really seems to be a lot of longer on Delta’s part. Maybe for something she can have, but is afraid she can’t because she feels she doesn’t deserve it.
One continuity question: since this was told from Gypsum’s POV when did this happen? After NYE? Between Delta taking off with the journal but before NYE?
8654834
He's the construction pony mentioned in NYE. It's before then.
I don't know if Delta even realizes she said Jet's name.
8655010
Oh, son of a gun! I missed that detail!
That's what I was thinking as well. So wrapped up in pleasure and calling out his name because being with him is want she wants subconsciously.
Others have mentioned it, and I have to agree; I hope Shinodage agrees to a happy ending for Delta and family. I rarely get wrapped up in OCs, but this whole family deserves to be happy. Even if it's kinky family "fun." There's just something about them. A lot of that is contributed to your excellent writing. But, I've started following the Tumblr, and well...I like them!
From the summary. *by (???)
Looks interesting.
8655483
Hm? I don't understand.
8655483
But is a typo for by in the short description.
The ending was confusing until I read this part again. Just...man that's sad.
8663115
Thanks! I try to punch my readers in the feel-sack as much as possible. Glad I scored I hit with you!
I kinda want to see gyp come back again now.
8664477
Eh, the kid's alright, don't worry about him! We might see him in the background sometime, who knows.
8664987
Honestly, I've looked extensively into these three characters, Apogee, Delta, and Jet, I gotta say I like your take on Delta the best so far. I can really feel her internal struggles when she talks to Gyp in the later part of the story.
8665247
Interesting! Parts of the ending were written by my editor. You may really like his upcoming Delta fic!
8666302
Oh? Who's the editor? So I can keep an eye out for the new Delta Story.
8666352
That's xRei, who has been doing a great job on this and many other Space Ponyos stories
8671521
Sweet thanks. I love these Ponyo stories.
8671526
Awesome!
Spread the word
There's also a group for them! I know you're already in there and admire your dedication 👍 more content will come soon™
Have a feeling that Gypsum might probably end up singing this song in a bar somewhere. I know I would.
This has nothing to do with this story, but I really want to see Jet and Delta get back together. I know the characters aren't yours, but it always kills a little piece of me to read about a post-divorce mother and father with no closure or happy ending. That little piece of me is also a spoiled little bitch who believes in Santa Claus.
8733347
Hey I hear you my man.
Nothing I would like more than to write that story. But sometimes we all have to hurt a little bit for the good feels to feel even better when they finally arrive.
Great story, good read, enjoyed it. That's all.
I have to stop. It's a great story, don't get me wrong.
But damn I cannot handle awkward. I need to recede into my hide-y hole so nobody can see me smiling like the doof I am.
8944945
Can't handle as 8n you like to much? Or as in it's inducing too much cringe?
Etiher way thanks for the comment!
8947369
It's my secret bread and butter. I get super self conscious about where I laugh.
Okay, I finished the story. So did Gyp accidentally impregnate her and that's the reason she's hurting or is it because she's got nobody to snuggle with for the rest of her days?
8955011
???
Naw Gyp was just crab meat to delta.
But Delta has a lot of baggage from when she had a relationship with jet, her ex
I regret not reading this sooner, my Read Later list is so backed up and dusty it's depressing. I love how different each writer has portrayed Delta Vee in our own ways. No two portrayals are the same, and surprisingly I am loving the results.
I'm still flabbergasted as to how you use such a fast pacing in your stories without it feeling rushed. Even more unbelievable is the character development you pull off at that high a speed. It's incredible.
Well done, well done indeed.
Also -
1: I like this tradition very much.
2: Yes, clearly my fic was better, with it's lack of character development and rubbish starting spot.
3: Thank you.
9041823
Dude thank you! You leave the nicest comments!
Can't wait until you pen your next SP fic!!!
Love the story, thumbs up from me.
Had to re-read this part three times though-
-it hurts my brain.
11651978
I apologise, this story was an attempt by me to write an entire clopfiction in a single 4 hour flight on an airplane... on my phone.
There were... issues.